Drawing in the Dark (One of Three) (1016 hits)
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Rating: 2 on 21 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Jack11058 (View user info) at 2004-12-11 23:37:20 EST
They don't know I can draw in the dark. In two more nights I'll be done with all of this.
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I've been here since I was seven. That was the third year in a row Atlanta was buried in three feet of snow on Christmas day. That was the third year in a row mommy put one of my White Christmas drawings on my family's refrigerator door. The men in masks came to the door on Christmas Eve.
"We need you, Kara," they'd said behind their masks. Even at seven I could see the fear in their eyes. They were afraid of me. My mommy was afraid, too. She was afraid of the masked men and the guns they carried.
My daddy, drunk as usual, was three whiskeys past fear. They shot him and he fell, dropping the baseball bat. They shot mommy too, even though she was just standing there shaking. They took me away in their big black van and I never saw my house again.
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They took me far. I know because we were in the van long past sunrise on Christmas; through the blindfold and tears I could see the light grow. I cried because I missed mommy and even daddy. This was supposed to be a happy day of presents, where mommy would give lots of hugs and daddy would wait until late to start drinking.
When they took the blindfold off I saw I was in a white room. I was sitting in a chair and I was all by myself.
A voice came into the room, scaring me. I started crying again.
"You can stop crying now, Kara," the voice said. It sounded like a grandpapa's voice, soft and kind. "You will not be harmed in any way. I'm sure you have many questions, some of which may be answered in time."
I sniffled, trying to stop the tears. I was sleepy and confused.
"Kara, it should be enough for you to know that you are here because your country needs you."
"Needs me for what?" I asked between sobs.
Grandpapa replied softly, "We need you to draw."
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Some of my questions were indeed answered in time. Most of the things I see or am made to do raise more questions than I could ever get answers for. I'm scared more often than not. I'm scared of myself.
I've been here four years, I think, because I get Christmas presents once a year. I've gotten four presents, so I guess that means four years. A coloring book, a necklace, a hairbrush and, last month, a small hand mirror. That mirror will set me free.
User Reviews
Submitted by joedaddy (user info) at 2005-07-23 04:20:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn, I looked and I couldn't find any more installments on this series.
I know you're not like me.....but I did a couple of stories; few hits. few reviews,...
said: Fuck Them, to myself, and didn't finish them.
I'm glad you didn't stop writing.
joe
Submitted by joedaddy (user info) at 2005-07-23 03:21:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by wookie (user info) at 2005-03-07 17:19:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2004-12-22 11:05:32 (#)
Ranking: 2
good stuff, interesting beginning.
Submitted by CoffeeAndSmokes (user info) at 2005-03-07 17:08:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow.
Submitted by engine13 (user info) at 2005-01-03 17:24:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Sort of creepy.
Right, now I'm off to read the rest of the series.
Submitted by omnifica (user info) at 2005-01-01 23:18:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
hot
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2004-12-22 11:05:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
good stuff, interesting beginning.
Submitted by Siren (user info) at 2004-12-15 05:58:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Blitzen (user info) at 2004-12-13 22:28:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by AwesomeJohnson (user info) at 2004-12-13 22:19:05 (#)
Ranking: 2
everytime I've seen this title in the MRR, I see "Darkwing Duck"... anyone else getting that?
HAHAHA that so happened to me.. also this was pretty cool, gonna read the next two parts for sure (and i'm not one to actually follow these series that people put out)
Submitted by AwesomeJohnson (user info) at 2004-12-13 22:19:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
everytime I've seen this title in the MRR, I see "Darkwing Duck"... anyone else getting that?
Submitted by Feijuada (user info) at 2004-12-13 22:00:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-12-13 13:53:03 (#)
Ranking: 2
Ohh I should wait for part 3 to be posted and read the next two at once. But, part 2 is sitting there on the front page...calling me....taunting me....
AAARRRGGG!
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-12-13 13:53:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ohh I should wait for part 3 to be posted and read the next two at once. But, part 2 is sitting there on the front page...calling me....taunting me....
AAARRRGGG!
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2004-12-12 07:32:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by jack11058 (user info) at 2004-12-12 01:15:44 (#)
Ranking: 0
it's done. just wanted to post three shorter parts instead of one long one. expect the next two parts over the next couple days. thanks for reading.
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!
I'm doing the exact same thing right now.
This is awesome. I can't wait for the rest of it.
Submitted by creep_firebombing (user info) at 2004-12-12 07:20:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Davros (user info) at 2004-12-12 04:38:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
More please
-Dave
Submitted by jack11058 (user info) at 2004-12-12 01:15:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
it's done. just wanted to post three shorter parts instead of one long one. expect the next two parts over the next couple days. thanks for reading.
Submitted by MrPresident (user info) at 2004-12-12 01:15:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
No Comment
Submitted by darko (user info) at 2004-12-12 00:21:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2004-12-11 23:58:01 (#)
Ranking: 2
OK. Do not sleep until this is done.
I do not care if you begin to have halucinations from lack of sleep.
Finsih this.
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2004-12-11 23:58:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
OK. Do not sleep until this is done.
I do not care if you begin to have halucinations from lack of sleep.
Finsih this.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2004-12-11 23:52:29 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Cool. Enigmatic, but still deeply interesting.
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2004-12-11 23:48:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
it was ok, then i reread the first line and liked it a shitload,