Hearken Yon, O Child (677 hits)
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Submitted by prophet (View user info) at 2004-08-27 13:49:36 EDT
Eric was exhausted. His eyelids closed tightly, and he started to go over the events of the day but got only as far as a few words in his mind before the darkness of a deep slumber enveloped him.
The wind whistled all around him as he opened his eyes to see a deep blue sky in every direction. Every direction, that is, but down- which happened to be the last place he looked. As he gazed between his feet below him, the figures rapidly approaching took shape. He was falling, with great speed, towards a park in the middle of a large metropolitan area. People walked around trees and ponds like small insects, but that was soon to change as Eric rocketed towards the ground.
Eric knew he had been here before. Find the place, he told himself... find the state. He let go of all he was perceiving, and grasped hold of something inside himself- a state of serenity that was almost impossible to attain in such a dire situation. Opening his eyes again, a change had occurred within him... for behind his irises no longer lay an empty stare, but instead burned the fire of the Divine.
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The citizens of New York who had the fate of witnessing the coming events would not forget them for as long as they lived. Those who happened to be in Central Park at that fateful moment could not help but crane their necks upward when they heard the shrill piercing note ring across the wind, coming directly from a bright dot against the cloudless sky that appeared to be growing rapidly in size. Within the space of scarcely a second, it flew with startling velocity into an uninhabited section of the earth, rippling and cracking the ground in all directions as it struck. The wave of sediment knocked several people over as it cascaded in a twenty feet radius from the point of origin.
A businessman gathered his senses and his hat from the ground where he had fallen, soon enough to recognize the figure crouched in the dust. A hand upon the ground and another stretched before him, he remained stationary for several moments at the epicenter of the explosion as an unearthly light cascaded about his raiment. It was a young man, clad in the whitest cloth- and strangely enough, his garb appeared unblemished by the cloud of dust that had yet to settle over the massive crater.
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Eric arose from the place where he had landed, and surveyed the massive destruction around him. A few lay injured and bleeding from pieces of concrete that had fragmented and taken flight from a former sidewalk, but Eric knew instinctively that none were mortally wounded.
He was also cognizant of what he had to do. Every thought fell into place like the gears of a well-oiled clock; clear, precise and immutable.
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"Boy? Boy, get up, you can't sleep here!"
Eric's eyes fluttered open to the sight of a bus station attendant, wearing the traditional dark blue uniform and cap. He pulled himself off of the bench into a sitting position, rubbed the sand from his eyes, apologized to the man, and left. He did not wonder about the dream. He had been having dreams quite like it, every night for the past three years.
To be continued...
User Reviews
Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2005-06-22 10:58:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I really liked the imagery of the second section
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2004-09-27 16:16:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/m/45888
a promised...
plus awesome post!
Submitted by jack11058 (user info) at 2004-09-07 04:57:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Looks like this could be pretty interesting...
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2004-08-27 16:47:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
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Submitted by youarsoghey (user info) at 2004-08-27 16:34:53 (#)
Ranking: 2
Well...
You don't like Harry Potter, but this was still a good post.
+2, damn it.
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Thanks, man. Much obliged.
Actually, my comment regarding the Harry Potter post wasn't so much as to show that I didn't like Harry Potter as it was to show that the entertainment industry, in general, is designed to melt people's brains.
I've seen all three of the movies (the last one on an IMax screen- very cool), and each of them ENTERTAINED me. But I still think that as a populace, we are far oversaturated with entertainment, to the point of deterring us from the development of the mind, body and soul.
*whistles innocuously as he works out his next entertaining post*
Submitted by youarsoghey (user info) at 2004-08-27 16:34:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Well...
You don't like Harry Potter, but this was still a good post.
+2, damn it.
Submitted by NerfHerder (user info) at 2004-08-27 15:59:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The first option.
Maybe it's my quasi-weak short term memory, but i always forget the intricacies of the earlier parts.
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2004-08-27 15:22:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
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Submitted by NerfHerder (user info) at 2004-08-27 14:26:21 (#)
Ranking: 2
Honestly, I'm not a big fan of series. However, this deserves more reviews than the 0 it has now.
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You're not a big fan of series-based stories on Ubersite, or you're not a big fan of this idea for a series?
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2004-08-27 14:50:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hey, this could be good! It's definitely a good start. Don't turn it into the Matrix and you'll be in good shape with the rest of the story.
+2 for an interesting start. Notify me when you write more of it.
Submitted by NerfHerder (user info) at 2004-08-27 14:26:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Honestly, I'm not a big fan of series. However, this deserves more reviews than the 0 it has now.
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2004-08-27 13:57:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Actually, when I said favorite series to-date, I lied. It's tied with the JtR series I've started.
I like each one for different reasons.
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2004-08-27 13:54:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Interestingly enough, this tale was my 13th post (and my favorite series I've started to-date).
Unintentional, but interesting just the same.