Misery (poertry warning) (765 hits)
Category: RomanceRating: 0.42 on 18 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by <....knowing is half the battle, YO JOE!> (View user info) at 2004-08-16 01:44:55 EDT
An incredibly powerful unfulfilled longing of the soul
Desire to embrace what cannot be
Aching, unbearable pressure without release
Inability to communicate need
No one to hear it
Thirsty on a raft in the middle of the ocean
Surrounded by an abundance of almost
User Reviews
Submitted by Gnome (user info) at 2004-08-16 10:55:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
poetry or not, without that warning it would be a nice big -2 train rolling through here.
besides, who are you to say what is or isn't poetry?
Submitted by yidele (user info) at 2004-08-16 05:04:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
can you say TEEN ANGST?
Submitted by Disektor (user info) at 2004-08-16 05:03:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
That was good.
Submitted by indigogecko (user info) at 2004-08-16 04:59:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I love the last line, and the pic is almost worth a point on it's own. Nice stuff to wake up to.
Submitted by yidele (user info) at 2004-08-16 04:42:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
he picture is nice,
but what you wrote ain't poetry.
Submitted by gibberish (user info) at 2004-08-16 03:49:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Eh.
Submitted by Zeccs (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:58:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I like the picture, but the poem was painfully bland and generic.
Submitted by Gnome (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:54:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
thanks circe. criticism is always appreciated
Submitted by KoolMang (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:54:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
"the tiger's eyes are like my own,
but they come from a deep and troubled sea"
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:53:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
..that, by the way, was a compliment. Most poetry on here is '-2 die in a ditch' material.
Submitted by Siren (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:53:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Loves it.
Submitted by ofMontreal (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:52:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Gnome (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:51:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
hahaha! i'll try to remember that vermin
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:51:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
"Surrounded by an abundance of almost"
That line was pretty good. The rest was trite and overdone. Work on it.
Submitted by Vermin (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:47:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Aching, unbearable pressure without release
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See, what you need here is a prostitute. You'll feel much better, believe me.
Submitted by JohnGalt (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:46:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
That picture is freakin' awesome.
+2 for good poetry karma.
Submitted by Gnome (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:45:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
fucked up the title. great start.
Submitted by facts (user info) at 2004-08-16 01:45:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
poertry? you lose.