it's all about the sex (989 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: 1.2 on 9 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Hi_Me (View user info) at 2004-06-24 09:34:34 EDT
to hear your voice on the line
your ragged breath strains with mine
with just words, feel hard and wet
going up so fast, don't hang up yet
your sexy voice makes me shake
of one another we both take
plunging deep to reach the top
whispers, please don't ever stop
and then comes the final shot
with so few words you make me hot
on the hour we break the call
blood still pumping as we fall
until next time i'll think of you
and all the things you'll make me do
User Reviews
Submitted by jme7551 (user info) at 2004-07-27 16:34:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I don't write anything for the emotional effects it has on others.
I mean it is somewhat personal so I suppose all that really matters
is that it serves it's purpose for me. Even though this particular bit
wasn't really for anything except to make a certain uber user laugh.
So again it was used for personal gain only not for entertainment of
the other users which I suppose is pretty selfish. I think I was just feeling a bit
bitchy the day I replied to your rating. I normally don't care as everyone is entitled to
their own opinions.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-07-26 09:10:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I don't think poetry is useless drivel. I love poetry. Conrad's poetry, Spike Goddess' poetry - I don't think the phrase 'useless drivel' applies to them.
I was just saying that this, in particular, was useless drivel. You sacrificed clarity and grammar for metre, there was no subtlety and no imagery, and it had no emotional effect on the reader at all.
Submitted by hairycoo (user info) at 2004-06-24 11:23:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
okay
Submitted by jme7551 (user info) at 2004-06-24 10:41:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-06-24 09:55:08 (#)
Ranking: 0
Sigh.
I'm really tired of being honest about people's poetry - it's never appreciated. So fuck it, have a 'worth reading' and go churn out some more useless drivel.
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that category title at the top tells you what kind of post it is
so when you see poetry don't read it if you think it's useless drivel
just a thought.
Submitted by Envenom (user info) at 2004-06-24 10:25:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Submitted by ferrisbeuller (user info) at 2004-06-24 10:01:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Because you're a sexy little thing!!
Submitted by jme7551 (user info) at 2004-06-24 09:59:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
spank you munkey.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2004-06-24 09:57:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
i like emotionally driven poetry
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-06-24 09:55:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Sigh.
I'm really tired of being honest about people's poetry - it's never appreciated. So fuck it, have a 'worth reading' and go churn out some more useless drivel.