Hell Sent - I (881 hits)
Category: Quotes & StoriesRating: 1.71 on 21 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by harmlessness (View user info) at 2004-12-16 19:25:01 EST
"Straight from the burning flames of hell,
A place where all assassins dwell,
Put back on the earth to destroy y'all worshippers of peace,
Body bags and caskets; may all good cease."
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Jeremiah walked unhurriedly through the brisk winter wind. At six foot six, but only 180 lbs, a bystander would think the wind could carry him away. Nevertheless, he treaded on towards his job, ready for another day of droning monotony.
Late as he was, he wasn't worried about being reprimanded by his superiors. He stopped briefly as a car passed him- another corporate yuppie once again late because his kid was acting up, bad traffic, or whatever. Jeremiah didn't really care.
As he neared the front door of the office building, an emaciated man approached Jeremiah with his hands outstretched, begging for money. For food. For anything. Dirty, wrinkled skin literally hanged from his aged face, and the gnarled, twisted fingers made him look like a zombie.
Jeremiah altered his path so he wouldn't have to let the man down, but again altered it to greet the beggar. He stopped and set his briefcase down, reaching into his back pocket to pull his wallet out. The beggar's eyes widened as a surfeit of bills became exposed. Jeremiah handed the man a fifty and smiled when the beggar thanked him.
With his daily charity out of the way, Jeremiah walked up to the large glass doors and inserted his card into the slot. As it chirped and flashed "ACCESS," the doors unlocked, and he pulled his card from the slot and slid it safely back into the sleeve issued to him on a lanyard with the company name stitched in vivid white thread. He pulled the brushed aluminum handle and the door opened.
The day went by uneventfully. After three hours, at noon, Jeremiah headed to the company kitchen and prepared a sandwich for himself.
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The day was over at 5 o'clock as always, but something felt strange to Jeremiah. He packed his papers up and ambled down the stairs and out the front door. He walked towards where he'd parked his car, a pristine 1972 Cutlass Supreme. As he neared it, the interior seemed to have been completely changed. It was now a dark color, as opposed to the crème color of the leather he'd covered the guts with.
The windows had lost their glossiness-- probably because they had melted. He stared in awe as he attempted to surmise what had happened. None of the cars surrounding his showed even the smallest signs of damage.
The interior had kept its shape but had cracked and turned into a flaky covering, but the padding was unaffected. The windows had melted, now drooping lazily down onto the dash, doors, and back seat.
Instinctively, Jeremiah checked his pocket for the set of keys he always kept, where the only existing key to the Olds resided. He then grasped the door handle carefully, expecting it to be warm at the very least. It was actually colder than the air surrounding him, and though there had been no frost or snow yet, it was covered in icy crystals. He pulled his flip phone from the carrying clip on his belt and flipped it open, then held the number "1" until the screen showed that the number was being dialed.
His fiancée answered with an unusually calm "Hello?"
Jeremiah told her of the strange phenomenon, and she responded with, again, an unusually calm "That's terrible, babe."
Then the scream came. It sounded as though it was emanating from the speakers of every car in the parking lot. A raspy voice answered after a series of loud thuds that sounded when the phone was dropped.
"Heeeeelllllllll Seeeeennnnntttttt."
[To Be Continued]
User Reviews
Submitted by AnotherStupidUsername (user info) at 2005-01-18 00:59:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by StonedSilly (user info) at 2004-12-16 19:32:36 (#)
Ranking: 0
Lyrics used in this series are Bone Thugs 'N' Harmony.
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Decent writing, but I LOVE BTNH so plus 2.
Submitted by screamfeeder (user info) at 2004-12-22 18:23:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by hollygolitely (user info) at 2004-12-22 18:20:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Love it.........
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2004-12-21 18:54:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
hmm
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2004-12-20 20:24:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
no problem buddy.
Submitted by StonedSilly (user info) at 2004-12-20 20:22:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks, GLALL.
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2004-12-20 20:21:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Kazzerax counter +2. I do what I can.
Submitted by Kazzerax (user info) at 2004-12-20 20:07:22 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
keep it going, but payback minus 2
goes to show, DON'T MINUS TWO ME BIZNATCH, I'LL GET YOU BACK!
Submitted by The_Great_Tom (user info) at 2004-12-19 18:47:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
The_Great_Tom approves.
Submitted by SilvrWolf (user info) at 2004-12-17 17:18:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
more...
Submitted by xenon (user info) at 2004-12-17 10:27:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
likin' it so far
Submitted by the_mysterious_stranger (user info) at 2004-12-17 10:19:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2004-12-17 07:04:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Good stuff!
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2004-12-17 00:41:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ouch on the grammatical errors, but otherwise intriguing.
Submitted by SundanceKid (user info) at 2004-12-16 22:01:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2004-12-16 22:01:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Degreeless_Capibara (user info) at 2004-12-16 21:50:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Reminded me of Silent Hill.
Submitted by StonedSilly (user info) at 2004-12-16 20:24:57 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
What makes you say that, Erik?
Submitted by spedmonkey (user info) at 2004-12-16 20:13:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Gee, somehow I assume this isn't autobiographical...
Submitted by lojope (user info) at 2004-12-16 19:55:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I like this. Please keep going.
Submitted by StonedSilly (user info) at 2004-12-16 19:32:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Lyrics used in this series are Bone Thugs 'N' Harmony.