Who will be my Juliet? (poem) (526 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: 1.4 on 7 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Wild Bill (View user info) at 2004-11-16 19:00:30 EST
My girlfriend of almost 2 years called it quits on me a couple weeks ago. Quite unexpected, so I was down for awhile. But, I guess this kind of explains how I feel about moving on and what I want eventually...right now I want pussy.
I know no one really cares how I feel...so juss rate the poem...not my pissing and moaning
Who will be my Juliet?
I have been searching for the one who will be,
The one to open my eyes to see,
The things my heart missed all along,
How I had been living my life all wrong.
She'd show me what it meant to live,
She'd show me what it meant to give.
She'd show me how the best things are free,
In the everyday way that she loved me.
I'd love her with all my heart and life,
Best friends from now till she's my wife.
I'll give my life without regret,
Who will be my Juliet?
User Reviews
Submitted by lilbill87 (user info) at 2004-11-17 14:57:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
sorry Siren...wasn't in the best of moods when I submitted it...
Submitted by Siren (user info) at 2004-11-17 05:21:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I would've +2ed and said "pick me!" if you hadn't said you just want pussy. Killed the whole thing. It's still cute, though.
Submitted by MikeyP3184 (user info) at 2004-11-17 00:11:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Been there man.
7,000 miles away from the woman i love and i get told
" i don't feel anything anymore "
Woulda prefered a kick in the nuts
Submitted by lilbill87 (user info) at 2004-11-16 21:02:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
dude...my heart is broken...I could care less bout couplets hahahaha....no just kidding, thanks for the criticism, I'll see if I can clean that up a little bit...
and nerf...your promoted
Submitted by MyNameIsTim (user info) at 2004-11-16 20:46:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
i understand how your'e down. it sucks.
but the rhyming and rhythm was pretty weak, save for the last couplet.
live/give? wife/life?
you gotta do better than that
Submitted by NerfHerder (user info) at 2004-11-16 20:04:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Can I be promoted from "Sugar Muffin" to "Juliet"?
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2004-11-16 19:29:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Not bad Bill! im sorry for your pain.