Darkness (777 hits)
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Submitted by Avals (View user info) at 2005-01-18 09:33:09 EST
"Darkness..."
The deep, raspy voice drifted across the now-dark confines of Docking Bay 1.
"Are you afraid?"
Light-beams made their way back and forth across the bay as the guards cautiously swept every inch of ground; moving ever so slowly, as if making no sudden moves would cause their quarry to do the same.
"Cruuuuunch!"
The sickening sound of disintegrating bone filled the air for a brief second, while one of the light-beams traced feverishly across the bay wall, before suddenly disappearing completely.
In the blink of an eye the guards had their weapons poised and ready, attached flashlights all illuminating the spot where the sound came from; but it was too late - all that was there to see was their comrade stiffly slumping forward to the ground, head placed in the awkward angle only a broken neck can allow.
"I'm not."
The voice seemed to have no discernible source for the guards to follow. Had they been given the choice, they probably would have preferred the ghostly silence.
"I belong in the dark."
The voice, while unmistakably human, had an unsettling quality to it which made the guards feel ill at ease. It spoke calmly, not for a second betraying any hint of human emotion.
"Where evil lives."
The voice suddenly went silent, and the bay became unbearably quiet; all that could be heard were the guards' light footsteps on the metal floor.
"Tap Tap Tap!"
The guard could hear the unmistakable sound of footsteps quickly approaching from behind, but before he could turn around the attacker was upon him, and the guard's own weapon was suddenly and inexplicably pointing at his own head, even though he was certain his hand was still gripping it firmly.
The sudden gunshot went off with a loud bang, showering bloody pieces of flesh around the unfortunate target. A face disappeared back into the shadows, its lips drawn into a slight smirk, before the guards had time to react. Two eyes momentarily glistened with an eerie reddish-tint before the face disappeared completely into darkness.
A sudden mechanical whirr interrupted the silence, and thin streams of light appeared from beneath the opening bay door. The door slid upwards, revealing the planet's fiery-red sky. The dark silhouette of a man was framed by the appearing sunrise.
"We've got your now, fucker!"
The man calmly glanced backwards towards the landing platform stretching out beyond the opened bay door.
He was of medium height, but his wide and muscled frame hinted at the deadly potential contained within.
He returned his gaze to the five guards pointing their automatics at him. Going back to a cell was not an option.
Quickly turning around, he was out the door before the guards could even react. With nowhere else to go, he sprinted at full-speed towards the edge of the platform, bullets from the weapons of the pursuing guards whistling around him; exploding into the ground around his feet; some even grazing his skin.
He covered the 400-foot platform rapidly, but now he had run out of places to run. Standing on the edge, he glanced down at the ground below. It was, perhaps, unfortunate that standard interplanetary landing procedures required the platform to be so high above the ground.
"Come on! Just give me a reason to kill you, you fucking con!"
He turned around to face his pursuers - slowly, so as to not give them an excuse to riddle him with bullets - and began to raise his hands.
His motion, however, stopped mid-way.
He stood there for a second, arms outstretched to the sides, his gaze fixed on the eyes of one of the guards in front of him. His inhuman eyes glistened again, their reddish tint amplified by the red of the planet around them.
Suddenly, his legs pushed off and he plunged - head-first - from the platform.
User Reviews
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-12-10 19:22:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-05-13 14:35:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/m/66233#1323779
thanks man. this was cool!
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-02-04 16:32:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
My brother, unlike myself, has a life; so I doubt you'll be able to get him to 'holla'. (What the fuck is 'holla' anyway?! Did I make a wrong turn into Harlem somewhere?)
My sister's pathetic though; you could try her.
Submitted by mystiamoon (user info) at 2005-02-04 16:30:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
you just sealed your fate with that one.
tell your brother to holla!
yummmm
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-02-04 16:28:01 EST (#)
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Only if you'll suck my dick while I'm doing it.
Anyway, I've burned your favorite shirt. Put that in your pipe and smoke it!
Submitted by mystiamoon (user info) at 2005-02-04 16:25:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Shut UP!
Get back in the laundry room and finish ironing my clothes.
And wear that pink lacy number in my closet while you do it!
PWNED!
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-02-04 16:22:42 EST (#)
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Submitted by mystiamoon (user info) at 2005-02-03 17:56:54 (#)
Ranking: 2
hmmmmm..
i may have to kill some people here
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YOU'LL NEVER CATCH ME ALIVE!
I mean... What are you doing? Put ... put the knife down. Please... OH GOD NOT THERE! GAAAAAH!
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-02-04 05:55:51 EST (#)
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Submitted by indoninja (user info) at 2005-02-03 09:58:53 (#)
Ranking: -2
Sorry pitch black blew(-1), and this post wasn't a tribute to the darkness(-1).
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And a big how-do-you-do to you too, Mr. I Suck At Life.
Nice rating system you got there. That probably works well for you, being barely literate and all that.
Submitted by mystiamoon (user info) at 2005-02-03 17:56:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
hmmmmm..
i may have to kill some people here
Submitted by indoninja (user info) at 2005-02-03 09:58:53 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Sorry pitch black blew(-1), and this post wasn't a tribute to the darkness(-1).
Submitted by MandaPanda (user info) at 2005-02-03 09:45:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ah, nevermind. I need sleep.
Submitted by MandaPanda (user info) at 2005-02-03 09:37:37 EST (#)
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Aw, can I be harassed, too?
AIM: Manders1709.
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-02-03 09:17:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Ok, let's play a little game I like to call:
LEAVE YOUR IM CONTACT DETAILS ON THIS POST SO I CAN HARASS ANY UBERITE I WANT TO, WHENEVER I WANT TO.
And don't call me a bitch. NEVER call me a bitch...
Submitted by Soley_Trinity (user info) at 2005-02-03 06:16:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-02-01 14:57:42 (#)
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Goddamn it!
Jump, motherfucker, JUMP!
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How high, bitch?
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-01-23 14:41:44 EST (#)
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What in the fuck is 'zombie loans. joe'?!
Submitted by wanderingsharps (user info) at 2005-01-22 14:55:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
yah know- your boo-hoo comment made me want to check out your writing.
ain't bad...
check out zombie loans. joe
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-01-21 09:12:24 EST (#)
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I'm bored, so here's a comment to keep me entertained.
Tee-Hee.
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-01-20 02:32:35 EST (#)
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Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-01-19 16:04:00 (#)
Ranking: 2
Woo hoo! I'm a winner!
Hey, wait...you wouldn't happen to be a totally hot chick, would you? Because that would be super.
You should keep writing some Riddick stuff. It's interesting to see someone launch a story using a previously established character, just to see where it could go.
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No, not a totally hot chick. I could be a marginally hot chick though; if you ignore the schlong...
I think a lot of people have already done that, and it always ends up as some kind of fanfic. Do you really want to read about Riddick shoving his prison-man-meat in Johns's butt?
Submitted by Shizae (user info) at 2005-01-19 18:49:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-01-19 16:04:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-01-19 07:44:48 (#)
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thecaes - Ding Ding Ding, we have a winner!
The grand prize are naked pictures of me. You've got mail... <wink><wink>
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Woo hoo! I'm a winner!
Hey, wait...you wouldn't happen to be a totally hot chick, would you? Because that would be super.
You should keep writing some Riddick stuff. It's interesting to see someone launch a story using a previously established character, just to see where it could go.
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-01-19 07:44:48 EST (#)
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thecaes - Ding Ding Ding, we have a winner!
The grand prize are naked pictures of me. You've got mail... <wink><wink>
Incidentally, Circe's answer doesn't count because she forced it out of me in MSN. I guess she really wanted these pics...
Also, in Riddick's defense, the game was pretty fucking awesome.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-01-18 23:48:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Pitch Black. I know Circe already said it, but I figured it out before you even asked the question. At first I thought it was a monster, but when you referred to the character as a con, I thought, "hmmm, who goes to jail, sees in the dark, kills people, stars in an awesome movie and follows it up with a horrible, horrible sequel?"
Riddick, that's who.
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-01-18 11:59:41 EST (#)
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Dervel - You jest, you jest.
I WILL KILL YOU AND FEED ON YOUR IMMORTAL SOUL!
No, no, I'm just kidding. Maybe...
Circe - Cheating doesn't count.
But I'll cut you some slack: If no one else gives the correct answer within 3 days, you get the prize.
(The prize, incidentally, are naked pictures of me.) *FLEE*
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2005-01-18 11:41:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
"Pitch Black."
I'm a fucking genius.
Submitted by Dervel (user info) at 2005-01-18 11:24:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Final guess:
Watership Down.
Wasn't intended as a put down.
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-01-18 10:57:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
WhatTheHell, Dervel, Circe: No, no, and ... no.
Sheesh... I actually thought it would be pretty easy. Guess it didn't come out quite like I wanted after all. Oh well...
Dervel: Wow! It's a +2 and a put-down all in the same comment! It's like the best of both worlds! WOO!
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2005-01-18 10:11:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
The Fugitive?
Also.. IM me sometime, please. circe 7797 on AIM, or fickle_muse.at.hotmail.com for MSN.
IS it The Fugitive?
Submitted by Dervel (user info) at 2005-01-18 09:53:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-01-18 09:35:06 (#)
Ranking: 0
Not sure if this turned out the way I wanted it to.
Bonus points to the first person who can tell me who I so shamelessly ripped off here.
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Hmmm, it's a dodgy sci-fi story that doesn't work that great so I guess you ripped off Paul Hibbert?
Submitted by WhatTheHell (user info) at 2005-01-18 09:42:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
The flintstones ??
Submitted by Avals (user info) at 2005-01-18 09:35:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Not sure if this turned out the way I wanted it to.
Bonus points to the first person who can tell me who I so shamelessly ripped off here.