Ye Olde Luvre (885 hits)
Category: RomanceRating: -1.73 on 14 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Bitch (View user info) at 2004-08-23 01:06:55 EDT
I found the gift you gave me
Tucked away on a back shelf.
Carefully hidden, carefully hoarded.
Still sharp. Still sealed.
Still stained from the cuts you gave.
So unintended, so undeserved.
Why did I keep it?
Why hold the reminder
Of a time when we were both
Less than we should have been?
Wouldn't it be better to bask
In the memory of a happy time
Than revisit the wounds now healed?
Memory is a betrayer.
It shields us
From yesterdays pain.
Wounds heal.
Scars fade.
Love stays.
Love stays long after
It should have gone
And returns whether we will.
And lest I forget the reasons
I chose to flee, and and seek
For you again: I take down
The gift you gave me.
Still sharp. Still sealed.
Still stained.
User Reviews
Submitted by Random Joe at 2004-08-24 17:56:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
LadyPlural
"Because I am a more mature and sensible person than you are, I will not engage in retalitory spamming of your posts."
But yet you did anyway. Idiot.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2004-08-24 16:25:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
If you don't like my writing that's just fine and dandy. Ruining a perfect +2 post for no reason whatsoever is not. Fuck you, bitch.
PS- Because I am a more mature and sensible person than you are, I will not engage in retalitory spamming of your posts. Actually, the real reason that I won't is that their ratings are already so bad that I couldn't make them very much worse. In closing...
Snort crushed glass and die.
Submitted by honeycake (user info) at 2004-08-23 18:28:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Dear "maryjane",
Nope... can't say I remember you, but I appreciate the effort. Kind of cowardly though. Go ahead and rate me with your "real" account and I'll give you the -2's you so desperately crave. I'd love to. :)
Submitted by honeycake (user info) at 2004-08-23 18:26:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA.
You're all so B-I-T-T-E-R!
Problem is, you're not as bitter as meeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. :))))))))))))))))))
Submitted by maryjane (user info) at 2004-08-23 16:49:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Remember me, asshole? Why don't you try to retaliate with a -2 on one of my posts. Oh that's right, you're idiocy doesn't work there, does it?
I'd tell you to die, but I wouldn't want your stupid corpse lying around.
Submitted by TomminyCrap (user info) at 2004-08-23 16:47:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
You are one of the biggest morons in the world.
Submitted by honeycake (user info) at 2004-08-23 12:35:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I wasn't hoping for "good" reviews. I find it hilarious that you people take shit so seriously here, to the point of coming back and making whining announcements about "retaliatory -2's". Of course YOUR work is worthy of something more than a -2; it couldn't just be my honest opinion or anything. Of course not. :)
Please let me join your fan club so I can whine and kiss asses for better reviews? Also, I will be MEEEEEEEEEEEEN to N00Bs to amuse those who regularly accept my teabagging offers.
I love you all!
Submitted by shitfuck (user info) at 2004-08-23 12:19:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Thank you for all those retailitory -2's.
Here's one more for this piece of ass wipe.
Submitted by Impassive-Digressive (user info) at 2004-08-23 08:19:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Sounds kinky... you want me to take my shirt off?
I gave you a fair review (I have seen better work on the site - no offence intended), I even told you why I didn't like the piece and how you could improve it in my eyes. Admittedly I had a negative opinion of it, at least I justified it in the end. It's a lot more than most people on the site will give you.
Most just run with the unimaginative "-2 no comment"...
Submitted by honeycake (user info) at 2004-08-23 05:01:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
"stifled the flow"
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Ha. Ha.
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I'll stifle your flow.
Submitted by shitfuck (user info) at 2004-08-23 03:00:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
crapola
Submitted by Impassive-Digressive (user info) at 2004-08-23 02:48:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Forgive me if my definitions here are wrong, admittedly this area is not my forte, but isn't prose simply (for lack of a better word) 'ordinary' writing with no verse, meter or rhyme? (Poetry being writing that uses these devices)
Based on that and the way you wrote this piece including the use of verses, caused me to assume it was attempted poetry. Sorry for my mistake.
However, if this was NOT an attempt at poetry, I would still suggest you rethink the use of the 'Enter' key. I found this piece to be very disjointed, all the line breaks and full stops stifled the flow of it for me.
Submitted by honeycake (user info) at 2004-08-23 01:56:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Maybe you need to learn the difference between poetry and prose before you spread your wit elsewhere.
Submitted by Impassive-Digressive (user info) at 2004-08-23 01:45:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
I believe it was Circe who made a comment like this at one point, unfortunately I can't find it and quote her. Forgive me, wise and merciful Tarago-queen, I am paraphrasing your work.
Simply knowing
how to operate
the 'Enter' key
does not make
you a poet.