The Beast In the Basement Part 11 (875 hits)
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Submitted by Anansie (View user info) at 2004-02-24 20:55:50 EST
Part 1: http://www.ubersite.com/m/23801
Part 2: http://www.ubersite.com/m/23902
Part 3: http://www.ubersite.com/m/23978
Part 4: http://www.ubersite.com/m/24070
Part 5: http://www.ubersite.com/m/24256
Part 6: http://www.ubersite.com/m/24411
Part 7: http://www.ubersite.com/m/24512
Part 8: http://www.ubersite.com/m/24931
Part 9: http://www.ubersite.com/m/25150
Part 10: http://www.ubersite.com/m/25444
Note: As always, If you haven't read the other parts, then none of this will make any sense.
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Jason led them along a sort of natural, rough path, the kind you always seemed to find in the woods. If you followed these paths long enough, you'd likely get lost; most of them dwindled out or ended in barriers of brambles and bushes. This path, however, ended in a small clearing. The stench hit Annie before the four of them even reached it.
Blood on the trees. Blood on the grass. The pungent odor of it mingled with the scent of pine to create a rank perfume. There were great gouges on some of the trees, as though a huge cat or something had sharpened its claws upon them. Bits of what looked like flesh, with tufts of light brown fur clinging to them, were strewn about. And bugs. Bugs were everywhere. The bits of flesh crawled with them, they surrounded and smears and drops of congealed blood. Something had been killed here. No, something had been fucking obliterated here.
"Holy shit . . ." Maggie breathed.
"Yeah." Micah absently replied.
Jason, Micah, and Maggie slowly walked around. The beam of the flashlight darted around, lighting on bits and pieces of horror. Jason had a running commentary on the scene, and the other two interjected with questions and comments of their own.
Annie paid no attention to them. She didn't like this. It was dark. She couldn't see. This place stank. She was sweating in spite of the cool night air. She felt antsy. Not just because of the blood and flesh scattered about her feet. No. It wasn't just that. Something was wrong. The back of her neck tingled and she brushed her palm against the tiny, upright hairs on it. Her muscles twitched involuntarily, telling her to get the hell out of here. Get out of here right now.
"Hey guys, I think we should leave."
"I mean, look at that, man, the thing's claws must've been huge . . ."
"Guys! We should leave. Now!"
"It's ok, Annie, nothing that big could sneak up on us without us hearing it."
"I don't like it here and I want to go."
"This is important, Annie. Whatever did this might have killed my brothers." Maggie's big, solemn eyes were barely visible in the moonlight.
"And my sister."
Annie fell silent for a moment. She stared hard at the trees around her. The feeling that something was watching her was very strong now. So strong as to be inarguable. She felt it in her body, that twitchy urge to just run as far and as fast as she could back to civilization. Back to houses and electric lights and grown ups.
"Guys, I think there is something here. With us." Annie hissed, her voice low and urgent. If they didn't agree with her she was just going to have to go herself. This was unbearable.
"Dammit, Annie. Quit being such a fucking crybaby." Jason spat.
"I'm serious. I can feel it. Can't you? Christ, I can fucking feel it on my skin."
She rubbed her arms. It felt like feather-light fingers were crawling all over her body. The air was thick.
"I don't know, Jason." Micah interrupted. "Maybe we should go. It is pretty damn creepy here."
"I wanna stay." Maggie chimed.
Annie closed her eyes for a moment and rubbed her temples. She couldn't take this. It was too much. The blood, the crawling feeling, the putrid air.
Suddenly a shard of awareness sliced through her mind. She turned.
The eyes were large and slanted upward at their outer edges. The moonlight cast its light upon them, and they gleamed red and wicked.
Annie felt her body turn and her feet stumble into a run in the direction they came from. She felt her mouth and vocal cords form the word "run," but she didn't hear it. She only heard the thump, thump, thump of her blood, pulsing its drumbeat in her ears. It drowned out all sensation. It drowned out all thought. She ran.
Dimly she was aware of her companions around her. They darted ahead and fell behind. They ran at her side. They were a herd. They were being run down. The weakest would fall. She hoped it wasn't her.
She saw the other three. They were ahead. She was last. Oh, God, she was last. It was behind her. She could hear it crashing through the bushes. She could hear the pounding of its feet on the ground. Very close. So very close. Her heartbeat. Thumpthumpthumpthumpthump. No. NO. She ran faster. She tripped.
She fell.
It was close enough for her to hear it breathing. She did not think. She pushed herself up with her arms, got her knees under her.
Bright pinpoints of pain seared the right side of her back as she was slammed back down to the earth, legs and arms buckling beneath her. She lay on her stomach. The creature's claws remained imbedded in her flesh. She felt a new pressure, on her left side, as though the thing was resting its weight upon her. Its claws sunk into the left side of her back.
Now, she could feel everything. She felt its breath, hot and heavy, on the back of her neck. She felt the blood run down her shoulders and back in rivulets, pooling at the small of her back and on the ground. The sticks and stones and thorns beneath her dug into her flesh. She had one last coherent thought before she fainted.
"I am going to die."
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Submitted by orph (user info) at 2007-02-09 11:56:55 EST (#)
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Submitted by MyNameIsTim (user info) at 2006-06-02 11:57:34 EDT (#)
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woah.
Submitted by Rads_wife (user info) at 2005-06-13 23:09:02 EDT (#)
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http://www.ubersite.com/m/68315
WINNER!!! WINNER!!!!
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-01-03 19:20:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
can't comment now... must go directly to next installment!
Submitted by JohnGalt (user info) at 2004-04-07 23:22:08 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Deisangua (user info) at 2004-04-07 17:49:21 EDT (#)
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Submitted by lordofthepost (user info) at 2004-03-03 03:08:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Almost there!
Submitted by Sideburns (user info) at 2004-02-27 03:44:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
She better not die. Because the flashbacks from when she was older wouldn't make any sense.
:P
Submitted by henman (user info) at 2004-02-26 21:10:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
kick ass--
Submitted by shag_rat (user info) at 2004-02-26 20:21:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2004-02-25 23:23:29 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks guys. Don't worry Shark. They don't bother me. Everyone is entitled to their own opinions. I'm going to keep going until this is finished.
Submitted by Heimdallsman (user info) at 2004-02-25 14:56:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Great series!
Just read 'em all, I'm gonna have to get caught up at work tomorrow, I guess.
Good work, and keep 'em coming.
--HeimdallsMan
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2004-02-25 12:48:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Malone, you are funny. I think I might actually do that when I get done with this. Be on the look out for it.
Submitted by fell-8-me (user info) at 2004-02-25 12:43:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Loving it, just read parts 1-11.
For some reason I'm wondering what part the car-rental guy (Jamie Tannin?) plays (besides renting out cars). I suspect him as being the "master" of the beast.
Now off to +2 all the others...
Submitted by ChipSlice <mmvvmm> at 2004-02-25 11:44:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice. Please don't wait two more weeks to finish!
Submitted by shark25 (user info) at 2004-02-25 09:34:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
THANK YOU!! I was going through withdrawls. Another great installment. Don't listen to squattail and koolmang whose over all rankings are -.27 and -.40 while yours is 1.68. Keep up the good work.
Submitted by Lucifer_Industries (user info) at 2004-02-25 05:17:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Goddammit why don't you do a fucking post about me called "The Beast in my Pants: A Tale of Horrors"? That story could be amazing. However, I don't think that it should soley be about my pants or a beast but should serve as the introduction to a sidekick character named "Bells" who is a faggot with a black belt in Judo.
I envison this taking place over a 5 part mini-story with the last chapter being a two parter.
Make sense?,
Malone
Submitted by KoolMang (user info) at 2004-02-24 23:49:18 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I agree with Squattail. If you all don't stop your fucking continuations of your "Sagas", then I shall continue my erotic fiction saga.
Submitted by squattail (user info) at 2004-02-24 21:55:21 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Why does every fucking story on this site always include every cliched description there is? WTF? Here's a thought, write something interesting, that way it might not have to drag on to part 11 and beyond. I think you are sucking an already shit idea dry.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2004-02-24 21:43:57 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Um, Yes, did you rate the wrong post?
Tak, no of course she's not going to die.
Submitted by TaK (user info) at 2004-02-24 21:27:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice. But she's not gonna die because we've seen her as an adult right?
Submitted by Yes (user info) at 2004-02-24 21:20:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
HAHAHA! Now that is GOLDEN! Fucking pure comedic genius!
Submitted by squattail (user info) at 2004-02-24 21:06:52 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Don't be sorry. I am glad I haven't seen this shit on the front page in a while. The whole thing is just shit.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2004-02-24 20:56:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
For those who have actually been reading this, thanks, and I'm sorry this took so long.