Hooked on a "Feeling". (1459 hits)
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Submitted by Bigmike (View user info) at 2004-11-18 10:33:45 EST
"Ouga Chaka
ouga ouga
Ouga Chaka
ouga ouga
I can't stop this feeling
Deep inside of me.
Girl, you just don't realize
What you do to me."
He's watching her from across the room and thinking how beautiful she is. He admires her hair, he longs to touch the smooth skin on her face. It drives him crazy to wonder how soft her lips would be on his. As he pans his gaze down her body, he realizes that, even after two years of watching her move through the hallways from class to class, he still has the same amount of wanton lust for her that he has had since the first time he laid eyes on her. Two years now and he's finally getting close to asking her out. It's painful for him because he has carried this torch for her so very long. Finally he's getting up enough nerve to approach her. He couldn't stop staring.
"When you hold me
In your arms so tight,
You let me know,
Everythings alright,
I'm hooked on a feeling,
I'm high on believing,
That you're in love with me."
She feels dirty at the sight of him staring her down. She is beginning to think that he is some kind of mad stalker that is relentless in the pursuit of another victim. He seems to watch her everywhere she goes and he is always popping up at the strangest places. She remembers seeing him as she is coming out of the locker room after cheerleading. She remembers catching him out of the corner of her eye after swim practice. She swears that she saw him looking up into her bedroom window the other night as she was getting ready for bed. "God" she thinks. "Why can't he pick somebody else to creep out." She tried to ignore his gaze, but she could feel it burning a hole in her body.
"Lips as sweet as candy.
Their taste stays on my mind.
Girl, you keep me thirsty for another cup of wine.
I got it bad for you girl,
But I don't need a cure,
I'll just stay addicted, If I can endure."
He observes her casual glance toward him and he is instantly excited. Thoughts of lovemaking go through his head rapidly, one scene after another. He is so close now, so close to making his move. If he could just get his body to react to the thoughts he was having. If he just wasn't so afraid of rejection. If he just wasn't so insecure. "That's it" he says to nobody in particular. "I'm going to do it tonight!" He finishes off the drink he's holding and gets ready to make his move.
"All the good love, when we're all alone
Keep it up girl, yeah you turn me on.
I'mmm, I'mmm Hooked on a feeling.
I'm high on believing that your in love with me.
All the good love, when we're all alone
Keep it up girl, yeah you turn me on.
Ahaha I'm hooked on a feeling,
I'm high on believing,
That you're in love with me."
The look in his eyes was frightening. She figured he must be extremely drunk by the way his body was swaying as he stood against the wall. He is alone, as usual. Every time she sees him, he is alone. No friends, no buddies, no girls, nobody. And the way he dresses all in black is very intimidating to her. She has him pegged as a piercing and tattooing guy even though the thought of discovering if he has either is quite repulsing to her. "I hope he doesn't try to talk to me" is what she's thinking right now. "I hope he stays right where he is."
"I'm hooked on a feeling,
I'm high on believing,
That you're in love with me."
He leaves his spot against the wall and confidently starts to stride over to her. He's feeling no pain and he knows that the time is right. He knows that she can't refuse him. As he walks across the room, he senses that she knows this as well. He knows that she will receive him with open arms and give him a chance. "How can she refuse me?" he thinks. We are perfect for each other. I am in love with her and I know she loves me. She has to.
"I say I'm hooked on a feeling,
And I'm high on believing,
That you're in love with me.
I'm hooked on a feeling."
She watches as he starts his drunken weave towards her. "Oh no!" she thinks and instantly looks for a way to run. She is surrounded by people at this party and there is really no way out. As he moves closer to her, her skin starts to crawl. She watches. One step, then another. He bumps into some people and seems to keep coming like some out of control pinball. Another step closer, then another. She is afraid now. Afraid that she will finally have to deal with this guy that's been watching her for so very long. He is so drunk that he is staggering towards her, a look of intense concentration and determination on his face. She feels like a woman at the gallows, head in the noose. She looks at him like a deer in headlights. He finally gets within 2 feet of her. She can see the sweat beaded up on his forehead. She can see the accentuated redness of the blemishes on his face due to the alcohol. His eyes are half closed. She is scared to death.
"Hi, I'm.........." CRASH!
He falls forward into her and then rolls off and crashes to the floor. He has passed out in a drunken stupor. She jumps up immediately and runs for the door. The crowd has fallen silent and has begun staring at the man on the floor. Most everybody recognizes him as the loner, the outcast, the geek. They can all see the vomit trailing out of his mouth as he lay unconscious on the floor.
The entire crowd turns as one and continues what they were doing. Nobody cares, nobody reaches down to help. It's almost as if he isn't even there.
"I say I'm hooked on a feeling,
And I'm high on believing,
That you're in love with me.
I'm hooked on a feeling."
User Reviews
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-11-22 09:41:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-11-18 13:23:07 (#)
Ranking: 0
"Would it be possible to compile your Uber writings and submit them (either as an anthology or otherwise) to a strong house, like Knoff or Houghton Mifflin?"
They are not good enough.
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I can't imagine you would ever think they were good enough, but listen to the people who follow your posts. I think "good enough" doesn't even begin to cover it. I read your posts because I love the way you wrap my mind around your story. It is more than a good read, it is a sensory experience between the musice here and the imagery on the DOAM series.
I think I like these because I will get a story in my head when I hear a song. I've only tried to write it out once, and it didn't do too badly here, but your music posts are perfection.
Allright, fan letter done. My natural nose color isn't brown, so I had best cease and desist.
Submitted by lojope (user info) at 2004-11-19 08:13:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-11-18 21:47:50 (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by lojope (user info) at 2004-11-18 20:26:55 (#)
Ranking: 2
I went to meet you tonight and you weren't there. :o(
Alas, there's always tomorrow night or Saturday.
John Galt in town?
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
No, he's not here this weekend. Maybe for my birthday in December though.
Your co-worker may think I am crazy now. I loitered outside the door for a few minutes and he kept glancing at me. When I didn't see you I walked in to the back to see if you were back there and I just couldn't see you from the door. As I was wandering around some guy came up to me and asked "Do you need your glasses adjusted?" I told him no and then asked, "Um... does a Mike work here?"
Then he gave me a funny look and said "Uh... not tonight."
Then I turned tail and shuffled out of the store without saying bye or anything.
So yeah, if anyone asked why some weird blonde was looking for you.... that was me.
Submitted by zakalwe (user info) at 2004-11-19 07:59:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This post spoke to me.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-11-19 07:49:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You articulate pathos very, very well.
Submitted by Vermin (user info) at 2004-11-19 02:09:00 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2004-11-19 01:03:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I was singing that song in my head before I made it past the title.
Between that and Seralena's "So Far Away"
I've got music running through my head left and right today!
Submitted by sparkle_pink (user info) at 2004-11-19 00:44:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I hate that song. And I hate Ally McBeal.
Lucky for you, you are a max power writer to the max.
Submitted by Davros (user info) at 2004-11-18 22:02:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Good Tune.
Great Story.
-Davros
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-11-18 21:47:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by lojope (user info) at 2004-11-18 20:26:55 (#)
Ranking: 2
I went to meet you tonight and you weren't there. :o(
Alas, there's always tomorrow night or Saturday.
John Galt in town?
Submitted by lojope (user info) at 2004-11-18 20:26:55 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I went to meet you tonight and you weren't there. :o(
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-11-18 18:54:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2004-11-18 17:37:23 (#)
Ranking: 1
Uhhhhh...I believe the words are "...roly poly fish heads" but I suppose I could be mistaken.
You're probably right Schlongy, my memory of that song is vague at best.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2004-11-18 17:38:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
PS> "Coconut" is by Harry Nilsson, same guy who did "Everybody's Talkin'" from "Midnight Cowboy".
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2004-11-18 17:37:23 EST (#)
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Uhhhhh...I believe the words are "...roly poly fish heads" but I suppose I could be mistaken.
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-11-18 17:16:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
"how about the dr. demento show, did you you have that on the radio in the east?"
Yeah, we had doctor demento. I never listened to him but what I heard was funny.
"Fish heads, fish heads, tiny little fish heads. Fish heads, fish heads, eat them up yum."
Submitted by MickGinny (user info) at 2004-11-18 16:13:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Some songs I never get sick of hearing. This is not one of them. It was cool the 1st 100k times i heard it.
remember that song put the lime in the coconut and mix it together or something like that? i ended up hating that fucker too.
how about the dr. demento show, did you you have that on the radio in the east? that show kicked ass.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2004-11-18 16:04:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Man, I *hate* it when that happens.
Submitted by Mr-Boo (user info) at 2004-11-18 14:45:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn you! Now I've got that damn song in my head.
Good writing though.
Submitted by DanielH (user info) at 2004-11-18 13:28:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You underestimate your talent. You're too close to it (and too your characters) to see it as other do.
Submitted by JMG114 (user info) at 2004-11-18 13:23:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Stop being a dumbass. I like that song, and I like your writing.
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-11-18 13:23:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
"Would it be possible to compile your Uber writings and submit them (either as an anthology or otherwise) to a strong house, like Knoff or Houghton Mifflin?"
They are not good enough.
Submitted by DanielH (user info) at 2004-11-18 13:11:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Awesome as always.
Whenever I read you, I think of Copyright laws:
Would it be possible to compile your Uber writings and submit them (either as an anthology or otherwise) to a strong house, like Knoff or Houghton Mifflin? I think so. I have a friend via my sister who's a senior editor at Berkley-Jove, ((Berkley in NY isn't spelled like "Berkeley" in CA)) who found someone's writings on the internet and signed them, without their having published anything; the interesting thing is that she (the editor) wanted these internet stories fleshed out into a novel. So I believe the answer is yes, you could. Just a thought.
Submitted by Yes (user info) at 2004-11-18 12:45:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
good stuff.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2004-11-18 12:38:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by loki (user info) at 2004-11-18 12:31:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by thaumaturge (user info) at 2004-11-18 12:11:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I liked the imagery, I just couldn't get that damn Ally McBeal out of my head though.
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-11-18 11:53:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:45:05 (#)
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Thank you for clearing that up.
I like their "ooga chuckas" better.
Me too.
Submitted by mrwolf (user info) at 2004-11-18 11:13:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I used to be that guy... thank god I'm so cool now.
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:49:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
A BigMike music post.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:45:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Thank you for clearing that up.
I like their "ooga chuckas" better.
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:44:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by kai070169 (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:38:30 (#)
Ranking: 2
A non-abusive, rectally healthy (just like you!) +2.
You're just being silly. :)
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:42:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:37:59 (#)
Ranking: 0
Is this the BJ Thomas version or the Blue Suede version?
Blue Swede.
Submitted by Sassmasterr (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:39:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:37:03 (#)
Ranking: 2
Very good.
My cliche sensor didn't even bleep!
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:38:55 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
That's so sad. Poor guy!
Submitted by kai070169 (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:38:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
A non-abusive, rectally healthy (just like you!) +2.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:37:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Is this the BJ Thomas version or the Blue Suede version?
Or, and I shudder to even think this...the David Hasselhoff version?
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2004-11-18 10:37:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Very good.
My cliche sensor didn't even bleep!