Succubus (14975 hits)
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Submitted by Fleadh <fleadh1.at.eircom.net> (View user info) at 2004-05-28 09:55:18 EDT
There was something about her that the boy found irresistible. She sat on her own reading one of those cash desk rack women's magazines and sipping a straight Jack Daniels. The lad simply couldn't take his eyes off her. It was the superman tee-shirt that the young Irish guy was most drawn to. Somehow it just seemed out of place in this small bar slap-bang in the middle of nowheresville Arizona. She was almost a stereotypically home grown American. Tall, long blonde hair, large firm breasts and small hips. The red white and blue of the tee-shirt just seemed to top it all off nicely. It was also a very obvious conversation starter and being the type of guy to never let such a blatant opening pass he went over and tried to turn on the charm.
The comment about her shirt was met with an ice cold stare followed by a mocking "pfft" as she turned back to her magazine. He cursed himself because really he should have known better. In fairness, when he taught about it, anyone who wears a bright superman tee-shirt is well used to and probably sick of people making stupid superman comments and innuendoes. He sat back in his chair and sulked inwardly whilst trying to put up a front of dignity. Supping on his beer he glanced over at her just as she did the same and momentarily their eyes met. He hastily diverted his eyes but hers remained. She looked straight at him and her gaze made him slightly uneasy. For a split second he felt like she wasn't actually looking at him per-sey but into him. He shrugged the uncomfortable feeling off as she turned back to her magazine.
The lad was just finishing up his drink when out of nowhere a fresh beer was put in front of him and the girl plonks herself down on the seat right in front of him. "Doreen" she said, offering him her hand. He shook her hand preying his shock was not transferred in the touch. All he muttered was "C". Doreen looked at him quizzically and jokingly commented that he didn't look Spanish. The lad laughed and explained that he found Americans tended to be unable to pronounce his name properly so he generally went by the name of C. She smiled broadly, he knew she was warming to him. "So you liked my tee-shirt then" she said matter-of-factly. "Yea, sorry, I'm sure you're sick and tired of hearing jackasses like me using it as an opening line" he said apologetically. She laughed and responded that it had been used once or twice in the past. He smiled broadly at her and she coyly smiled back. The ice was well and truly broken. For the next few beers they chatted and flirted until it the old man behind the bar started cleaning up.
They left the bar arm in arm. The boy was booked into the motel beside the bar and that was their next port of call. Inwardly he was still overjoyed and quite shocked that he had, on his first night in this hick town, scored with an incredibly hot local girl. The got to the chalet and he fumbled with his keys. He was cursing himself for his ungainliness as he was trying his very best to put up a facade of sobriety. After the very ropy start it had gone extraordinarily well and he didn't want to fuck it up on the last hurdle.
As soon as the door had closed she pushed him against the door and kissed him strongly on the lips. He responded lustfully. Her style of kissing was so perfectly how he liked it that he was momentarily distracted. Sensing this she broke away and led him to the bed. She pushed him playfully back and he sat down on the bed and she stood in front of him. He looked her up and down and in anticipation of what was to come he mentally undressed her. From what he could make out she was flawless. She took a step back to allow him a better view as if reading his thoughts. He looked her up and down and paused for a second admiring her breasts that the S of the superman symbol seemed to compliment so well. She smiled and jokingly said, " I really do have super powers, you know". The lad played along and asked what sort of powers did she possess. She gave him a dirty little smile and told him to be patient and the super powers would be revealed. The boy lay back and watched as started undressing for him.
Her body was the most flawless thing he had ever lain eyes on. Everything was exactly into his preferred proportions. Her breasts were full and round with a small perfectly centred nipple circled in dark pink. Her stomach was flat and well toned and her hips were shapely but small. She stood there wearing only a plain white thong. He lustfully looked her up and down and as his eyes scanned each part of her she responded in such a way as to make every single part of her ooze sex from the tips of her fingers to the arches of her feet. He kept thanking every deity he knew of for this. As far as he was concerned people like him never get to meet nymphs like this. Her body had a utopian perfection that hinted toward enhancement yet he somehow knew that body had never seen the knife.
He reached out to hold her but she looked at him in such a way that he instinctively withdrew his hands and returned them to his side on the bed. She leaned over and putting one hand down beside his head she kissed him. Again he was surprised at how incredibly good a kisser she was but tried not to let it show. Her other hand went down to his belt and with a remarkable show of skill she undid his belt and popped the buttons of his Levi's with just one hand. He noted that this act put his pride in being able to undo a bra with one hand to shame. She began to move downwards opening each of his shirt buttons with her teeth. She had 3 open and moved from side to side flicking the tips of his nipples with her tongue, He groaned in pleasure. Slowly she moved down undoing the rest of the buttons and then finally took him deeply into her mouth. The boys eyes rolled all the way back in his head with pleasure. She moved her hand up to his mouth and inserted 2 fingers and pushed his head slightly backwards so he could no longer directly see what she was doing. As she worked on him he indicated his extreme pleasure by lightly sucking on her fingertips. He couldn't see what she was doing but he never before had experienced anything like it. Waves upon waves of the purest pleasure swept over him.
With her fingers in his mouth he could only see upwards and back but strangely voyeuristically he could see what she was doing in shadow on the wall. As she worked on him the shadows became almost mesmerising. The more he looked the more it occurred to him that there was something strange about the shadows. He wondered what it could be but such thoughts were very short lived as the waves of pure unadulterated pleasure swept over him. He knew that the last thing he should be thinking about was the shadows but it was there like a tiny splinter in his mind. As he looked he began to realise that the shadows had a certain dimension of their own. He could see what she was doing in the shadow almost too perfectly. She had been building him up perfectly and she was beginning to raise the tempo. Still staring at the shadows as he was reaching climax he noticed his shadow fading and hers seemingly growing in density. With each wave of pleasure his shadow faded Just a little bit more. Oh god this was so unbelievable, he never felt anything so amazing in his entire life. He wanted to come so much and it was going to happen any second now. The closer he came to reaching critial the more he got freaked out by his shadow, It was almost completely gone and he could see her perfectly, almost like a black and white film. When he came it was the most exquisite pleasure he had ever felt. As he emptied into her mouth he felt that his seed and his life and his being were shooting from him with every pulse. drained and dazed he was sure he was going to pass out. His final thought before he actually did was that there was only one light source in the room and that was from the overhead bulb. It couldn't possibly have cast the shadows he had been watching.
The old bartender shuffled over and opened the door to let Doreen in. She sat in her usual spot by the bar and the old man poured her a straight Jack Daniels and left the bottle. As she sipped her drink she studied the label. The old man followed he gaze and remarked "good old old number 7". " she smiled back. "not as old as me though, old friend, not as old as me"
User Reviews
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2004-09-09 07:31:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
calling it succubus ruined the ending.
should have called it something else.
Submitted by CodjaX (user info) at 2004-05-28 17:22:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
God damn you loch ness monster - I ain't givin you no $tree fitty!
Submitted by WRECKER (user info) at 2004-05-28 15:00:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Cool story. Definitely did not see that coming.
Submitted by Fleadh (user info) at 2004-05-28 11:27:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Damn that was weird, I got pissed off at a 1. Bit of an over reaction there!
C
Submitted by Burn (user info) at 2004-05-28 11:16:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
nice work
Submitted by Fleadh (user info) at 2004-05-28 11:14:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Yea, Like fucking thanks Im sure. I really do appriciate the comment but why ruin my perfect +2 when you liked it? For a moment there i thaught it might make it :-(
C
Submitted by r053ii (user info) at 2004-05-28 10:57:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
that was a good write.. very descriptive.. too bad I m at work.. Thanks for the thought though.
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2004-05-28 10:55:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by zakalwe (user info) at 2004-05-28 10:46:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Classy stuff.
Submitted by Dorene <AzSuperGirl4.at.cox.net> at 2004-05-28 10:37:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn, would make an interested movie... totally a turn on... Thanks Ciaran! You're the best! All I have to say is WOW!
Submitted by Fleadh (user info) at 2004-05-28 10:28:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks, Its kinda a re-write of a post yeaterday which was to short and lacked charicter discription. Critique most welcome.
Submitted by youarsoghey (user info) at 2004-05-28 10:23:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This was pretty good.
Submitted by euripidestrousers (user info) at 2004-05-28 10:16:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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