The Spark (510 hits)
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Submitted by <daswk.at.yahoo.com> (View user info) at 2004-03-05 08:24:14 EST
There sits a trifle little thing
Just as they expect it to be
Of no importance to Wretch or King
Cold, dark, and void of originality
All it takes is a spark
Energy from some unkown spirit
And no more is it dark
The world stops as it gazes at that which is different
But it is short lived
For that is the nature of such things
To burn bright for just an instant as it gives
All that it is, it dies releasing it feelings
Dark ash serves as a reminder to thee
As a warning if you yearn
To have a life that is bright and free
You must Suffer, Toil and Burn
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Submitted by K.M (user info) at 2004-03-05 12:53:31 EST (#)
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"All it takes is a spark
Energy from some unkown spirit
And no more is it dark
The world stops as it gazes at that which is different
But it is short lived
For that is the nature of such things
To burn bright for just an instant as it gives
All that it is, it dies releasing it feelings "
I really liked that part, in particular. However, I think you should work on it still, things like "as it gazes at that which is different" needs to be edited, to still fit the theme, but to scale it down for better flow.
Submitted by Swik (user info) at 2004-03-05 12:45:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Pleasently disguted? That's a new one to me.
Submitted by Deisangua (user info) at 2004-03-05 08:44:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Not bad at all...
Submitted by squattail (user info) at 2004-03-05 08:37:09 EST (#)
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I thought this was going to be about the spark's fat test.
I was pleasantly disgusted and dissapointed.