Fondling Death (444 hits)
Category: GeneralRating: 0.2 on 9 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by SAECULUM.AUREUM (View user info) at 2004-11-30 13:05:44 EST
Death is the end of time,
the end of a series of moments, and
the conclusion of one's experience.
A thirst for speed, for adrenaline? A lie, your mistaken...
But I should have been crushed, bruised, headless.
Not a scratch and not a second thought.
To have come so near to it, and yet felt its awesome mercy,
No ... rather to have unconsciously teased its presence.
Now it has punished me, and it has rewarded me,
To live again and is to live with no more time.
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Submitted by SAECULUM.AUREUM (user info) at 2004-12-17 18:29:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
NOT A SCRATCH
Submitted by Impassive-Digressive (user info) at 2004-11-30 19:30:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I was expecting an image of the grim reaper with his hand inside his robe.... so I guess I was a little disappointed.
It was still worth reading.
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2004-11-30 17:10:16 EST (#)
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Submitted by whataefag (user info) at 2004-11-30 16:03:18 (#)
Ranking: 2
With a little editing, this could go in a literary journal easily. Of course, you'd have to... improve your diction, tone, style, etc., but with some development (and more effort) it could definitely work.
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Submitted by SAECULUM.AUREUM (user info) at 2004-11-30 16:08:33 EST (#)
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well thank you so very much ... friend
Submitted by whataefag (user info) at 2004-11-30 16:03:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You know, I just read this again, and the "teased by its presence" line is really marvelous. With a little editing, this could go in a literary journal easily. Of course, you'd have to be more covert about the literal death theme, improve your diction, tone, style, etc., but with some development (and more effort) it could definitely work.
Submitted by whataefag (user info) at 2004-11-30 14:26:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
excellent!
Submitted by kai070169 (user info) at 2004-11-30 13:24:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
HAIL SATAN 666 YEAH!
Submitted by WhatTheHell (user info) at 2004-11-30 13:22:50 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
To bad YOU weren't in that car you assclown.
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2004-11-30 13:21:31 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
What a fun guy!
Thanks for the laugh!