Asphalt (596 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: 1.47 on 26 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by SpikeGoddess (View user info) at 2004-04-14 02:21:06 EDT
Asphalt
Scrape scrape scrape on the asphalt
scrape scrape scrape on the asphalt
scrape scrape scrape on the asphalt
Scream scrape scrape on the asphalt scream
Recording reeling feeling of your hot blood legs
Of your hollow bruised breast
Of your hammer-heart hoping for an
Out out out of this damned spot
Scrape scrape scraped on the asphalt
Scraped scraped scraped before the
Punch pink cheek where your tears traced streaks
Gritty gravel in your teeth as you grovel in the street
And you
"Please"
And you
Plead
"Pleasepleasepleaseplease"
But you know
As you "no"
That there just isn't anyplace your screams can go.
Asphalt tastes of rust and rubber
Burns like flames against raw skin
Smells like distant burning buildings
Black like smoke in fetid air
So your wiggle out your body and you ask your soul to leave
Leave red knees and your pleas and the hollow-hearted heaves
Leave this asphalt
Leave this street blown with shriveled fall leaves
Scrape on the asphalt.
And he takes you on the asphalt.
Rapes you on the asphalt.
My fault my fault my fault
What a stupid short skirt whore I am
My fault dragged drugged slugged on the asphalt
Stupid walkhomealoneshortskirt whore
What did you expect, highheelslut?
(It seems that the stars are always the same.
Quiet when you need them
Quiet when you don't.)
Your hands fasten the high heels around your ankles, smooth your skirt over shaky thighs.
Bloody hot red knees scraped scraped
Raped---
No.
You will walk with long strides.
Your shoes will click gently on the asphal—
Pavement.
Your shoes will click gently on the pavement.
User Reviews
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2004-06-23 13:04:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Holy shit.
Submitted by seckzrebel (user info) at 2004-04-15 04:14:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Scrape on the asphalt.
And he takes you on the asphalt.
Rapes you on the asphalt.
My fault my fault my fault
What a stupid short skirt whore I am
My fault dragged drugged slugged on the asphalt
Stupid walkhomealoneshortskirt whore
What did you expect, highheelslut?
^--my favorite part. + super2 for that...I like it alot.
~~seckzrebel
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2004-04-14 21:01:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
thats beautiful. i nominate spikegoddess to be the official uberpoet on ubersite. she already is in an unofficial manner, but it should be official.
ps- i dredged up a poem for reallyboreds meat post. dont worry, i wont be stealing your uberpoet title anytime soon.
Submitted by Scott_James (user info) at 2004-04-14 18:43:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Phinch (user info) at 2004-04-14 18:38:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
very rhythmic. This is a great poem. Fun to read outloud.
ps. I thynk i mite haf spelld rithmik write.
Submitted by TaK (user info) at 2004-04-14 10:35:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Sad and beautiful.
Bloody and clean.
I like your poetry as much as I like you Spike.
Submitted by vergedor (user info) at 2004-04-14 09:26:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Needs music... We already feel the rythm. Goog song. I like the part about the stars.
Submitted by AlwaysAnEagle (user info) at 2004-04-14 09:23:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Excellent.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-04-14 08:31:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn... godamn. This is amazing... really, awesomely good. Teach me, Spikey?
How is it possible to be inspired, and at the same time, want to never write again?
Submitted by Deisangua (user info) at 2004-04-14 08:01:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I particularly liked the MacBeth reference (of course).
Submitted by I_Have_a_Kristen_Fetish (user info) at 2004-04-14 07:40:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by SPE (user info) at 2004-04-14 05:24:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Ainkara (user info) at 2004-04-14 05:08:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow
Submitted by Falco (user info) at 2004-04-14 04:40:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Its good, and i think that slypher may have made up for the -2
Submitted by SpikeGoddess (user info) at 2004-04-14 03:27:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Slypher,
I'm sorry you're in a bad mood and I hope you'll feel better soon. The funny thing is that this rhymes more than most of my poetry. There is more to poetry, in my opinion, than rhyme. Sound is very important, but a good sound scheme doesn't always include rhyme. You're welcome to prefer poems that rhyme though. That's why we all have our own unique tastes.
Submitted by Slypher (user info) at 2004-04-14 03:19:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
OK, now I'm done.
Submitted by Slypher (user info) at 2004-04-14 03:19:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Maybe one more...
Submitted by Slypher (user info) at 2004-04-14 03:19:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
OK, that should do it, right?
Submitted by Slypher (user info) at 2004-04-14 03:19:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Really.
Submitted by Slypher (user info) at 2004-04-14 03:19:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I shouldn't inflict my own bad mood on your posts
Submitted by Slypher (user info) at 2004-04-14 03:18:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Really, I hope this kinda makes up for it
Submitted by Slypher (user info) at 2004-04-14 03:18:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm sorry, I feel bad,
Submitted by Slypher (user info) at 2004-04-14 03:07:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Come the fuck ON. We all know this isn't poetry. It's the so-called "Stream" poetry. Makes me sick. What happened to the rhymes, asswipes. Come on. Sorry, but I hate things now.
Submitted by mystiamoon (user info) at 2004-04-14 02:53:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Falco (user info) at 2004-04-14 02:32:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice one spike
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2004-04-14 02:24:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
POETRY IS THE GHEY WTFOMG -2 -2 -2 -2 -2 -2
aaaaaaaawww, fuck this one's good too.