The Survivor - Thirty-one (797 hits)
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Submitted by <brdn_nkd.at.yahoo.com> (View user info) at 2004-11-08 10:31:46 EST
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I was so full of hatred and rage after Jeff left that I again considered chasing after him. I gathered my wits though and took comfort in the knowledge that his time would come soon. Whereas before I was filled with a cool rage, Jeff's visit fanned the flames until my anger was flaming hot and I vowed that his death would be so much more than a simple shot to the head. He would suffer and pay for what he's done but that's for a later date. I had to prepare for tomorrow.
I didn't know how tomorrow will go, I will have to be creative with this one. More than ever I need this to look like an accident. I went to bed that night thinking back to my last night with Gina before everything went more wrong than it had already been. I slept uneasily that night, dreaming over and over of Gina's fall from the log. I tried over and over in my sleep to be just a little faster, a little stronger, to get there in time to catch her and save her, but as in life I was never quite able to reach her before the horrifying crack of her skull hitting the rocks.
I woke feeling as tired as I'd been last night before retiring. I was out of sorts, groggy, seeing the world through a haze. I made myself some breakfast and a pot of coffee to try to wake up and get ready for the day. I was kind of looking forward to today, I was going for a drive in the country and hoped that I might be able to unwind a bit before meeting up with Jeff's boss, Ron. His boss had a cabin north of the city and his secretary told me he'd be there this weekend. I'd been casually seeing her so that I could get the information I needed on each of my quarry. She was a nice girl and though she knew me from the show she never seemed to put it together that I might be using what she tells me to hunt my prey.
I drove out of the city and settled in for the forty-five minute drive north. It was a beautiful fall day and the leaves had begun to turn color so I enjoyed the scenery as it rolled past me. As I neared Ron's cabin I pulled off to the side of the road. I could drive in but that wouldn't give me a chance to see what I had to work with. As I walked toward the cabin I heard the sound of a small engine and soon spotted Ron working away at a wood chipper. This was no small chipper, it looked like one of those jobs they use to chip logs after removing a dead tree and as large as it was I thought that Ron's accident might not be so hard to arrange after all. As I crept closer I could see his wife and kids through the window of the cabin, hope Ron's got good insurance.
Ron's family was consumed with whatever it was they were doing so I didn't think I'd need to worry about them, I continued working my way closer until I could hear Ron swearing at the log he was trying to shove into the chipper. As the log went into the chute and came out the other end I rushed Ron and butted him as hard as I could into the maw of the chipper then continued running back into the woods. His family heard his screams as he was sucked into the big machine and rushed out in time to see the remainder of his body pulled into the chipper then sprayed out the back in big nasty red chunks. I felt bad for his family but Ron was one the executives who'd decided to change the game so he had this coming to him.
His family never saw me crouched in the woods and later I was able to find out that they had indeed called his death an accident and that his family was trying to sue the manufacturer of the machine for not having some kind of failsafe mechanism to prevent a death like Ron's. That didn't concern me much though, the fact that everyone else believed Ron had died in some freak accident was what made me so happy, there was nothing at that scene to tie me to his death.
I walked back to my car, a relaxing stroll through the woods, and arrived in time to see an ambulance and police car race by. I chuckled as I thought to myself that unless the ambulance comes with a strainer there's not much they're going to find to pick up. I pulled off the shoulder and drove the rest of the way home thinking about the things I would need for Jeff's sentence. I would need time to prepare for his death and while I was working on him I would be a very busy fellow so I needed to be sure I'd covered all my bases. No rest for the weary, you know?
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Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-19 06:37:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
What Wrightcopy said.
Submitted by Davros (user info) at 2005-12-28 07:04:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Getting Worried.
Too many people know who Ben is.
Will he be able to fulfill his plans?
-Dave
Submitted by RyuFu (user info) at 2005-11-04 12:22:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
The show's producers and hosts really warp Ben's mind. I thoiught he would have second thoughts when he saw the dude's family...but the dude's family never saw the other side of the dude.
Sickening, but fitting, way to go.
Submitted by Wrightcopy (user info) at 2005-09-12 10:31:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The way you've written this whole series, either purposely or accidentally, is great. You go from the first bad things on the island to the first bad things Ben ends up doing for revenge. By doing this, the reader is building up in both scenes. For example, Ben's just lost his love, something very traumatic. Then, in the following revenge scene, he has no problem shoving a man into a wood chipper despite the fact that his family is right there. If you had just done it chronologically, it would be two build ups, two climaxes, and I don't think it would be as good of a read. Good stuff.
Submitted by mikethescottish (user info) at 2005-03-01 17:40:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Ed_0150 (user info) at 2005-01-21 00:34:04 EST (#)
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Submitted by Fleury75 (user info) at 2005-01-13 10:41:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
sweet
Submitted by jack11058 (user info) at 2004-11-26 12:32:04 EST (#)
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Submitted by MyNameIsTim (user info) at 2004-11-08 12:09:37 (#)
Ranking: 2
continued excellence
Submitted by zakalwe (user info) at 2004-11-13 12:53:56 EST (#)
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Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2004-11-08 12:31:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
The old push 'em into the woodchipper trick.
Submitted by MyNameIsTim (user info) at 2004-11-08 12:09:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
continued excellence
Submitted by wookie (user info) at 2004-11-08 11:29:56 EST (#)
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Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2004-11-08 10:51:58 EST (#)
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