Seeds of the Messiah (Testament of a Brethren) (559 hits)
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Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (View user info) at 2004-08-11 12:08:01 EDT
I grew up in Paradise. Most people spend their lives looking for it...I grew up in it. I remember how blue the skies seemed to be back then, and how they seemed to bend down to listen to the corn fields as they gently swayed in God's merciful breeze. Our days were given to the labor of the land. Work, to us, was the highest form of worship.
Every evening was the same...the Messiah would gather together his children and meet in the temple for 'togetherness' and 'spiritual revelry'- at least that's what he called it. Us children called it 'funny time' because of the way it made our bellies and privates feel.
During spiritual revelry, however, all the men, including us young boys would listen to the Messiah as he spoke about all the things we should do to make our home on earth a true paradise. One of the things he required of the men was that they bring their wives to him once a month to be cleansed in his seed. This was done in a very ceremonious fashion in the temple during new moon. Us young boys were required to be there so we could learn the importance of this activity.
Every once in a while someone would leave and never be heard from again...the Messiah didn't like that. He would explain that it was a sin to want to leave Paradise, and the act should be punished. If they had any family left in the community, the Messiah would hold one of them accountable to pay for the sins of the bad seed. Women were the first to be held accountable because they were the source of all that was evil, the Messiah taught. (Grandmothers, mothers, daughters, aunts... whoever was the closest female in relation to the shameful sinner who dared leave Paradise willingly would be held accountable.)
I have never seen anything so beautiful as a sin being absolved and paid in full by a stone-ravaged body bleeding in the summer grass. The bodies would lie there and twitch as they were touched by the hands of our Lord. We would all then rejoice and sing songs. The body would then be cleansed and prepared, and a feast would ensue. In this way, the Messiah said, our community would not be lessened by the loss, and the soul of the sinner would remain in Paradise where it belonged.
Children, the Messiah taught were only allowed if the Messiah had given his blessing before-hand. The father-to-be was required to present his wife before the Messiah and explain why he needed a child. If the Messiah approved the child, he would take the wife into the temple and, in full view of the rest of the members of the community, know her that she might bear a child. In this way the child would be blessed. But if a child was born not of the Messiah's seed, then the child, we were told, posessed only half a soul, and must be destroyed.
Once I overheard a man and woman talking - they had conceived a child on their own in sinfulness, and were planning on fooling the Messiah by having him take the woman as his own, thus making him believe that the child was his. I, knowing this was a mortal sin that could not be tolerated, told the Messiah everything I had heard them plotting. When hearing this, the Messiah was enraged and had the couple tied to posts and had their bodies cut up with threshing blades. He then fed the bodies to a pig and set the animal free outside the gates of Paradise...In this way, their souls would be forever damned...they were my parents.
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Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2005-02-11 01:57:11 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by eIectrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2004-10-23 18:43:55 EDT (#)
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You should do some soul-searching. You might just find one.
Submitted by equaIizer (user info) at 2004-10-21 08:07:07 EDT (#)
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Now we know why some animals eat their own children.
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2004-10-18 21:13:33 EDT (#)
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this sounds like a materbating Jesus
Submitted by equalizer (user info) at 2004-09-14 03:41:18 EDT (#)
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Equalized.
Submitted by fake_bargled (user info) at 2004-09-07 19:16:58 EDT (#)
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polyamorousguyaj: It's a rope ladder sinking into quicksand, and you have to kick the people below you off said ladder to save yourself
Submitted by GeorgeBaker (user info) at 2004-08-15 08:36:30 EDT (#)
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Submitted by vengeance (user info) at 2004-08-13 22:31:03 EDT (#)
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Submitted by FetishII (user info) at 2004-08-12 19:53:14 EDT (#)
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Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2004-08-12 19:38:34 (#)
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Hope this is what you wanted!
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Mr. Spam man, bring some spam. My nane is electrictoothsyndrome, and I'm like the 20th to spam Fetish this month, ain't I cool?
Submitted by I_Have_a_Kristen_Fetish (user info) at 2004-08-12 19:49:01 EDT (#)
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Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2004-08-12 19:38:34 (#)
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Hope this is what you wanted!
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Better make sure you spam them all, I'm not missing a one, bitch!
Submitted by I_Have_a_Kristen_Fetish (user info) at 2004-08-12 06:50:24 EDT (#)
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Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2004-08-12 00:34:18 (#)
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I hope you drown in the toilet you crawled out of.
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2004-08-11 20:22:07 EDT (#)
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Oh, I also was thinking of the Bible (Old Testament), and the short story "The Lottery", in which a town stones a member to death annually for reasons I can't remember right now.
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2004-08-11 20:18:48 EDT (#)
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What movie is this a 'rip off of'?
Last I checked this was not a movie script...I don't even know if it qualifies as a short story...It just is whatever it is. I can tell you I didn't rip this off anything...yes, I pulled ideas from various memory references...David Koresh, Jim Jones, I live near Amish country - so there was influence there, Children of the Corn (where the pic came from), I assume you're referring to the new M. Night Shaymalan movie (I haven't even seen it yet).
Fuck it. I am going to start putting disclaimers in all my shit. Similarity to any persons living or dead are purely coincidental.
Submitted by gibberish (user info) at 2004-08-11 17:10:50 EDT (#)
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I'm really sorry, but I just couldn't take it seriously after this:
"Us children called it 'funny time' because of the way it made our bellies and privates feel."
Submitted by OneCheapGeek (user info) at 2004-08-11 16:56:19 EDT (#)
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Submitted by hairycoo (user info) at 2004-08-11 12:20:57 (#)
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hope this isn't true
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uh....
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2004-08-11 16:44:55 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by dukkha (user info) at 2004-08-11 16:31:43 EDT (#)
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This sucked worse than the movie it's a rip-off of.
Submitted by vodka7tall (user info) at 2004-08-11 14:53:16 EDT (#)
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Well, that's twisted, but well written.
Submitted by I_Have_a_Kristen_Fetish (user info) at 2004-08-11 14:34:05 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by heater (user info) at 2004-08-11 14:17:57 EDT (#)
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Sympathy heat!
Submitted by SAECULUM.AUREUM (user info) at 2004-08-11 13:50:24 EDT (#)
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Why don't more people read this? Wasn't "writing" meant to be the hole point of this Uber thing? This is very well written, I'm far to upset with this site these days. Oh well +2 again.
Submitted by Badlands (user info) at 2004-08-11 13:37:31 EDT (#)
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A little cliched. But well written.
Submitted by SAECULUM.AUREUM (user info) at 2004-08-11 13:32:38 EDT (#)
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This touched me
Submitted by RyuFu (user info) at 2004-08-11 13:27:59 EDT (#)
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I love these kind of stories. Ones that make you think. That didn't come out like I wanted. Bah, good shit, in any case.
Submitted by Cryopaul (user info) at 2004-08-11 13:06:13 EDT (#)
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Wow...that's all i got.
Submitted by disAbled (user info) at 2004-08-11 12:51:27 EDT (#)
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Disturbing. Pulpy. Edgy.
Most of all, well written.
Submitted by hairycoo (user info) at 2004-08-11 12:20:57 EDT (#)
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hope this isn't true
Submitted by Just_me_and_the_cats (user info) at 2004-08-11 12:12:28 EDT (#)
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So... are you a Mormon?