He wasn't trying to fly. That's just how it happened. (chapter 2) (642 hits)
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Submitted by The Downward Spiral of your Mind (View user info) at 2004-10-24 21:03:20 EDT
They sat on their picnic cloth, daintily chatting under a parasol, casually keeping him in their eyesight as he roamed the vicinity. He trotted down to the stream's edge to feel the mud squirt up between his toes. A light semblance of rain was hovering in the air, like a loose mist waiting for time to pull it down to the earth. He plopped down, half onto mud and half onto water, listening to the leaves and the stream as they sang to each other in secret whispers. He closed his eyes and smiled as he felt a light breeze drift tiny droplets of cool dampness against the little hairs on his face.
Relishing the moment that seemed to last a lifetime, he finally opened his eyes again, looking up towards the canopy. With his neck craned up, the rhythmically swaying leaves would occasionally step away from their partners in dance, allowing him to peer through their waltz for a moment at the sky above, blanketed by a lumpy gray mass of soft, light comfort. His eyes darted back and forth, catching each aperture they could and releasing it for another once it began to close, taking in the sky piece by piece, building a slow puzzle of vision and appreciation.
Having satisfied himself with the nature of the expanse, he pulled his face back down towards the blues and greens and browns of the shaded forest. He heard a fish jump out the water to the left, upstream, and snapped his head over to catch a glimpse. He barely saw its tail splash back under, and let his eyes wander down the stream, following the contours of the current, down into the depths of the trees and shadows beyond.
Then he froze. Down there, some mere meters away, drinking from the water in the ground and the air, was a flower. Just like the one that had visited his home, so long ago. Time stopped as he swallowed up the details with his eyes. The world became silent as he strained to listen to the soft rustle of the petals against each other. Sensation disappeared as he suddenly found himself bending down over it, brushing two mottled fingertips against one purple petal, caressing it so lightly he wasn't sure that he was feeling it at all.
They would not take kindly to another element of the outside in the house. He looked over his shoulder at them. They were still entertaining themselves with discourse, paying him only enough heed to ensure he did not venture beyond the safe trees. They neither could nor did see what he actually was doing. Feeling safe from their gaze by grace of his fortune, just as he felt safe from the sun by grace of the forest, he plucked the dainty blossom and hid it in his trousers.
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Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2006-06-06 23:11:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2006-03-31 06:41:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I've just realised how old this is.
Nicely written but a little short this time.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-26 13:05:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Good stuff. Reminds me a bit of Neil Gaiman.
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2004-11-24 15:36:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i know what you mean. the rating system here is far too limited; you either feel mildly about something or want to fuck it(whether literally or agressively).
Submitted by FuckTheArmy (user info) at 2004-11-24 08:00:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Deserves a better rating than its average (although I personally would only give this a +1 if it weren't so lowly rated by some people... and I tend to favour people who rate my stuff well too).
Submitted by Lechuga (user info) at 2004-11-18 07:09:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
To try and make up for Immygirl's gayness.
Submitted by immygirl1 (user info) at 2004-11-16 22:18:30 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
hi isRATos! its me again. i didnt read this piece of shit u call a post. im just here to rate it a -2. because im sexy like that.
p.s. im gonna rate ALL ur posts -2.
Submitted by I_Have_a_Kristen_Fetish (user info) at 2004-11-07 11:04:04 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Mind if I +2 my own shit?
Submitted by professorfuckface (user info) at 2004-10-25 00:12:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Killing in the name of? Killing in the name of what??
Submitted by Random Joe at 2004-10-24 22:07:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
You're a good writer but your author name is bloody cheap and horrrible.
It makes me cringe.
Submitted by TheMidnight12AM (user info) at 2004-10-24 21:46:16 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2004-10-24 21:41:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
you're too kind :)
well no, no you're not
bring on the praise, you bastards!
Submitted by drfeggphd (user info) at 2004-10-24 21:39:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Words are my defense and the walls are coming down.