Warning! A Poem! (880 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: 1.65 on 17 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by conrad <ball0395.at.rogers.com> (View user info) at 2004-07-04 16:43:03 EDT
Two corpses lain long past lament; this death
Lust will counter; we seek dumb intercourse.
Ossified hands will pick the downward, coarse,
route of our yearnings, compel our dry breath,
Together, lips agrin their bloody breadth,
Til from them 'scapes a protestation hoarse;
"Still we love!" we must incant; ever force
Desire from dry bones - at our heads a wreath.
"And pray to never understand". We must
not know life, for to know is not to love.
Our withered kin must come away with us,
Together, rapine; we frolic in dust,
Entwined arms drawing down the wreath above,
To beflower our dark sarcophagus.
User Reviews
Submitted by PeopleAreStrange (user info) at 2004-07-18 11:46:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Now *I* want a cheese sandwich. Here's to decaying bodies entwined in a dusty kiss. They'd want pickle in their sarnie.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-07-07 13:12:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I have absolutely no clever comment to make, and no criticism to offer. I'm quite sure you know how remarkably good this is.
Submitted by shandythedog (user info) at 2004-07-06 05:33:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"And pray to never understand". We must
not know life, for to know is not to love.
interesting
why the fuck must cheese sandwhiches be mentioned????? i've had my meagre dinner and no snacks are allowed under the current burning-arsehole driven regime.
god how i'd like a cheese sandwhich.
Submitted by mystiamoon (user info) at 2004-07-05 23:10:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by The_taste_of_Monkeys (user info) at 2004-07-05 13:12:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Why is poetry always so bloody depressing?
Here is a much better poem!
Dogs are kinda good
so is beer
Halle Berry has nice boobs
Id like to stick it in her rear.
Now THATS poetry!
Submitted by conrad (user info) at 2004-07-05 13:03:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Oh yes please Apullo - Vacherin Mont d'Or baguette with a nice Puligny-Montrachet will be splendid.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2004-07-05 12:36:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Cheese sandwich?
Submitted by JorKen (user info) at 2004-07-05 01:42:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
i forgot to add a
+1 to what i said, because i can't add
Submitted by JorKen (user info) at 2004-07-05 01:41:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
+1 for the poem
-2 because its about creep/depressing stuff
why do people always write sad/depressing poems? Oh pain, or sorrow, everyone hates me, death, flesh, bone, darkness.
whats up with that stuff?
Submitted by Creepy_guy (user info) at 2004-07-04 19:58:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nicely done. Its fairly rare to see good poetry on here and this poem definatly fits into the 'rare' catagory.
Submitted by NerfHerder (user info) at 2004-07-04 19:07:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by FilthyAssistant (user info) at 2004-07-04 16:56:55 (#)
Ranking: 2
Hats off, this is good. Very well written. I expect it won't get the final rating it deserves.
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Although, so good so far.
Submitted by Rob at 2004-07-04 18:59:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I like poetry, this was good, lots of cool words in it
+2
Submitted by conrad (user info) at 2004-07-04 18:13:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
'Ossified' means 'turned to bone'. Thanks for the comments people.
Submitted by Siren (user info) at 2004-07-04 18:08:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Bien.
Submitted by mikethescottish (user info) at 2004-07-04 18:02:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I loved this. Very effective.
What does 'ossified' mean?
Submitted by Cjad_teh_Nord (user info) at 2004-07-04 17:08:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
+2 for such good poetry
-1 for leaving me speechless. The message I got were old people doin' the nasty
Submitted by FilthyAssistant (user info) at 2004-07-04 16:56:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hats off, this is good. Very well written. I expect it won't get the final rating it deserves.