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Submitted by JudasCloud (View user info) at 2004-12-16 14:45:12 EST
Preface
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Do you remember whats going on?
Yes.
Then show me.
....
What is this?
This is when it all changed.
What changed?
The colors.....
I was standing here and...it all turned so grey.
Explain it to me, Jim.
There used to be blue and white.
And sometimes the light would shine across her face. I loved her so much.
I remember thinking, even during the war, that i was in heaven.
I dream about her now.
Except...she has no eyes. And she's covered in blood. It takes me awhile to remember what it's from.
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History
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For as long as anyone could remember, a soft, gray ash had covered the entire land. There were no forests or trees, only the burnt ashes of the dying planet. In the early years of civilization, a book had come to the people. It was called the Book of Alysium. It promised all who had faith and compassion that they would find peace. But the last chapter of the book was missing, and therfore labled "The Forgotten Truth". Those that believed the teachings of the Book of Alysium formed the peaceful Sanctus Nation and dedicated their lives to its teachings. And those that did not, formed the Pravine Nation. And soon, war started.
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Garbage?
User Reviews
Submitted by Blizzforums (user info) at 2005-03-14 20:35:19 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Wow. What a pathetic, absolutely creepy psychopath you are. You didn't write this. You stole it from an AMATEUR, PLAYER-MADE VIDEO GAME. You aren't even the real creator, but you still named yourself after him. Why on earth would you copy-paste text from a Starcraft campaign and act like it was yours? Is the material really THAT GOOD as just text? You have got to be the most pathetic, untalented pervert I have ever seen on the internet. (And judging by your other posts you're also apparently a pedophile??)
Yuck.
-person who knows the real JudasCloud, and respects his video game work enough to be annoyed and frustrated with the drivel this guy made of it.
THIS FIRST "EPISODE" DOESNT EVEN MILDLY WORK AS JUST TEXT. GEEZ YOU'RE AN IDIOT.
Submitted by Degreeless_Capibara (user info) at 2004-12-17 20:33:11 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Eric D. Rice of Virginia is a convicted child molester.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2004-12-17 04:23:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
welcome to Uber - not bad content (if short) but bad title.
DO note the comments
good luck with your next post..
Submitted by FuckTheArmy (user info) at 2004-12-16 23:26:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Sorry, it doesn't cut it. Not enough content.
I only treat people the way they treat me, so I won't insult you.
Submitted by Girlwithaclue (user info) at 2004-12-16 17:14:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Welcome, don't take things to personally is the best advice. :)
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2004-12-16 17:08:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Welcome to UBER.
Submitted by CaptainAmik (user info) at 2004-12-16 16:43:28 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I just can't follow crazy rambles, I also rate on content 90% of the time...this was one of those times.
Submitted by xenon (user info) at 2004-12-16 15:31:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Hey, Academy..
Here's a tip. Spamming other users' posts that rate you negatively with -2s will not help you get ahead here.
Take heed.
Submitted by Hadooken (user info) at 2004-12-16 15:15:52 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:47:17 (#)
Ranking: 2
I am not going to give you a -2
because you wrote "First Post"
as I think this is random writing
but good. Ya follow me?
I AM!
Submitted by xenon (user info) at 2004-12-16 15:15:06 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by the_lone_stranger (user info) at 2004-12-16 15:07:00 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
where's the beef?
Submitted by wazzawazzayo (user info) at 2004-12-16 15:06:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You have my approval (not that it means anything as I don't post).
Welcome.
Now go fuck your own shit. (Obligatory fist post insult).
Submitted by Zandy1123 (user info) at 2004-12-16 15:02:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
hmmm...contemplative...ambiguous...well-written...
me likey.
keep it up
Submitted by Lyric (user info) at 2004-12-16 15:02:07 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Announcing it's your first post = -2.
Decent writing, though. Let's see what you come up with for future stuff.
Submitted by Sassmasterr (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:59:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
i....?
Submitted by Academy (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:58:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I'll remember to add more next time. Thanks.
Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:55:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I really like this.
You should do well here.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:53:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
There's not enough here to say Yay or Nay.
Welcome to Uber though.
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:52:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Put more into each post. this little teaser is not enough to judge talent, and barely enough for interest.
Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:51:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by TheSpook (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:48:09 (#)
Ranking: 1
I think you meant: I was standing here and...it all turned so ghey.
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HA! Welcome to Uber.
Submitted by Academy (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:50:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Bump.
Submitted by zakalwe (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:49:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
For the post. Intriguing.
Submitted by zakalwe (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:49:06 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
For the title.
Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:48:51 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Welcome to Uber
Submitted by TheSpook (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:48:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I think you meant: I was standing here and...it all turned so ghey.
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2004-12-16 14:47:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I am not going to give you a -2
because you wrote "First Post"
as I think this is random writing
but good. Ya follow me?