Creatures Of The Night: Part 13 (999 hits)
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Submitted by Matt Maiorano (View user info) at 2004-08-19 16:15:07 EDT
Part 1 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/38393
Part 2 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/38508
Part 3 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/38615
Part 4 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/38703
Part 5 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/38751
Part 6 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/38831
Part 7 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/38916
Part 8 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/39047
Part 9 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/39203
Part 10 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/40182
Part 11 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/41473
Part 12 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/41692
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"Why are you and mother crying, Cale?" Liek asked his older brother.
"Liek, please.... leave us." Cale sobbed.
"But why? What happened? Where's father?"
Liek felt himself being pushed out of the room.
What had he said? What happened that made his mother scream with grief? Why was her face twisted with sadness, and her face streaked with tears? Was it something he had done? The door shut in front of him, and all he could do was just stand there. Confusion overtook him, and he began to feel the warm wet tears welling up behind his eyes.
He was
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helpless.
Liek shut his eyes, awaiting the sweet release of death. He had fought with all of his strength, but it wasn't enough. The assassin's nail was going to slice through his jugular at any moment. All he could do was wait, and watch his life in front of him.
Nobody was around
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to help him.
Liek and Cale bolted through the dense forest, Liek close behind, but never quite able to catch up.
"I'M GOING TO KILL THEM ALL!!" Cale screamed. "EVERY LAST HUMAN!!"
"Cale!! Stop!!" Liek called after him.
Cale was heading straight into trouble. Even at Liek's young age, he knew that what his brother was about to do was foolish. He felt the adrenaline rush through his veins. His muscles burned. His throat was hot and sticky from chasing his brother for nearly ten minutes. With a sudden burst of energy, he grabbed his brother's shirt and pulled himself close.
He tackled his brother, and they hit the ground hard. Cale was upon him in an instant, punching him in the face over and over again.
All he could do was lay there, holding his arms to his face, and feeling the blows raining down on him. Cale was screaming the entire time. Some of it made sense. Other times it didn't. It was just animalistic screeching.
The humans had taken him. The humans had killed him, and they made her sad. She died from grief because of them. Never interfere in his business again. He was not old enough to understand. The humans deserved nothing less than death. Every last one of them.
And with that, Cale stood up and left him. Liek never stood up. All he could do was
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just lay there and think.
He watched the assassin lunge forward. He watched his mother lowered into the ground. He watched the nail coming ever closer. He watched his brother running towards him for a brotherly embrace. His mind was screaming, his body silent.
He heard a meaty crack coming from somewhere. He felt nothing.
Nothing at all.
He opened his eyes in confusion. What happened? The assassin was motionless above him, the grip around his throat had loosened. The assassin's eyes were rolled back into his head, and a hatchet was imbedded into the side of his skull.
Liek could only stare at the hatchet coming out of the gaping wound, and then coming back again, stopping halfway into the assassin's face.
He didn't know how long he was in shock for, but when he focused onto the reality of the situation, he threw the body off of him and scrambled back. What had happened?
Standing in front of him was Isaac, holding the bloody hatchet.
"You ok there, Liek?" He calmly asked.
Liek, gave a slight nod.
"Good. Me 'n Hannah were worried about you. What'd you get for dinner?"
to be continued....
User Reviews
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-01-10 19:04:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
What?! Isaac splits a boy's skull in two with an axe and all he has to say about it is, "You all right there?" WAY too casual a reaction, unless he's chopping up strange kids in the woods on a regular basis.
I did, however, like the time-jumping approach you took to the story.
Submitted by cnympho247 (user info) at 2004-08-24 10:24:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
oh man. Excelent post. Very emotional.
Submitted by Sambuca310 (user info) at 2004-08-21 17:20:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
confusing at first but then good
Submitted by creep_firebombing (user info) at 2004-08-21 08:39:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-08-20 19:39:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Matt, this was one of the BEST flashback sequences I have ever read. I think it was very, very (did I mention very?) well done. Kudos to you and this amazing series.
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2004-08-20 08:28:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Best non-comedy series ever.
Submitted by PhiliXX <PhiliXX.at.hotmail.com> at 2004-08-19 19:14:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is some amazing shit, i've just read 1 - 13 and feel it would make a great manga. U are truely a kick arse writer. Dude keep it up!
Submitted by Malificent (user info) at 2004-08-19 17:40:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Very nice use of flashback. Suddenly I feel like Isaac isn't everything he has made himself out to be.
Looking forward to part 14.
Submitted by RamJetMax (user info) at 2004-08-19 17:37:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 for writing 13 parts.
Keep it up.
Submitted by cutiepie (user info) at 2004-08-19 17:15:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by engine13 (user info) at 2004-08-19 16:58:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fantastic. As always.
Submitted by OneCheapGeek (user info) at 2004-08-19 16:29:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Liked the switching between the present and flashbacks.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2004-08-19 16:19:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
oooh part thirteeeeen you should have posted this on friday
the thirteeeenth.
where are you coming up with this stuff?