Intuition: Part 10: FINAL (787 hits)
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Submitted by Matt Maiorano (View user info) at 2004-06-08 14:46:16 EDT
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Each passing day, I grew more and more restless. Was Julius correct? Would he really die soon? Would it be painful? What was my role in his life?
Questions bombarded me, and I knew none of them would be answered by Julius. They would be answered in time. Each day I visited him at that same park bench with a fresh cup of coffee, and we would just sit there together and watch people.
It was amazing how many lives passed by in a matter of minutes. I could only wonder what each person went through. The child with the skinned knees, the elderly couple holding hands, the blind man with his faithful seeing-eye dog. Who were these creatures? What kind of people are they? What experiences have they had, and what will be in store for them in the future? Each day I would spend fifteen minutes just watching, and each time I did this, I would stand up and realize what I could do with MY life.
The possibilites were endless for me. Each day was a new revelation, and each day I knew what I had to do to make myself a better man. I knew how to live my life to the fullest. Julius taught me how to live my own life by experiencing his. For that, I could not thank him enough.
It was two weeks after he told me he was going to die when I found him no longer on his park bench. It was then that I saw the article in the back of the local newspaper.
A gang of thugs beat Julius Delmedico to death the previous night. It was late, and apparently, "they didn't like the way he looked at them".
I didn't cry. I wasn't shocked. I had been preparing for Julius' death for two weeks, so there was nothing to say except, "Oh. He was right."
There was a sadness I felt. I knew my friend died and that I would never see him again. His body was cremated and sprinkled over the ocean by some distant relatives. I hear that's what he would have wanted. I continued to sit on that park bench every day for fifteen minutes. I watched everybody, and remembered all that Julius had given me.
It wasn't until 3 months later when I finally met her. I knew it was her, even from a distance. Short chestnut hair, stunning green eyes, and different from the rest of the people. She was walking towards me, and I knew that I had finally met Lana, the girl whom Julius dared to love, and the one who betrayed him when he needed her the most. She sat down right next to me, and I knew what Julius needed me to do.
"Beautiful day." I began.
"Sure is." She responded.
Her eyes continued to stare straight ahead, watching everything just as he had.
"You ever wonder about them?" I asked.
Her eyes turned towards me, somewhat shocked at what I had asked.
"Them?" She inquired.
"People, I mean. Just what their lives are like."
"Funny, I've often wondered the same thing."
"I've gone through many experiences myself. Sometimes I wonder what it would be like to experience somebody else's joy, and even perhaps somebody else's anguish."
"Yes, I suppose that would be interesting. But sometimes you don't want to feel what others may have felt."
"Why? The good goes hand-in-hand with the bad, does it not?"
"Perhaps. But would you really want to become the child who was abused by their father, or the little girl who was raped by the only man she ever trusted?"
Slowly, I stood up and slapped her across the face. She yelped more out of shock than pain. Her eyes filled with rage. But I was the one who spoke first.
"He loved you, Lana, to the very end of his magnificent existence. While I am sympathetic towards what you went through, you need to let go. Stop your running, and come to terms with what you did to him, and with what you know your father did to you. Unfortunately, Julius could not be here to tell you this. He died three months ago."
I let this sink in, and she lowered her eyes.
"How dare you...." She muttered in rage.
"I dare to only give you one last message as an example of Julius' conviction. Stop running from the truth and live your life. That's all I have to say to you. Have a nice day."
And with that, I turned my back and left her sitting there on that park bench where Julius had once stayed. I never heard from her again. But I still find myself wondering what path she took. I continue to watch every day. And after I come home from work, I sit down and I write about the man that was once Julius.
This is going to make one hell of a story.
~ The End
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Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-03-23 16:31:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by maiorano84 (user info) at 2004-06-10 19:32:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Maybe Ed Norton as the narrator. Norton is too young to play Julius....
Maybe Ian McKellen!! Nah.... too fruity.......
Submitted by NotApologizing (user info) at 2004-06-10 15:04:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
dude!
your explanation of why she only got a slap is perfect. I should leave the writing to you. I didn't even think of j's feelings for her. maybe ed norton as julius? he's good at everything
fiction is tough, huh? nobody really reads it even though it takes a lot more effort than telling a real story. good job and effort with this. it was very good.
Submitted by Adona (user info) at 2004-06-10 14:57:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I love this.
Submitted by maiorano84 (user info) at 2004-06-08 16:35:52 EDT (#)
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Ash - Good call on the Kevin Spacey thing, I didn't think of that. He's a damn good actor.
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-06-08 16:22:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Matt, this was amazing. I really enjoyed the series.
I think Julius should be played by Kevin Spacey. I think I could agree with the Wilford Brimley suggestion. I think Eric Roberts would be a better choice for the dad. Wilford is just too damned old.
Submitted by bargled (user info) at 2004-06-08 15:26:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 for writing such a kickass series
Submitted by maiorano84 (user info) at 2004-06-08 15:18:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
NotApologizing - Haha, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I thought about having her get punched in the face, but then I realized that it wouldn't be consistent with Julius' feelings towards her. Julius loved her even when she betrayed him, so I couldn't have anything too drastic happen to her. And I dunno about Christopher Walken as Julius.... I mean, the whole accent would throw me off. But he would certainly look good kicking the shit out of Lana's father.
Thanks to all for reading!
Submitted by NotApologizing (user info) at 2004-06-08 15:11:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Look, this story was great. I thouroughly enjoyed it from start to finish. But all she gets is a slap!?
I was thinking something like he touches her and in an instant she feels all the pain that she caused Julius, and all the pain he felt in prison because of her.
I hope that quivering labia looks wrong at some of the thugs in the park too.
Great Story. I vote for Christopher Walken to play Julius and Wilford Brimley to play Lana's father. Wilford Brimley because after seeing the Firm (right?), I have never enjoyed watching someone get beat up more than when I saw Wilford Brimley get his shit kicked in.
Submitted by iamhewhoisnot (user info) at 2004-06-08 15:07:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
great story..i hate that it has to end...
Submitted by melkorthedelerious (user info) at 2004-06-08 15:04:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
YAY!
stupid bitch
should have broken her arm with the baseball bat though.
Submitted by Donitsu2002 (user info) at 2004-06-08 14:56:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
this gives me a boner to read. Damned good story
Submitted by xfilthxinfusedxwithxfilth (user info) at 2004-06-08 14:49:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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