Diary of a Madman 17. (924 hits)
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Submitted by Bigmike (View user info) at 2004-08-12 22:31:57 EDT
This is a transcript from a tape I made. Whoever reads this should really try to find the tape. I fear my written word cannot do it justice. The sounds that I cannot replicate here are really what the listener will enjoy. I will do the best I can.
*CLICK*
".............now I'm going to expose the orbital around the eye. There. Nice. I find it amazing that these things are so sharp. Scalpels are sharper than razors. They cut like a hot knife through butter. Nice, neat and complete. She is lidless now and her orbital is becoming exposed nicely.
I'm peeling the skin around the eye now. The entire orbital is exposed and the eyeball is sitting nicely right in the middle of it. It is intact which is surprising considering the abuse that the eye went through during our struggle. The eye has a few broken blood vessels in it so it is extremely blood red, but the iris, pupil, and sclera are all intact. There has been no seepage of vitreous and the intraocular pressure seems to have been maintained. The eye is an amazing thing and it is actually much bigger than I would have imagined. It just sits in its eye socket, filling up the entire area. It looks like a ping pong ball. A painted ping pong ball. Lovely.
I have peeled back most of the skin around both eyes now, cutting away any excess muscle and vein from around both eyes. If anybody could see this now they would think I am a real pro. I could be a doctor performing this kind of surgery.
I am peeling back the skin of the forehead now. Wait, it is coming a little harder here. Let me get a better grip. There. Easier now. I am cutting under the skin now so that the skull is becoming exposed right up to her hairline. Gosh she has beautiful skin. No wrinkles at all. Smooth, velvety. Very nice to the touch.
Most of her forehead and around her eyes is exposed now. I am seeing the white of her skull mixed with the red of her blood and the chestnut of her hair. I am pouring a little saline on the skull now to clean it off. The skull is a beautiful thing when viewed fresh and clean. It reminds me of seeing a mountain top for the first time or viewing the ocean for the first time as a child. It's a nice experience and it's so much better knowing that I am doing this myself. No help. No guidance.
There we go. The skull is now exposed all the way back to the middle top of her head. She is staring at me, lidless, and her stare is beautiful. Wait, let me get a picture. There. Nice. This will fit right in with my collection.
Ok, let's get that skin off the face, shall we? I am peeling the skin right off of the nose now. It is coming off very easily. Easier than I could have imagined. Such a pretty nose. Not too big, not too small. Wow, so that's what it looks like under there. Cartilage looks kind of funny. It's a different color than the bone around it. Look at those nasal cavities. Did I do that? One side of the cartilage of her nose seems broken. I guess I might have done that earlier. Damn she was fiesty.
Here comes the skin off of the cheeks. I have made incisions down each side of her face, following her jawline, right down to the bottom of her chin. If I am lucky, this will all come off in one piece. Here it comes, right down both sides, around the lips, oh, those incisions were placed expertly. The skin came off right around both lips perfectly. Down her chin and right off!
Bravo! This is wonderful. I am holding in my hands the entire bottom part of her face. I have to try to stop breathing so hard but this is so exciting. What? Hey! DON"T YOU FUCKING KICK ME YOU BITCH!
The bitch just kicked me. I should have fucking killed her before I started this procedure. She wouldn't have been as fresh though and that's what I wanted. A fresh face. A fresh body.
There, how does that feel you useless cunt? How does that scalpel feel buried in your throat? Feel good? Stop moving. STOP MOVING!
Fuck. Goddammit. Wait. You want to move? You want to ruin my procedure? There, how do you like that? (Sounds of pounding and squishing. At this point I'm stabbing her repeatedly with a hunting knife squarely in the chest and abdomen). She made me do it. I didn't want to but she made me. Fuck. She ruined my procedure.
Note: use more goddamn anesthetic next time.
I guess I live and learn.
Bitch.
Gosh I'm hungry.
*CLICK*
User Reviews
Submitted by sublime (user info) at 2004-08-24 03:23:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
it is a mad mad world for this mad mad man.
Submitted by VindicationBot (user info) at 2004-08-24 03:13:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
rating (+2!!!!)
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-08-19 11:08:23 EDT (#)
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Submitted by sparkle_pink (user info) at 2004-08-19 02:30:21 (#)
Ranking: 2
My goodness. This is the first post of this series to make me feel ill.
Bravo.
You actually commented. I think this is the first time you've commented on one of my posts. I was beginning to think you were a mime or something.
Submitted by sparkle_pink (user info) at 2004-08-19 02:30:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
My goodness. This is the first post of this series to make me feel ill.
Bravo.
Submitted by ohlookasquirrel (user info) at 2004-08-13 09:53:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-08-13 09:27:31 EDT (#)
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Submitted by DancingHobo (user info) at 2004-08-13 00:21:58 (#)
Ranking: 2
So you writing this series from the perspective of one madman?
I've always thought each chapter was written by a different person.
Nope. Same guy.
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-08-13 08:59:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Through the whole reading (which was done literally on the edge of my seat) I was thinking "oh shit she is alive, Mike don't make her be alive, ohh I just know she is alive, Ack!"
I know I go back to the bald head in the intestines a lot because it just made this incredibly vivid visual and tactile image. This installment grabbed me by the throat. Amazing.
Submitted by Quasiplasmohedron (user info) at 2004-08-13 00:43:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good post.
Seven was a great movie. I liked everything leading up to Brad Pitt shooting him but it didn't seem like the movie was complete; I felt that something else should have happened as well or instead of the guy dying, but I didn't know what. But the image of Morgan Freeman running back to Pitt after discovering the head is what I remember most clearly from the movie.
Submitted by DancingHobo (user info) at 2004-08-13 00:21:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
So you writing this series from the perspective of one madman?
I've always thought each chapter was written by a different person.
Submitted by dudette (user info) at 2004-08-13 00:14:13 EDT (#)
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I'm nauseous now.
The fact that I'm hungover doesn't help...
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-08-13 00:04:05 EDT (#)
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Submitted by dakingisdead (user info) at 2004-08-12 23:57:27 (#)
Ranking: 2
What didn't you like about the ending?
It just didn't seem right to me. It didn't feel right. I left that movie with the feeling that the ending could have been much better, I just didn't know how.
Submitted by dakingisdead (user info) at 2004-08-12 23:57:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
What didn't you like about the ending?
Funny thing is I hated the ending. It was so bloody predictable it just made me want to scream!
Directors dialogue to self:
'Oh yeah we have covered all the sins except revenge. How do you make the cop want to take revenge? I know lets put his pregnant wifes head in a box."
Oh WOW that is a surprise!.....not.
I thought the rest of the movie was brilliant and that they just took the whole easier route on this one.
Intersting that the studio actually didn't like the ending either and wanted to change it but after a fight gave in. Probably for more warm and fuzzy reasons that they didn't like it though.
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-08-12 23:32:39 EDT (#)
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Submitted by dakingisdead (user info) at 2004-08-12 23:28:48 (#)
Ranking: 2
Did you ever see the movie 'Se7en' Mike?
Yes, a couple of times. I didn't like the ending. I thought the rest was great though. Maybe it's because I am not a Gwyneth Paltrow fan. I am, however, a huge Kevin Spacey fan.
Submitted by dakingisdead (user info) at 2004-08-12 23:28:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Did you ever see the movie 'Se7en' Mike?
Submitted by Fabish (user info) at 2004-08-12 23:27:27 EDT (#)
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Masterful response, Mike. You always get me to see your side once you state it, which I accept with a smile because it does make sense, but it always takes that reminder of how your viewing the main character as the creator of him, compared to how I do, as just a reader.
Thanks for the compliment - I just try to help out, so others will enjoy your stuff even more.
As always, keep up the good work, and thanks for writing.
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-08-12 23:17:23 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Fabish (user info) at 2004-08-12 22:58:36 (#)
Ranking: 1
Well written. I know you use this as an excuse for the series, that it's the main character speaking here, but try not to write over the head of the reader. There should have been more informative detail about the eye procedure the so the reader would understand, and in turn, visualize it, which is what you're really wanting to happen here. Because if the reader fails to understand all points of the procedure, than there is no point in reading it, for the visual has been lost.
Fabish and Circe, your input has been very valuable to the continuation of this series.
Fabish, I have considered the point that you raise very carefully in the creation of his diary. It is not an excuse that the main character speaks through me. In some ways he does. Not that I have fantasies of doing extremely bad things to people, but this diary is just something that happens. It kind of writes itself in a sense.
Imagine a precinct full of detectives happening upon this guys house during a routine check of some neighbors complaint or something. They find this diary. For some of them it will be a collection of ramblings from an idiot who wants to glorify himself through the documented death of others. Some if not most of it may actually be written, as you put it, "over the head of the reader". I can agree with you that this is going to happen. For the other detectives that pick this up, it is going to be a very descriptive and chilling account of what went through the mind of this madman. They will understand most of it, be fascinated by some of it and be repulsed by the rest.
The madman does not assume the intelligence of the audience. He just creates the actions that lead to the diary. You are saying that I, as the writer of this particular series, should take into account the fact that I may be writing over the heads of some of the readers.
I do.
Fabish, your critiques are fabulous and intelligent. I appreciate them all. You keep me thinking.
Submitted by dakingisdead (user info) at 2004-08-12 23:05:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow you have got a sicko imagination Big Fella.
I guess it is in all of us; that dark side that we don't want to recognise but know it is there somewhere just under the surface of our concience.
Submitted by Fabish (user info) at 2004-08-12 22:58:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Well written. I know you use this as an excuse for the series, that it's the main character speaking here, but try not to write over the head of the reader. There should have been more informative detail about the eye procedure the so the reader would understand, and in turn, visualize it, which is what you're really wanting to happen here. Because if the reader fails to understand all points of the procedure, than there is no point in reading it, for the visual has been lost.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-08-12 22:58:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You've outdone yourself.
Submitted by ofMontreal (user info) at 2004-08-12 22:55:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
hot
Submitted by SullyThePirate (user info) at 2004-08-12 22:55:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by StonedSilly (user info) at 2004-08-12 22:52:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I no longer feel a need to tell you what I dislike about these, Mike.
Expertly written.
Submitted by IsawBoobs (user info) at 2004-08-12 22:45:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
sickening.