A serious post for once (647 hits)
Category: NoneRating: -0.8 on 24 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by ubersucks (View user info) at 2004-06-14 17:25:15 EDT
This is completely different from my other posts I know, but I have a friend who's not feeling the best, and it made me scrawl down some notes. I know this is much too raw (it's the first draft) but I wanted to post it here before I lose the nerve.
As for my other posts, sorry everyone I offended. I don't plan to make serious posts frequently, but here, for once, is something I actually mean. It sucks I know.
Even a little bit, by ubersucks
No dad I won't
I've had enough of being your stressball
Treat me like a ragdoll
I love you SO MUCH
But how am I to know
You love me back
Even a little bit...
Berate me, hate me
Frustrate me
I'm still your little girl
Am I wasting my love?
In a few years you'll know me less
No more mess
But no more chances to be a dad
Did I make you mad?
I miss you already.
If you feel you need to, then -2 this. It won't exactly be the first -2 I ever got...
User Reviews
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2004-06-15 12:21:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
It doesn't suck. Actually, that wasn't too too bad
Submitted by Falconer (user info) at 2004-06-15 12:19:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
So it's crap, and you put no effort into it.
Oooh; tough choice rating this one.
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-06-15 12:05:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I'm going with a "worth reading". I like what this says and I can relate to it. In my opinion (which is probablly MUCH like an asshole) to really be effective with this style there needs to be more. I think a few more verses would have set the style, but as it stands it seems a little too random.
Good luck with it, I think serious poetry is amazingly difficult to get right.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-06-15 08:12:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Heh.. they're right, you know.. no matter how long it took you or how rough it was, this was utter, utter crap. The fact that it spewed forth from your mind at all says a lot about your abilities as a writer, or even a valuable member of society.
Submitted by ubersucks (user info) at 2004-06-15 07:59:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
But thanks to Lojo anyway for attempting to help by mentioning the parts she think worked and parts that didnt.
Submitted by ubersucks (user info) at 2004-06-15 07:57:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Man, you suck, a bit like your name! This poem was the shittiest shit-shit this side of shitsville. It's almost as if, i don't know, you like, wrote it real quickly and knew it was rubbish but still posted it!!1
Man that would be gay, cos the rest of us would look like cunts thinking you did this for real!!!!
Peace out, bro.
Submitted by Hugeos (user info) at 2004-06-15 07:41:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
My good lord, that is a terrible attempt at poetry. Really.
Submitted by Guile (user info) at 2004-06-15 07:04:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Holy shit does that suck.
Submitted by ubersucks (user info) at 2004-06-15 03:13:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Tom (user info) at 2004-06-14 18:22:06 (#)
Ranking: -2
You don't hesitate to repeatedly visit my past posts for spamming reasons. I have no reason to give you a positive rating. You really are a bad person.
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Submitted by Tom (user info) at 2004-06-14 18:37:57 (#)
Ranking: -2
IT WONT BE THE FIRST MINUS TWO I EVER GOT!
Wah wah wah. Poor depressed little baby. Want a shoulder to cry on? Too fuckin bad.
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Submitted by Tom (user info) at 2004-06-14 18:57:58 (#)
Ranking: -2
You gave my post ANOTHER -2 but...well that's strange...the rating stayed a .85! Looks like you need to find a new way to bother people.
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Tut tut tut. Again, Tom, you disappoint. I would accept your -2 if it meant anything, but it doesn't. Even mentioning how I rate you automatically reduces the rating to something of fuckall significance. I can learn nothing from your retaliatory crap. No, I'm not deppressed you idiot. Because I'm not midway through puberty and my hormones arent pumping through me every two minutes means I don't have to exude the same pithy mocking excitedness you do.
And there again Tom, you show yourself to be a complete fucking twat. "the rating stayed at .85!!" so the only thing that bothered you about my ratings were the fact that they were affecting your shitty overall rating? You superficial bitch, ratings don't matter for shit.
Oh yeah, and that poem? The work of about a minute. It really was rough work. Do I care you rated it badly?? No. At least I had my chance to share it.
-sucks
Submitted by Envenom (user info) at 2004-06-14 20:28:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I'm going to give you a 0 for effort
Submitted by kitchens_closed (user info) at 2004-06-14 20:21:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
It was pretty bad...
Submitted by Herpes (user info) at 2004-06-14 19:46:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
You looked like you could use some cheering up with this +2.
Submitted by Chris_Atler (user info) at 2004-06-14 19:40:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by conrad (user info) at 2004-06-14 19:38:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Ghey
Submitted by Tom (user info) at 2004-06-14 18:57:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
You gave my post ANOTHER -2 but...well that's strange...the rating stayed a .85! Looks like you need to find a new way to bother people.
Submitted by Tom (user info) at 2004-06-14 18:37:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
IT WONT BE THE FIRST MINUS TWO I EVER GOT!
Wah wah wah. Poor depressed little baby. Want a shoulder to cry on? Too fuckin bad.
Submitted by lojope (user info) at 2004-06-14 18:29:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
I liked a few of these lines. "Treat me like a ragdoll" for example.
I disliked a few lines as well. "I love you SO MUCH, But how am I to know, You love me back"
Over all there were more I disliked than liked... so -1, I've seen better.
Submitted by Stin (user info) at 2004-06-14 18:28:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Death_Metal_Dude (user info) at 2004-06-14 18:24:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHFUCKINGTERRIBLEAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAA
Submitted by Tom (user info) at 2004-06-14 18:22:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
You don't hesitate to repeatedly visit my past posts for spamming reasons. I have no reason to give you a positive rating. You really are a bad person.
Submitted by I_Have_a_Kristen_Fetish (user info) at 2004-06-14 18:16:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
-2 Poetry, not marked as such.
Submitted by TripinDayZ420 (user info) at 2004-06-14 17:52:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
me likey
Submitted by ubersucks (user info) at 2004-06-14 17:52:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
thanks!
Submitted by JChristian1965 (user info) at 2004-06-14 17:34:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I wouldn't change it....it's pure. :)