The space between the raindrops. (524 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: 0.82 on 12 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Thrice Palermo (View user info) at 2004-11-30 21:35:20 EST
The space between the raidrops
is just large enough.
The time it takes a leaf to fall
seems just right.
The curves of a childs ear,
the sound of stone on steel,
the taste of oranges,
the feel of warm mud beneath my feet,
these things all feel true.
But something about me puts it all wrong
and even in the presence of beauty,
and perfection,
and truth,
I feel so...
I feel so...
blank.
User Reviews
Submitted by Lazarus (user info) at 2004-11-30 23:23:31 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
BLAM! AND THEN SOME SAND NIGGER FLIES A PLANE INTO YOUR HOUSE! FUCK YOU! YOUR INTROSPECTION IS IRRELEVANT! YOU DIE!
Submitted by Chronicles_of_College_Guy (user info) at 2004-11-30 23:20:03 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Ehh, I don't know. What's really said here, man? I mean, really, what have you said? Do you know?
Also, the title is too Dave Matthews.
Submitted by williamson (user info) at 2004-11-30 22:42:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by DonkeyOnTheEdge (user info) at 2004-11-30 21:40:48 (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 for having the balls to post poetry.
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Here here! (or hear hear... whatever)
Submitted by darko (user info) at 2004-11-30 22:38:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
becausde poetry things to be the "in" thing to do today http://www.ubersite.com/m/52990
Submitted by doesntmatter (user info) at 2004-11-30 22:29:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i liked it, but the ending is a bit disapointing...
Submitted by Rainer (user info) at 2004-11-30 22:07:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
haikus are so gay
'cause they put limitations
on words that are used
haikus are real dumb
they are just shitty poems
invented by japs
Submitted by G-prime (user info) at 2004-11-30 21:50:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
How about a haiku?
Sleep always feels best
When it is not permitted,
Secretly stolen.
-Will Roney
Submitted by thricepalermo (user info) at 2004-11-30 21:45:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I am always prepared for criticism.
What I love about this site is the chance to
think of something
compose it
post it
and have some total stranger
read me.
all within 5 minutes
It has to be one of the best things that the net has made possible.
Submitted by DonkeyOnTheEdge (user info) at 2004-11-30 21:40:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 for having the balls to post poetry.
Submitted by marencian (user info) at 2004-11-30 21:39:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Flows well, but free-verse pseudo-depressed poetry is too common in modern poetry to get a +1 or +2 I think.
Submitted by Impassive-Digressive (user info) at 2004-11-30 21:38:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Not bad.
Submitted by precision (user info) at 2004-11-30 21:36:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
very nice