Circles (826 hits)
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Submitted by Luther (View user info) at 2004-04-27 11:52:12 EDT
Sitting down with my cup of tea, I sighed a deep sigh. A sigh of relief, perhaps. The day was finally almost over. No more phone calls, no more running, no more fixing, no more problem solving. As my thoughts surrounded me and I drifted into a peaceful relaxation, I was jolted back into reality by the cry of what had become my worst enemy. I contemplated letting the machine pick up. But I had already learned that ignoring him only brought him closer. My heart raced as I reached for the receiver. My mind was racing, screaming, pleading with the phone not to let him be on the other end. With one word, my fears were confirmed, and my world was forever changed.
"Please, just stop." I begged. Over and over again I begged as I listened to the engine revving on the other end. My stomach wrenched with every word, and nearly erupted every time I heard myself say "stop." That word has never worked for me. It seems when I beg or plead for anything to stop, no one can hear me, no matter how loud I scream. "Why should I?" he screamed. His voice was so out of control it scared me. It was surely the beast that lived within him who was speaking to me, and not my dear, sweet boy. Chills went down my spine like it was jumping out of my skin. "Because I love you" was all that I could bring myself to say. I hate to lie, but it seemed that my words were going to be the only thing that kept that old, rusty white car where it was.
We screamed, and cried, and talked in circles for 6 hours. A circle is never ending. No matter what he said, I knew we'd end up right back at "Please, just stop!" His emotions seemed to change like a chameleon, walking across a Picasso. I'm not sure what I finally said that sent him sailing. I tried to be compassionate with my every word. Even when he said "this is all your fault, I want you to listen closely now" I tried with all of my heart and soul, every ounce of my being, to make the engine stop. I heard the stones hitting the fenders as I screamed, for one last time, "Please, just stop!"
Not all circles are never-ending. The only thing that "stop" has ever done for me is exactly what it's not supposed to be able to do. The circle has stopped. With one final scream, one that has etched itself forever in my mind and soul, the line went dead.
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Submitted by Zoidberg (user info) at 2004-10-22 02:27:00 EDT (#)
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huh are you back or not?
Submitted by sweetprayline (user info) at 2004-05-12 17:21:17 EDT (#)
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I liked it a lot. You could go in so many directions with it.
p.s. thanks for your review ;)
Submitted by mystiamoon (user info) at 2004-04-29 05:54:07 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Jester at 2004-04-29 05:49:15 EDT (#)
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Think i got it now, either way its enough to keep my mind happy. Thanks
Submitted by Jester at 2004-04-29 05:44:44 EDT (#)
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Thanks Luther, I'll spend a while musing over it today at work.
Submitted by Kichigai (user info) at 2004-04-29 05:44:43 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Luther (user info) at 2004-04-28 10:58:27 EDT (#)
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Well Jester. It's about a guy who kills himself. Does that help?
Submitted by Jester at 2004-04-28 10:48:01 EDT (#)
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What was in the authors mind when this piece was written. Basically, what's it about?
Submitted by Luther (user info) at 2004-04-28 09:35:13 EDT (#)
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What do you want to know, Jester?
Submitted by Jester at 2004-04-28 07:11:33 EDT (#)
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Forgive me for sounding simple. I have been reading on the site for a while. And have never commented. I've been looking at the story quite thoroughly. I have discovered a couple of theories of the story and the authors intend. But I am not sure I'm right. For some reason it's vexxing me. Can anyone explain? Cause right now I can't get my head round it
Submitted by Papajoe (user info) at 2004-04-27 16:18:52 EDT (#)
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I liked the subtley, but it took me a bit to figure it out. That is a good thing though. ;p
Submitted by Luther (user info) at 2004-04-27 14:15:34 EDT (#)
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you should throw something at the dad really hard.
ps Thanks
Submitted by youarsoghey (user info) at 2004-04-27 13:45:58 EDT (#)
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Very good.
p.s. I'm watching some asshole outside my window yell at his son for not throwing a baseball hard enough. What a dickshit.