Incomprehensible, She's the One. (654 hits)
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Submitted by Deadly (View user info) at 2004-06-17 19:28:26 EDT
Jesus Christ! Right now I hate the condescending bitch. I feel my blood boil as she keeps spouting out.
I wish he'd shut her up, separate her body from her breath... stop her controlling ways.
He's just her emotional crutch, why can't he see it. Why can't he see it god damn it!
Love, how can she love him, she puts him through this hell daily.
If I could finish her off I would, alas I'm too weak.
I glance to the side to catch view of her. She's toe to toe with him. I'm scared.
I have her broken raging rants resounding through my head, my heartbeat is pounding behind my eyeballs.
I close my eyes so tight, my face contorts out of shape.
For a moment I'm paralysed with terror. Only god knows what it, she, is capable of.
I hear her tiny fist's pounding on his beautiful face.
If only he'd just place his hands firmly around her neck.... yes, yes, squeeze the life out of her.
Why can't I do anything, I know I want this bitch done. Dead.
The silence overwhelms me I open my eyes.
I'm now feeling calmer, peaceful.
Newspaper and a little vinegar should bring that mirror up nicely!
User Reviews
Submitted by Oleannder (user info) at 2004-06-18 09:32:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Not bad at all. I'd like to read more.
Submitted by iddqd (user info) at 2004-06-18 04:49:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
its a nice idea, but itd be better if you didnt spell it out so much with that last line - try and have a little mystery to it, use ambiguity.
Submitted by Random Joe at 2004-06-18 04:36:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
My mother evoked the same emotions in me. Bitch!!111
Submitted by TheMidnight12AM (user info) at 2004-06-18 02:51:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Hmm...good writing but it lacks something I can't put my finger on--because then I'd have to Windex my screen.
Submitted by shitflikaa at 2004-06-17 20:03:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
sick fuck.
Submitted by lamer (user info) at 2004-06-17 19:50:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
sounds like you want her dude