Bag of Memories (830 hits)
Category: RomanceRating: 1.71 on 12 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Wild Bill (View user info) at 2004-10-11 11:54:21 EDT
Bag of Memories
I
Today makes it 40 years, 40 years since I lost her. I remember everything so clearly though, just like it was yesterday. I remember her face, her smile, and the way she laughed. I remember how it felt to have her head on my shoulder when she would cry. I remember how time seemed to slip away like so many of the tears I shed. I can still tell our story the same every time I share it. I never forget a detail. I can't forget because it's impossible for me to forget. The memories we made together are a part of my being, I wake up to them, and are the last thing on my mind when I fall asleep. You might find this somewhat haunting, but if you knew the girl who I was in love with, you would want to remember her too. If you want, I can tell you about her, and how she changed my life. Who knows, maybe she can change your life too.
II
I was walking down the hallway of my high school in Fairfield County Ohio, which was lovingly referred to as a "farm school". Our football team was average, and so were the people in our area. There were no scholars here, no college quality athletes, no future presidents, but we were all happy, and that was enough.
So as I walked down the hallways, I saw this girl who I had never seen before. I felt all the air empty from my lungs, and my jaw slightly drop as I took in how beautiful she was. She smiled at me as she passed, and it was such a sincere, and honest smile.
"Hi, I'm Tyler Greene. Are you new here?"
"Hi, I'm Sarah Lewis, yea I'm new."
"Are you a freshman?"
"Yea, you look like a...junior?"
"Sophomore, but thanks I guess. So how is everything going?"
"It's going ok, I don't really know anyone."
"Well, you know someone now, need help with anything?"
"Do you know where room 203 is?"
"Yea, if you want, I can show you where it is."
"All right, thanks."
I led her down to the far end of the hallway and pointed out the room, we talked about how she had moved from her old house to the new Collegeville development.
"Yea, apparently a lot of people from this school live there."
"I guess," I said, "I only live about 15 minutes away."
"Great, maybe we can hang out sometime."
All I could do was smile, this girl was beautiful, and there was something so different about her that I just wanted to get to know more and more of. "Sure thing, I'd love that. I'll see you around."
After a couple of classes, I walked into the lunchroom, and saw her standing with a tray of food, looking around kind of nervously. She didn't know where to sit. I caught her eye, and smiled at her with a wave to invite her to sit with me. A look of relief passed her face and she made her way over to me.
"Thanks, I didn't know anyone in this period."
"Have you met anyone else yet?"
"I met a girl named Mel in ceramics, she's really sweet, her friends Jordann and Taylor were there too. Plus the teacher was really nice. Mrs. Dakay."
"Yea, she's awesome, I have her second period."
"Then I met some really nice people in the history class. I didn't think that everyone would be this nice."
We sat and talked the entire period; she seemed so relieved to have someone to talk to who really wanted to be with her. She was so easy to talk to, probably because you couldn't help but talk to her; she had this natural grace about her that drew you in. The bell rang and we went through the rest of the day. I had no idea that this day would be one that would change the course of my life, forever.
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I just have had extra time on my hands lately, hopefully you will enjoy the start of this story, I'll post more chapters later.
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Submitted by Jaineix (user info) at 2004-10-22 21:45:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2004-10-20 11:43:05 EDT (#)
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Submitted by lilbill87 (user info) at 2004-10-11 21:26:25 EDT (#)
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thank you all so much for the comments, I really like this story. It's kina something that happened to me in my life, and I'm trying my hardest to relay it the best I can. I will try and fix the rushed spots. Oh, and nerfherder, I had summer breeze in my head too. now it's stuck, thanks
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2004-10-11 14:12:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Dude Fairfield? Is that around Dayton, the Gem City of shit? If it is we could meet for some toast and go buy some drugs on the west side.
Submitted by tripIe_optics (user info) at 2004-10-11 13:18:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
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Submitted by MyNameIsTim (user info) at 2004-10-11 12:23:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by titmouse (user info) at 2004-10-11 12:15:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
new soley would +2 something like that
Submitted by NerfHerder (user info) at 2004-10-11 12:14:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I have "Summer Breeze" going through my head right now and I don't know why.
Submitted by Soley_Trinity (user info) at 2004-10-11 12:11:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
More!
Submitted by Phallic_Cymbals (user info) at 2004-10-11 12:11:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Hey Butthead huh huh, huhuh. It says "I have her second period" huh huh hhuhuhh hhuhuhhuhhuhh huhhuhhuhuh etc. ad infinitum
Submitted by gibberish (user info) at 2004-10-11 12:09:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked it.
Up in the first section, last line, I think it would look better as:
"Who knows... maybe she can change your life too."
...or leaving it the same but dropping that line into its own separate mini-paragraph. As it stands right now it sounds a bit too rushed to me. Just a thought.
Submitted by titmouse (user info) at 2004-10-11 12:00:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
you know what? that was gonna be my first sincere +2 to someone who wrote something soppy, but then you made a crdinal sin of putting 'to be continued' how annoying