Necrosiac 11 (1063 hits)
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Submitted by Snark << snark.at.corporatedirtbag.com (View user info) at 2004-08-25 11:10:29 EDT
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NECROSIAC 11
Mattaius took a long pull from the bottle and closed his eyes, savoring the taste of the amber liquid as it traced a cool path down his throat. He couldn't remember if a beer had ever tasted so good and briefly played with the urge of turning alcohol into a full time hobby.
It had been one hell of day. He had entered the morning briefing expecting to pound the final nail in the coffin of a dreary case. A case he'd assumed ended with the death of the Necromancer that Terri shot. Instead, he'd been treated to the shock of discovering that he was on the shopping list of an Evil the world hadn't seen since the last Great War.
Go Figure.
Then, as if that wasn't enough, the meeting had gone from bad to worse. The sound of Stevens' torture hadn't fazed him like the others. He barely knew the guy. In his previous line of work he'd heard the screams of men on many occasions, sometimes brothers in arms, sometimes victims of their wrath. He knew how to tune it out, experience and necessity had taught him how to turn the part of himself off that cared enough to cloud his judgment, his awareness of the situation.
The screaming didn't bother him, but what happened when it was done did.
Smith should have known better than to bring Stevens' evidence folder into the meeting. The metal shards found on the Wonder Room floor had been placed back inside the envelope and resealed. She should have known bringing them into the meeting room would provide a conduit for whoever had killed Stevens to view the briefing and he'd said as much to Terri. Her reply had been simple and true.
"She's human, she fucked up"
He didn't argue. He knew Terri was right, and besides, he'd fucked up by letting anger shape his reaction later on.
Mattaius remembered he'd tilted his head back to relieve the tension in his neck, only to find himself staring up at twin pools of glowing mercury on the ceiling, the telltale signs that a seer was watching and listening... well telltale to him anyways. After a lifetime of living with his talent he constantly found himself forgetting that no one else saw what he saw.
Sitting in the bar, he wondered how long they had been watching and decided the wise decision would be to assume they had seen and heard everything. The sick bastards were probably sitting in whatever dank cesspool they called home, sharing a bowl of popcorn and giggling as they relived their latest victim begging for mercy.
He'd made the mistake of responding to Smiths question about what the enemy had pulled out of Stevens' mind, his judgment clouded by anger at the intrusion of the Necrosiacs. Smith had looked at him, then the ceiling and said
"Agent Pitt what is it?"
He'd had no reason to believe up to that point that the enemy knew anything about him other than the fact they wanted him, but everything changed with a single sentence. There could be no doubt that now they knew what he looked like, where he was, and what he did for a living. If he wasn't near the top of their "Things to do" list before he probably would be now. From what he had heard about Stevens' final actions he doubted the fact that he was with the agency would deter them in the least.
He wondered if he'd unknowingly lobbed a grenade into a room full of baby kittens to deserve his Karma.
Despite everything he supposed they had been lucky. No one had come into direct contact with the shards during the unwanted visitation, so the Necrosiacs weren't provided with the opportunity to enter another mind.
Mattaius ran his free hand through his hair and took in his surroundings fully for the first time since arriving. Terri had picked the perfect place for a drink. The bar was small and dark, perfectly situated on the wrong side of the tracks. The bartender (probably the owner) sat behind the beat up wooden bar top, watching a small TV, which was perched precariously above a mountain of liquor bottles that were crammed into the sagging shelves lining the back wall. The only other patron sat on a stool directly across from the bartender. Mattaius could tell from the way they casually swapped jokes concerning the women's synchronized swimming team they were watching that he was a regular. He was the token barfly, wasting away an afternoon before going home to lie to his wife about where the grocery money had gone.
No one paid attention to strangers in a place like this which suited Mattaius just fine. A place like this was in the wrong part of town to draw a crowd, and too poor to furnish itself with enchanted eyesores.
Mattaius took another swig from the bottle and wondered what was taking Terri so long in the bathroom.
She'd been quiet during the first part of the briefing, and hadn't had much to say when they had resumed 15 minutes later (without the evidence envelope). Something told him she would have plenty to say when she got back to the table. It had been her idea to go for a drink after all.
The second half of the briefing had gone without incident. Smith had detailed Stevens' findings in more detail via his report then informed them that she would be coordinating with several other agencies and would have an action plan and definitive assignments when the team met in the morning. She'd let them all know that she expected insight from everyone involved concerning what they had seen and the direction the investigation should take.
"Take the rest of the day people. Go home and get some rest. Spend time with your families. After tomorrow we're all in this One Hundred Fifty Percent. We meet back here first thing in the morning"
No one had argued. Mattaius guessed that everyone else was probably as comfortable as he was with taking a day to put their thoughts around the meeting's revelations.
Before leaving with Terri he had handed his report to Smith and given her a short rundown on the list he had discovered. She promised to have the lab do a more thorough analysis on the grizzly alphabet he had uncovered and commended him on a job well done. The commendation was half hearted. Smith was easy to read, and the pages of her face told Mattaius she didn't trust him.
He supposed they would have to learn to trust each other.
Terri sat down in the booth beside him and took a quick swig from her beer.
"We should start an investigation into this place. I think a Shit Demon from hell is living in the women's washroom"
Mattaius couldn't help but chuckle, it was the first joke he'd heard her utter since Brian's death. For a second he thought she might crack a grin but she became serious as she spoke again.
"Listen, I don't think I ever said thanks..."
"For what?"
"For helping me get back" she said "For being there when I woke up"
Mattaius shrugged "You can thank Readers Digest for that"
Terri gave him a cross look and put a hand on his shoulder "No I mean it, thanks"
Mattaius returned the gesture with a wink "Anytime kiddo"
Laughter erupted across the room as the bartender made a particularly crude comment regarding the flexibility of the Swedish team. Mattaius used the opportunity to break the spell of the moment and take another long pull from his beer.
A quick glance at Terri sitting beside him told him she had something to say. She was staring intently at the label of her beer bottle, trying to come up with the proper words.
"What's up?" he asked.
Terri looked up at him again.
"You going to tell me what you discussed with Smith after the meeting? Did it have anything to do with what spooked you earlier?"
Mattaius shared the details of the list with Terri, what he'd found and how he'd found it. When he was done she returned her gaze to the bottle for a minute and then smiled ruefully.
"I told you one day you'd be a hit with the ladies"
Mattaius couldn't help but chuckle again. It did his heart good to see his old partner returning.
The thoughtful expression returned to her face and she began to peel the label off her bottle.
"You didn't make a lot of friends with that question regarding Stevens' face"
Mattaius nodded. "No, but I needed to know"
"Yeah" she said "These Necrosiacs aren't just insane, they're over confident. They aren't going out of their way to hide. Her voice... even through Stevens' throat and her obvious rage... it seemed petulant, almost childish. What she did to him... before she killed him... like a child destroying a toy"
Mattaius nodded again. "Agreed, they're more than overconfident. I don't think they're organized. I'm not convinced they really know what they're doing. Stevens' used the word brother. If what I know about the Necrosiac legend is true, they have to come from a particular bloodline. The Necro you killed, from the photo's I've seen, he looked late sixties maybe. I think you whacked daddy."
It was Terri's turn to nod "I took away their guidance. They're going to be unpredictable now"
"True" he replied "But they're going to be more apt to make mistakes."
Mattaius watched as Terri took another quick swig of her beer, tilted her head back and closed her eyes.
"They're early in their power. I wouldn't have stood a chance against Pappy if they weren't"
Mattaius didn't respond. There was no need. They both knew she was right.
Terri kept her eyes closed and slowly moved her head from side to side, stretching the muscles in her neck.
"It's not like they haven't been busy" she said "They've obviously taken a Seer"
Mattaius shook his head. "Judging from how easily they took over Stevens they probably got the Seer prior to Dad's dirt nap. That ability seems very developed. If I had to guess I'd say they probably haven't taken more than a couple more casters. These two are way out of control. If they were anywhere near their potential we could follow the trail of corpses straight to them"
Terri raised an eyebrow gave Mattaius a sardonic grin and lifted her bottle to him.
"Here's to small favors"
They clinked bottles and took another drink.
"One more thing that's been bothering me" She said. "When you said that they knew everything, you knew they could hear you didn't you?"
Mattaius smiled and nodded.
Terri slowly smiled back as the realization of what he'd done dawned on her. "You wanted them to think that, but they don't know everything do they? They don't know we have part of the list."
Mattaius' smile grew wider. "I reacted out of anger, but I knew what I was saying. I wasn't counting on Smith to give me away but that may turn to our advantage as well. We have an edge they're not counting on now. We have bait"
"You"
The smile on Mattaius face wavered then faded. "Yeah.... Me"
SUPER SECRET SPECIAL HAPPY BONUS!!!
A sneak peak into the future of NECROSIAC
ENJOY!!!
Necrosiac Timeline
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>The basic timeline of the Necrosiac Story.
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>July 16 2004
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>- Terri first Necrosiac encounter in Antique shop
>- Later that day bomb goes off in Morgue
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>July 17 2004
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>- Mattaius breaks up with Sheri, makes moves to join agency
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>July 20, 2004
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>- Charlie Foster is killed - Necrosiacs introduced.
>- Terri comes out of coma
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>July 24
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>- Mattaius discovers hit list
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>July 24, 25
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>-Director Stevens connects with Necrosiacs - they kill him
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>July 25
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>-Team Meeting at Agency - Mattaius notices they are being watched.
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>August 5
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>- Terri is introduced to the pleasures of hot girl on girl action (Special
>guest appearance by the chick from Wonder Years)
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>August 10
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>- Two Words - Space Monkeys
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>August 24
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>- Mattaius has sex with a donkey. Wonders about the meaning of it all.
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>September 3
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>- Toga party at the agency. Necrosiacs sneak in dressed like Caligula, get
>drunk and drive home. Mom grounds them for a month.
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>September 15
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>- Mattaius and Donkey break up. Donkey turns into Stalker.
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>October 30
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>- Not much happens. Terri stubs little toe, kills 5 people in retaliation.
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>November 15
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>- Donkey brutally rapes Christin Glover - Glover gives birth to Author.
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>December 31 2004
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>- Peace reigns - The entire population of the planet discovers donkey
>lovin.
User Reviews
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2007-05-07 10:33:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I didn't read the super secret happy bonus thing. It'd ruin the surprise. Thanks for putting it far enough down and titling it in CAPS so I didn't read it by accident.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-10-19 04:15:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
There are a solid four pages of +2 streaks with 30 or more reviews. That is stupid. I am weeding it all out by giving every one of them a +1; that way posts that have 1.99 with 200+ reviews gets best ever.
Submitted by zakalwe (user info) at 2005-06-12 20:10:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Revolutionman (user info) at 2005-05-04 23:42:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Charred (user info) at 2005-03-31 16:40:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Seriously?
Find a publisher.
Submitted by thorpe (user info) at 2005-03-28 05:39:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by DonkeyOnTheEdge (user info) at 2004-11-19 10:42:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Yay for Donkey in timelines. Good story, but no you've forced me to read prior instalments.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2004-11-15 16:45:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by wazzawazzayo (user info) at 2004-08-31 12:56:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
As a wise man once said, "I likea da post!" I believe it was Chef Boyardee, but I could be mistaken.
Submitted by nathan_s (user info) at 2004-08-25 17:32:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I love it. It is great, it is a sci-fi book without all the overly descriptive rooms. The magic appeals the the nerd D&D player in me. Keep writing!!!!
Submitted by engine13 (user info) at 2004-08-25 14:40:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
These are really great.
We better start seeing that hot donkey sex SOON damnit. Enough of this magic and dead people stuff, get to the good stuff.
Submitted by indepth25 (user info) at 2004-08-25 14:39:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Once again amazing writing, I think I use the word amazing to often when describing this series. On a sidenot Circe, congrats on twatwaffle I've been trying to find where it came from, it's a show stopper
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2004-08-25 14:21:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Xena is a very good friend of mine. Terri is based on her, and in many ways she is my muse.
Always good to hear you approve kiddo :)
Submitted by Xena (user info) at 2004-08-25 14:15:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"lobbed a grenade into a room full of baby kittens to deserve his Karma" - I love it!!!!
Submitted by Cryopaul (user info) at 2004-08-25 13:12:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I think you're spoiling us with the frequency of your writing. Don't stop though, I don't think I could make it through the week without more necrosiac...
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2004-08-25 13:01:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Doh accidentally hit the wrong button
AshK
HAHAHAHAHA!
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:59:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Circe
That might actually work!
I wore out the seizure thing a long time ago.
AshK
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:46:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Tell them you just found out that your high school sweetheart is getting married and you've realised how much you loved her, and that giggling like a little girl is your natural reaction to grief.
Alternatively, fake a seizure.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:40:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Must stop giggling at desk.
(People are starting to stare)
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:36:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Mattaius (boobies) felt (boobies) the power (boobies) of the spell before he saw (boobies) it...
..... ah crap.
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:35:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Have another +2 for reminding me WHO said twatwaffle first. My brother in law called his wife a twatwaffle the other day and about sustained serious injury. <pause, picture it...picture it...>
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:26:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Snark, every time you hear that word, remember that it's my word. So whenever you make that comparison with boobies, think of... oh. No, wait. There's no way I can make that sound good.
Never mind. Carry on.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:22:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
There's that word again!
I have no idea why Twatwaffle makes me giggle like a schoolboy who's discovered what boobies are.
Submitted by rydogg22 (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:21:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You don't miss a beat do you. This is really coming together, with each part bringing small pieces in from the previous chapters, yet always delving deeper into the 'Necro' world. Amazing!
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:19:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm going to agree with Ash on the Lumley comparison. This reminds me a lot of the Necroscope series, and not solely because of the title. There's something similar in the solidity of the writing.
That said, here's the review: You kicked ass. Yet again. Stop making the rest of us look bad.
And the timeline preview made me laugh until I couldn't breathe.
And you referring to me as talented made me giggle happily, like some annoying teenage twatwaffle, which I'm obviously NOT.
So there.
Submitted by OneCheapGeek (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:10:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I believed the bit about girl on girl action. This is Uber after all.
Here's where I figured it out: (Special guest appearance by the chick from Wonder Years)
Pretty fucking funny though.
Submitted by Malificent (user info) at 2004-08-25 12:07:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'll forgive you as long as you keep cranking out the quality work. :)
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2004-08-25 11:49:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Sorry Mal,
I'll be good from now on ;)
Submitted by Malificent (user info) at 2004-08-25 11:47:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I also fell for the sneak preview bit. :(
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-08-25 11:42:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
LOLOLO!!!!11111OMGoneoneone!!!11!!!
I <3 Snark!
er...What?!
I am flattered that you enjoy my writing and to be included in a category with Circe.
And no, you're opinion is NOT inflating my ego <------------ Big fat lie alert!
I'll go try to deflate my head and wipe down my nose now.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2004-08-25 11:34:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
AshK
Hehe sorry couldn't help myself. I actually wrote it for a friend as a joke yesterday.
I figured this story is more character development than anything. A little boring, so I made a spur of the moment decision to add the extra bit o' fun.
Thanks for the comparison. I love Lumley's(sp?) work. He did Necroscrope right? I don't personally believe my stuff is as good as him or King but that won't stop me from smiling and taking the compliment.
Here's my nose in your Anus... the reason I look forward to reviews from you and Circe is because of the quality of your writing. I enjoy everyones reviews but when it comes from obviously talented writers it's a little nicer.
*pop*
K I think we both need to wipe now.
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-08-25 11:23:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
<harumph> I fell for that sneak preview shit, and boy are you in trouble now! Grr.
This is just amazingly well written. Someone compared it to King, but I don't really see that as much as McCammon or Lumley (sp?). Either way, this is as near perfectly written as it could be without a team of editors. Not that I have noticed any big typos. I'm rambling, but this is so well organized and so intricately presented I am in awe.
M'Kay, I'll remove my nose from your anus now.
Nice work.