A Poem, Please forgive me (705 hits)
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Submitted by TMA (View user info) at 2004-04-04 17:36:25 EDT
There you are
In that, it is me
And Who am i?
As you glanced at me
From where you were,
Forever changed,
Or forever more?
The sound of control
The strength of many
Upon the water
The waves came crashing down
Drowning Drowning
Who am I?
As you glanced at me,
I am the boy
Whom drowned that day
Please remember
And don't forget about me
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Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2004-04-05 07:41:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by jwlmar10 (user info) at 2004-04-05 03:22:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
What the fuck? Was that a joke? That was the stupidest poem ever.
At least you're not acting like a jackass.
-1
Submitted by stupidwhiteguy (user info) at 2004-04-05 01:28:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
falling falling
in a hole
Your hole, my hole,
forever more.
I see your face,
i see your lips
it touches me ever so gently
as i fall
and fall
in the hole of your love
deep and eternal
forever more
Bam! right off the top of my head. Poetry has gotta be the easiest thing ever.
Submitted by SpikeGoddess (user info) at 2004-04-05 01:20:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
More please.
Submitted by chipolatte (user info) at 2004-04-05 01:05:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
not shabby
Submitted by shitfuck (user info) at 2004-04-04 19:24:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
weak.
ever heard of imagery? try that instead of your fucking cry baby bull shit.
Submitted by RideJohnnyRide (user info) at 2004-04-04 19:18:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
To counteract douchebags, and I'm always amused at a decent post by you
Submitted by sfulorettoPA (user info) at 2004-04-04 18:36:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i like this alot
Submitted by DraconianKing (user info) at 2004-04-04 18:34:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
YELLOW GAS ATTACK!
heh, YellowMan sucks. I hate poetry, excepting dirty limericks.
Submitted by Electro (user info) at 2004-04-04 18:09:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
english teachers would be tossing a+'s to you. :)
Submitted by Razor (user info) at 2004-04-04 17:51:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Freight_Train (user info) at 2004-04-04 17:49:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
eehhh..
Submitted by FleetEnemaBadass (user info) at 2004-04-04 17:47:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Where's Yellow Man? We need Yellow Gas!
Submitted by maiorano84 (user info) at 2004-04-04 17:42:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I drowned once. Did not feel too good.
Submitted by drink_DDT (user info) at 2004-04-04 17:37:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Your most useful post ever. I love you.
Submitted by The.Masked.Assailant (user info) at 2004-04-04 17:37:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
i know it's a shitty poem, but it's the best i could do in 10minutes.