She went looking for something in the orchards (908 hits)
Category: RomanceRating: 1.19 on 22 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by insanethemind (View user info) at 2004-11-21 19:06:37 EST
Sara left the church just before services were over, alone. She didn't feel quite right so staying after for socialisation wasn't on her agenda tonight. Tonight she wanted to walk among the orchard groves and have some peace.
She started down 7th Ave. towards the outskirts of town, her long flowing dress creating a small draft below. Nice, on any other night. Tonight it seemed nothing could bring her pleasure. *splat!* (she stepped on a frog and much to her surprise she smiled) Continuing on, she hung a left on Orchard Drive, the street which would take her out to serenity, to the orchards. It would not be long now, another 2 miles or so walk and she'd be there, alone with her thoughts. She started to hum 'What a wonderful world', with such gusto that you'd think some charlatan by the name of Louis Armstrong had stolen it from her, some years before. This song had always brought to her great comfort and tonight was no different.
Finally she arrived at the groves, all lined up in perfect rows, with tall orange trees with swooping branches and orange fruit almost ripe for the picking. Here is where she needed to be this night. She took off her shawl and wrapped it around her narrow hips, swaying in time to the beat and moving her arms to the groove. She was totally lost, and felt much better than five minutes before.
Music seems to have that power doesn't it. The power to calm, the power to bring tears, smiles, grimaces and shouts. The power to bring together and the power to tear appart. Tonight it's power was excitement.
She walked on, passing tree after tree, humming still when *snap* she heard a noice off to her left, or so she surmised. She hesitated but for a moment then continued, walking still.
Now there were two walking in the orchard.
He came up behind her and pressed his palm over her mouth, not that anyone would have heard her cries anyway and drug her to the ground. All in a moment he was inside of her, she resisting as best she could, he over powering with brute strength until the act was done.
He stood, pulled up his pants and ran off.
She smiled, wiped the blood from her lip, got up off of her knees and started humming again. A perfect ending to a not so perfect night.
User Reviews
Submitted by chicagogirl (user info) at 2004-12-14 18:38:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
just cause you are cute.
Submitted by drfeggphd (user info) at 2004-12-09 12:46:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
huh. can't tell if this makes sense or not, but and/or so i like it.
Submitted by SAECULUM.AUREUM (user info) at 2004-12-09 12:27:37 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
I'm tired of reading about rape ... this wasn't very good ... and I happen to like orchards (especially the apple variant)
-2
Submitted by Slypher (user info) at 2004-12-09 02:58:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Insanethemind (user info) at 2004-04-27 03:17:53 (#)
Ranking: -2
It will take quite a post to aid your redemption
Remember this, motherfucker?
Here's my redemption.
http://www.ubersite.com/m/53834
Nice post, by the way.
Submitted by Ainkara (user info) at 2004-12-05 05:45:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
How did I miss this?
And my word...
Submitted by Insanethemind (user info) at 2004-11-22 22:18:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
teephphah- yes
shand,
miss you much how are things
ill be home on the 24th
Submitted by legallady (user info) at 2004-11-22 14:17:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Okay, I re read it. And keep getting the idea
that this is a planned encounter. A fantasy rape
thing. The more I read it with that in mind, it
makes sense to me. Does this tell more about me
or you?
Submitted by Phinch (user info) at 2004-11-22 12:53:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I've been wondering if you've fallen off the face of the internet.
nice read. new girl have an odd fetish?
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2004-11-22 08:04:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You paint quite the picture without sticking to proper formatting.
and it works for you.
i like that.
Submitted by Teephphah (user info) at 2004-11-22 08:03:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Mind boggling. I think I need to think about this quite a bit more. Can you give me a hint though? Is the second sentence (particularly the last half of it) significant to the ending?
Submitted by shandythedog (user info) at 2004-11-22 02:58:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
aha!
what have we hear, a rare jewel - an itm post.
i like it - very moody and evocative.
btw - that fucking seppo cunt bart has cut off my rating power so i can't rank any more, because i am the new uber Bad Boy.
(well, actually, i asked him to cut me off becuase i was sick of the whole ranking business, and he very kindly did so.)
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2004-11-21 23:53:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I don't quite get it.
Submitted by stevie_says (user info) at 2004-11-21 23:47:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
IT WAS ME!
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2004-11-21 23:30:29 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
This post is about true love.
Submitted by NoahsArk (user info) at 2004-11-21 20:59:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by GlitchCowman (user info) at 2004-11-21 20:40:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Davros (user info) at 2004-11-21 20:30:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
What?
-Davros
Submitted by I_Have_a_Kristen_Fetish (user info) at 2004-11-21 19:58:33 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
For old time's sake.
Submitted by legallady (user info) at 2004-11-21 19:34:57 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
You forgot to put rape in the title.
I am not sure what you meant by this.
I usually really like your writing.
But I couldn't give this a +.
Submitted by zakalwe (user info) at 2004-11-21 19:16:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
So she was planning on being raped?
Submitted by sublime (user info) at 2004-11-21 19:14:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 for the most confusing man on ubersite.
Submitted by Tigre (user info) at 2004-11-21 19:09:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
What the ghey?