my dream...long(kind of) (546 hits)
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Submitted by Rheasha Williams <hippichick_10.at.hotmail.com> (View user info) at 2004-05-25 18:56:17 EDT
*This was a dream I had last night, I thought I was getting off of Uber, but I was convinced not to take this criticism to heart... so here it is.*
I was with my old friends, the ones I had before high school. It was Laurel, Rachel, Brandy, Stephanie, Kristina, Kriston and myself. I think if we knew all but 3 of us would die we wouldn't have went.
"Lets go out for a ride, Rheasha." She told me, I wiped the dreary fog from my eyes. reached for my glassess and looked at my living room full of my friends. "I just woke up, let me get awake, I don't want to hurt anyone." I said as I sat up. Brandy went into the bathroom to brush her hair and I stood up. I put on my make up, did my hair and changed clothes. In a half hour I was ready.
I got into the drivers side of the car, turned it on and backed out of the driveway. Listening to the Ramones we cruised down the highway. After 3 hours we reached our destination. An old town that a virus infected and everyone died in. The town had yet to be occupied, I mean only 2,000,000,000 people survived the virus. We pulled up into an old mall, with broken windows, there were still clothes and food in there, but we just wanted to be curiouse, and maybe take some stuff....
We went into the mall, turned on the lights and decided to make it party central. I don't know why we didn't notice the people looking through the window, but I know we didn't. I was walking back to the jeep to get a knife to take the tags off some clothes I took, when I saw a car, it was red, a mazda. I knew it wasn't there at first. ]
When I walked back into the mall there was a person laying on the floor.....I looked down and swallowed a scream as my old best friend Laurel lay dead on the floor. I didn't want to move for fear of the person that did that to her was in the room. I thought maybe if I ran into the other room they wouldn't know what I was doing. I quietly ran into the party room... nobody seemed to notice that Laurel hasn't returned. I went to my friends told them to go to the car, we ran to the car and I floored it.
Finally, Rachel asked what was wrong, I noticed the red mazda following us when I explained what had happened. A look of pure panic took over there faces, I didn't know what to do if I went home those people would know where I lived. I told them not to look behind us, and we went into a gas station. Kristina filled the car up with gas while we all went inside and told the store clerk those people were following us, but we couldn't explain because they walked in. I went back to the car and wrote a note to the store clerk telling him to call the police, wrote down my license plate number, there license plate number, and gave it to the cashier.
We went back to the jeep and started driving, I guess the people where going to wait, so I turned some corners, hoping they would lose track of us, and I myself got lost. Soon enough, the red mazda passed us, it flew ahead, we didn't know what to do. I just kept going waiting for a safe place to turn around.
We actually went back to that old mall, still luminescent because we didn't turn off the lights when suddenly my tire popped, this forced us to go outside. The people, actually an older couple and two younger couples, we were chased into the old mall, Rachel and I stayed together but the others left us.
First we went into an old video game store, we hid behind the counter and we saw the man come into the store. I could feel Rachel's body stiffen with fear as soon as he walked in and I stopped breathing. The man then turned around and walked out, I guess he didn't think we were in there, after about 10 minutes we ran out.
We went into an elevator with Brandy and Kristina, they whispered to us telling us that the people killed Kriston already and they weren't stopping. Brandy went through one hall, Kristina through the other, me and rachel went into the bathroom.
I went and stood on a toilet and told Rachel to stand in the stall and be ready to move. I lifted the cieling tile and pulled myself up there, told Rachel to stand on the toilet, and pulled her up.
I replaced the cieling tile, so they wouldn't think to look up there and we whispered our plan:
We would crawl over to the guns and hunting equiptment make sure it was empty, go down there get a couple guns, arrows, bows, whatever it took and then we would try to kill them.
We got our ammunition, and then we were found.
They had Rachel with a gun to her head and her without a way to fight back, I shot the man with the crossbow and Rachel looked at me, silently thanked me and grabbed his gun. The woman came after me, I trusted Rachel to help me if I needed it, and started running, she tried to remain unseen but within shooting distance of the woman, I ran around an asle and the woman stopped in front of this big grill, I had a cooler right in front of me, so I pushed the cooler and it went right in her path she fell into the grill, I shut the grill and turned it on. (it was gass powered)
Rachel brought over a chain and a padlock and we locked the woman in there, to burn to death.
We knew there were 4 more people to deal with, and we didn't know if the others where dead, I could hear the woman screaming in pain, my mind was fogged with the victory, but I knew I had to go on. Just then Brandy came into the store, we told her we killed the older people, she was scared, we then saw something that may save our life.
BULLETPROOF VESTS..... of course with a shot to the head these don't help any but we put them on anyway. We grabbed walkie talkies and Rachel and I split up. I went into an old American Eagle, I don't know my way around that store but I know there are racks, so I go inside look around, found it empty and waited.
I knew the way my company walked so I could easily distinguish them from the 4 killers in the dark, a person walked in, squatted and started talking to themselves. "I can't believe I shot her, I can't believe it." Put a gun to there head and shot themselves. The blow stunned me then I looked at the person, I didn't know if it was okay to talk to Rachel, when she two-wayed me "was that you, are you ohkay" I replied, "A man just came in and killed himself, we only have 3 people left." "Shhh.... she replied, one is close." and I think she turned off her walkie.
I walked out of the American Eagle and into the security room... I looked at the security camera's I knew exactly where everyone was, I needed to keep the 3 people out of this room. I saw the man that just shot himself, I saw Laurel, I saw what I think was Kriston, and I saw Kristina laying on the floor, dead, lifeless. I saw Brandy, waiting to die, and I saw Rachel, waiting to fight. I also saw the three people, one couple didn't look like they where interested in killing, they were handcuffed to a pole where I assume they were to meet there deaths.
So really we only had to kill one person. And that person was in the theatre searching.
I walked to the theatre constantly alert, saw the person, and shot her.
I went back into the Security office and said over the intercome that everyone was dead and told them to meet me in front of foot locker where the couple was help captive. The couple heard the announcment, assumed that we would kill them and stood still, waiting for there lives to end.
"Hello." I said, I didn't have handcuff keys so I didn't know how to free them. They told me the woman had them, well shit, she was burned. So we got a welder and took them off like that. I walked with dignity to my car, scared still, and found Stephanie, also dead.
I can't believe we lived, I looked at Rachel, who was silently crying, and at Brandy who was in shock as it started to rain.
User Reviews
Submitted by Fixer (user info) at 2004-05-26 16:33:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
These should help with proofreading:
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http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/grammar/g_spelhomo.html
Reading difficult literature helps too.
+1 because I liked the suspense and simple, quick action
Submitted by Captin (user info) at 2004-05-26 13:20:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I LOVE YOU, GOD!
Submitted by angelic_scars (user info) at 2004-05-26 13:10:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
ITs pronounced
RAY-SHA
and for the record:
IM WHITE
AND STOP FLAMING ME DAMNIT
Submitted by thinning_temples (user info) at 2004-05-26 09:47:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Persevere, kiddo.
Submitted by lojope (user info) at 2004-05-26 09:39:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
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Ranking: -2
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This better fucking work!
Badass.
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Best thing I have ever seen!!
Submitted by Fleet_Marshall_Badass (user info) at 2004-05-26 09:35:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
AWESOME! IT FUCKING WORKED!
By the way, I just realised that you like to call yourself "hippychick" as an email moniker. It's stupid, and so are you.
Badass.
Submitted by WRECKER (user info) at 2004-05-26 09:25:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I was with my old friends, the ones I had before high school. It was Laurel, Rachel, Brandy, Stephanie, Kristina, Kriston and myself. I think if we knew all but 3 of us would die we wouldn't have went.
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This is as far as I got and I almost took my paintball gun and put it to my temple. Then I realized hopefully you impale yourself on a spoon and die and never do any more to annoy the living fuck out of people.
Submitted by Fleet_Marshall_Badass (user info) at 2004-05-26 09:01:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
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This better fucking work!
Badass.
Submitted by Fleet_Marshall_Badass (user info) at 2004-05-26 08:18:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
FUCK SHIT BUGGER FUCK ARSE!!!
YOU'RE FUCKING SHIT YOU STUPID FUCKING BITCH!!
Badass.
Submitted by Fleet_Marshall_Badass (user info) at 2004-05-26 08:18:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
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Submitted by hacksawfonnix (user info) at 2004-05-26 08:13:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
There is nothing worse than listening to someone tell you about a dream they had:
http://www.ubersite.com/m/34104
Submitted by Fleet_Marshall_Badass (user info) at 2004-05-26 08:06:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
FUCK! That didn't work. Oh well...
YOU'RE SHIT!
Badass.
Submitted by Fleet_Marshall_Badass (user info) at 2004-05-26 08:05:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
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Badass.
Submitted by Burn (user info) at 2004-05-26 07:35:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
How old are you?
If you're 11 or something then fair enough, but this was utter bullshit.
Submitted by BalloonKnot (user info) at 2004-05-26 07:17:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Balloon Knot has spoken!
Submitted by SausageKing (user info) at 2004-05-26 02:26:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Dean's Dream is my favourite.
Submitted by lojope (user info) at 2004-05-25 23:17:23 EDT (#)
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How DO you say your name?
Submitted by angelic_scars (user info) at 2004-05-25 22:44:25 EDT (#)
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Hey I_have_a_kristen_fetish do you even know how to pronounce my name?
Submitted by I_Have_a_Kristen_Fetish (user info) at 2004-05-25 22:18:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I had a dream that I licked Rheasha's bum... Oh wait, wrong dream, wrong bum...
Submitted by WiKi (user info) at 2004-05-25 19:36:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
shitfuck, I live for your reviews.
Submitted by frozen-vodka (user info) at 2004-05-25 19:36:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
One's dreams are only interesting to oneself, and possibly the people your subconscious killed off. Also, bad grammar and improper spelling annoys me.
Submitted by Rainer (user info) at 2004-05-25 19:20:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
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Submitted by shitfuck (user info) at 2004-05-25 19:10:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
You know you're getting worse right?
Submitted by BillsSBChamps (user info) at 2004-05-25 19:05:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I saved myself the trouble of reading this crap and just issued what it deserves -2.