Captive Audience (516 hits)
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Rating: 1.75 on 11 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Circe <feral_pet.at.yahoo.com> (View user info) at 2004-04-19 09:26:32 EDT
I have you here now. You can't say you won't listen. No, you can't. NO YOU CAN'T!
I'm sorry. I'm sorry... don't cry. You're so pretty.. please, don't cry. I'm sorry I shouted, and hit you, but you won't listen, none of you will listen, and it's going to be too late.
I can hear them. At night. They never make a sound if there's anybody here, but when it's just me, I can hear them. When they laugh it's like glass breaking. They're quiet during the day. I wrote it in my notebooks. I have notebooks, so you have to listen, I have it written down, I have lists, no DON'T YOU TURN AWAY FROM ME.
The breaking glass aching pain laughing at night.
My head... my head... they only come out at night, but I think they do something to the wires in the roof to make my brain burn during the day.
Stop crying and listen.
Stop that snivelling sound of broken crying hurt, they'll hear, they'll come, why aren't you afraid of them?
I need to tell you. I brought you here to tell you because I saw you and you're so pretty, pretty with your crying eyes, and they might hurt you if you don't know about the notebooks.
Did I tell you about the notebooks? You have to know about them because my burning light seared things in the wires brain forgets but the notebooks remember.
Don't cry. They'll come. They'll come. They laugh and you cry and it all sounds like glass and my head oh my poor head....
I'm sorry the ropes are tight. They have to be tight so that you listen. You won't listen if I let you run-scamper-scuttle and if you don't know then you won't know. I have notebooks. It's all in there. I've written letters but I think they know.
No.
No.
No.
NO crying, no snivelling, no more sound of broken glass and pain that eats me like they do in the night and you should be afraid, but not of me, never of me, I just want to help you, save you, make sure you know so that you can know.
They'll come if you cry. It's nightime now, and they can come whenever they want.
You don't want to listen and you keep crying, you won't stop that CRYING, and the crying calls them, calls them from the wires and the roof and the dark-in-the-day places where they live.
I won't let you call them.
User Reviews
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2007-04-23 05:43:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I really like your fragmentary stuff.
It's difficult to do well, one of my favourite styles, and you make it work.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2006-12-10 13:07:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You don't want to listen and you keep crying, you won't stop that CRYING, and the crying calls them, calls them from the wires and the roof and the dark-in-the-day places where they live.
I won't let you call them
Submitted by Wish_I_Were (user info) at 2004-09-12 03:20:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Reminds me vaguely of the writing in one of my fav books The Tin Drum by gunther grass.
Submitted by PatheticCapitalistFuck (user info) at 2004-09-12 02:44:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 to offset Falco's obvious stupidity.
Submitted by Jo_of_the_golden_P (user info) at 2004-09-12 02:43:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
nice
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2004-09-12 02:31:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Falco (user info) at 2004-09-11 22:13:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Crap
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2004-04-19 11:34:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 for knowing the importance of keeping notebooks.
Submitted by Jays567 (user info) at 2004-04-19 10:10:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Reminded me of something the Texas Chainsaw Massacre guy would say.
Submitted by lowsodiummonkey (user info) at 2004-04-19 09:53:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
the hurt my brain.
here's some payback - http://www.ubersite.com/m/14532
feel the burn.
Submitted by shark25 (user info) at 2004-04-19 09:52:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
well written