Afternoon hallucinations (845 hits)
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Submitted by Glitch Cow (View user info) at 2004-08-29 12:35:15 EDT
"Hey pretty girl...time to wake up," someone whispered.
Whoever it was very gently (very, very gently) blew on my eyelids. I rolled over and whimpered, and they blew on my eyelids again.
"Come on pretty girl...pretty girl..." and that someone began to sound distinctly like a rare man that I've been lucky enough to know. I opened my eyes with delight and reached out.
And there was absolutely no one there.
There's a moment that sometimes drags into an intoxicating duration in between sleep and waking, when the world is neither here nor there. I've learned I no longer believe in surprise. Things happen during this moment, that never happened and never will happen. I hallucinate images of completely simple grandeur and then snap into waking only to be thoroughly disappointed.
It's dusk, and nothing is quite real anymore. Everything distorts into strange manipulations of existence. These aren't dreams. I'm not sure what they are, only that I both want them to last forever and know that if they did I might lose my mind.
The other afternoon I caught myself drifting off while trying very, very hard to stay awake. As I wavered between, a familiar song began to play in my head.
....On the right hand she had a tattoo of a nude girl
she claimed it is what god resembled
But on the left she had a mirrored image of the same female
and this one she explained looked like the devil....
And I looked up as I realized that someone else was humming it. A very old man dressed in red, hovering over my bed, flashed a gang sign at me. His hands contorted to spell out the word "Blood".
As soon as I shook my head to clear my thoughts and looked again, he was gone.
User Reviews
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2004-11-17 15:35:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
what else is there to say?
Submitted by dakingisdead (user info) at 2004-08-30 21:07:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hey this happens to me to but usually it is Casta Laetitia or my wife, rubbing their boobies up and down my body while fondling........Ok enough said.
Submitted by YELLOW-MAN (user info) at 2004-08-29 20:32:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
HEY SPLAY SHIGGITY!! SHIGGITY!! SWAY? guess what idioth what you did today? uhh BOW HEY I got new super 88 system you did not swear to god i got it from chunky's for two dollars hey oh yeah lemme see it wow yeah you like that idiot dont you i do? shut up goth damn it even came with a game its called super mario twins i want to play good gov they so goth damn like the same person i says to them you want ice cream cone both them say yes damnt to hell hey lets play ok here it goes
DUH DUH DUH DOH DUH DUH DUH
CONTINUES
you found the princess ehh she's in another house go away. what damnt to hell whats she doing there crap on this lets play super mario sponge off
Submitted by hamilton (user info) at 2004-08-29 20:23:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
What the fuck are you doing on ubersite?
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2004-08-29 19:44:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I love you, babes!
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-08-29 19:40:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm happy now that I know who you are. (Google is a wonderful thing.)
This was really good.
Submitted by Pimp dibbidy shiznizzle at 2004-08-29 14:41:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Yea...totally a wicked entry. that's all i have to say about that
Submitted by kai070169 (user info) at 2004-08-29 14:39:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"There's a moment that sometimes drags into an intoxicating duration in between sleep and waking, when the world is neither here nor there."
that's where I live.
Submitted by GlitchCowman (user info) at 2004-08-29 14:29:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks FA, I'm playing around, seeing what I can do to mix things up with my writing.
Submitted by Tenyuki (user info) at 2004-08-29 14:29:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I liked this. But don't get so aggravated because of naysayers. If you're going to prove them wrong by showing comments and shit linked to your alter ego, then what's the point in even having THIS name? Having a new identity is supposed to help shed away the image you once had. But going back to it to help prove yourself, and perhaps boost your ego, is just stupid. Say what you will, it's just my opinion on it.
Submitted by FilthyAssistant (user info) at 2004-08-29 14:21:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
If you are who I think you are (one of the reviews pasted below and something your alter has recently said leading me to that particular conclusion), then I like the stuff you're writing under this username way better. You always had a good style but your choice of subject matter got a bit 'me, me, me, me again, me also' after a while.
Submitted by krumb <krumb_jb.at.yahoo.com> at 2004-08-29 14:12:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
+1 because of the ATMOSPHERE reference
Submitted by Electro (user info) at 2004-08-29 13:56:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Professor, It sounds likea you are wantin a beating yourself...
Submitted by ParlorTrick (user info) at 2004-08-29 13:48:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Not sure why this is getting a beating.
My take - It's about abstraction, hallucinations, it should be vauge and watery. It's like thoughts waking up in the morning.
Nice to have variety in writing I always say. (well...I said that today)
Submitted by Rixes (user info) at 2004-08-29 13:32:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
This story is like my sex life, short, and boring.
Submitted by corn_nugget (user info) at 2004-08-29 13:08:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
oh gosh... I want to blow your cover.
I WANT TO SOOOO BAD. You see, it'll make me feel smart, and everyone will be like "oh, how did she KNOW?!".
But I won't. Someone else WILL, but it won't be me.
Dammit.
I liked this. Admittedly, I haven't read your other stuff that you use with your OTHER name... err... I'm usually not a fan of writing that I see as "fluffy" and "loving" and all of that... and for whatever reason that's what I always thought of your other stuff.
But I read this, and I liked it, and I'm not sure if it's because of the new name (hence, I wasn't "expecting anything") or because of the new shorter format...
or whatever.
I liked it.
Submitted by smithy32 (user info) at 2004-08-29 13:00:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
eh, i knew a guy in the bloods once, he was prety creepy, maybe that was him
Submitted by GlitchCowman (user info) at 2004-08-29 12:57:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Last thing professor fuck face
1. It's not a story, it's a vignette of sorts
2. I didn't need to use a thesaurus or rack my brain for adjectives
3. Here are some comments I've gotten on a VERY similar piece I've written, so excuse me, I don't expect to repeat this but I don't expect all negative two's, it's not that crappy:
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Submitted by Herpes (user info) at 2004-05-08 18:39:53 (#)
Ranking: 2
Well written, wasn't complete crap. Not my favorite kind of fiction, but I can appreciate your style.
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Submitted by Magicaddict (user info) at 2004-05-08 19:20:04 (#)
Ranking: 2
Interesting. Very interesting.
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Submitted by Scott_James (user info) at 2004-05-08 19:00:36 (#)
Ranking: 2
This rules. Surprise, surprise. :-)
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Submitted by professorfuckface (user info) at 2004-08-29 12:50:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Good to see your 'experiment' was a raging success.
Submitted by GlitchCowman (user info) at 2004-08-29 12:48:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
This account is an experiment, go fuck yourself.
Submitted by professorfuckface (user info) at 2004-08-29 12:43:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I like this site when people write stories, not a bunch of new-age, abstract indecipherable bullshit. Here, I will summarize your 'story' for you:
Vague opening, thesaurus, thesaurus, adjective, adjective, adjective, the end.
What do you want people to say? "Oh, your words are so powerful and this story gives me a sense of something of a higher nature." This is a piece of randomly thrown together words, and nothing more.