Mr. Tremble (797 hits)
Category: NoneLabels: Untruth
Rating: 1.55 on 30 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Snark << snarkk.at.gmail.com (View user info) at 2005-02-06 05:13:35 EST
Mr. Tremble
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There is definitely something under your bed.
I saw it once.
It smiled when I peeked and giggled when I screamed.
It was toothy and pale and dripping mad hunger.
It's in your closet too.
Don't look straight in. Tilt your head, it's best viewed from the corner of your eye.
It lives in the peripheral.
It's comfortable there because it's dark and cold and that's how wicked things like it.
Tell yourself it's not real. That's the best defense.
Hide under your blankets. It hates it when you do that. It can't see your wide eyes or the pulsing vein in your neck then, but be careful.
Make sure your feet are covered and don't make a sound.
You're safe that way but it will try things.
You know what I mean.
The creaking floor board... the soft tread of a foot on the carpet... the whisper of sound on the other side of the thin shield of fabric held aloft by your shaking hands...
Oh yeah, it has tricks all right.
Don't forget to pray, just don't do it too loud.
Never doubt that it's there, waiting.
It wants you in a bad way for dark reasons. Every kid knows it. It wants to caress, and play, and eat the thing inside you that keeps you warm at night.
That thing is precious.
NEVER ask it if it's there, just know that it is.
NEVER ask it what it wants, just know it wants you.
Keep it hungry and don't go to sleep. It likes you best when you're blissful.
It can touch you coldest in your dreams.
It's ok to shiver, fear feeds it a little.
Fear keeps it from getting into bed with you.
Stay warm.
Stay awake.
And whatever you do...
Don't look under the bed.
User Reviews
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2005-09-10 05:53:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by mo (user info) at 2005-02-23 18:11:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Hey Snark, haven't read your stuff for awhile. I see your still trying to scare everyone. I used to check under my bed before I went to sleep as a child. I would stuff all the blankets under my body and kept my feet curled up so what was under my bed couldn't grab me and drag me off. I guess it's a typical childs fantasy. I was also afraid of the dark and had to have a light on. I also remember dreams where something was tugging on my blankets, and I would be having a tug of war with whatever it was. Anyways good work. Your Buddy Mo.
Submitted by Jo_of_the_golden_P (user info) at 2005-02-11 21:29:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
how lovely...
I <3 Snark
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-02-08 17:52:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Spivey, motherfucker.....
Please?
Submitted by Benny (user info) at 2005-02-08 02:41:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This reminded me of all the strange times when you find yourself in a gloomy location. That would have been pretty trippy coming across an abandoned cabin in the woods the day after watching Blair Witch. When I saw that movie at the cinema I was the only person in the room. That would have been strange anyway, I mean how many times have you been the only person in the whole cinema, but watching a movie about people getting fucked over by ghosts/witches whilst stranded in some gloomy woods took the cake. I think it probably made the movie seem better than it actually was.
P.S When is the next instalment of Necrosiac planned (I think I'm beginning to get the shakes its been so long).
Submitted by Xena (user info) at 2005-02-07 17:21:57 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
All of a sudden my plans to do laundry tonight have changed. That quiet, dark little room at the end of the hall is seeming a less than appealing!
If I showed the pilon this, he'd never sleep in his own room again! I think I just might!
Submitted by Vomit (user info) at 2005-02-07 11:04:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Just the name you gave it gives me the creeps.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-02-07 10:58:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
That to me is the scariest/worst feeling in the world- when I'm just at night or alone someplace shadowy, and the hairs on the back of my neck suddenly stand up, and I'm afraid to look behind me because I know that if I do, Something will get me, but I don't want to scamper madly away because what if running just attracts the Something's attention, but Something is there, and I usually run like a frightened bunny rabbit only not jumping quite so much, so I suppose that its more like a frightened gazelle, but they jump too so I don't know and I'm going to go sit in a brightly lit corner and curl up in the fetal position and rock gently for a while.
Errr, what?
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2005-02-07 10:01:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm home.
Alone.
Sick.
I have to go to the basement.
Maybe later....
Asshole!
*shiver*
Submitted by wookie (user info) at 2005-02-07 08:32:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-02-06 19:08:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Exactly!
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-02-06 18:07:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
like when you are coming up the stairs from the basement and you feel the
overwhelming urge to RUN. like something is behind you?
Submitted by Wazza (user info) at 2005-02-06 16:00:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Hair stands on the back of my kneck.ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-02-06 15:47:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I know that one too.
I used to work in foresty. Once in awhile in a particularly dreary part of the forest I would run into an old cabin.
Something about the rotting logs and dark hollow windows was sad and frightening at the same time.
The day after I saw The Blaire Witch Project I ran into another.
Funny how childhood superstitions can rise from the grave and creep up the back of your neck.
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2005-02-06 14:54:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Yeah, I know that one...
How about when you're walking down a dark road and there's something behind you, something awful, but it can't actually get any closer to you until you try to spot it. If you look, it'll be on you. If you don't look, the tension gradually becomes unbearable.
"You must never run from anything immortal. It attracts their attention."
Submitted by FunnyAsCancer (user info) at 2005-02-06 14:37:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
For some reason, this reminded me of that old series of children's books, the "Mr. Men" titles.
Uh...these guys: http://store1.yimg.com/I/yhst-81142167970971_1828_40814869
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-02-06 14:30:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Coyote,
I so know that feeling. I used to live in a place called Pinantan lake. The only road in was narrow and twisting and unlit.
It was one of those roads that's always foggy at night.
It's a wonder I never sprained my neck.
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2005-02-06 14:26:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
When you're done with my demon, can I have it back? Driving down the forest road at night just hasn't been the same since I haven't had to turn around to make sure there's nothing in the back seat every forty-five seconds.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-02-06 14:07:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Hahaha
I handed out a lot of -2's last night. Seems like the shit post tide is in these days.
I was actually expecting much more retribution than this.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-02-06 12:39:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Have another one.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-02-06 12:05:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
...oh gawd. Thanks a lot, asshole. I'm not going to sleep for the next 2.7 years now.
Submitted by Fleury75 (user info) at 2005-02-06 11:39:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
blissful?
"Poetry is a jackass sport" -Super Dave Robertson
Submitted by maiorano84 (user info) at 2005-02-06 11:19:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Whitebread - Who the fuck are you, and why aren't you named after Pumpernickel?
Submitted by creep_firebombing (user info) at 2005-02-06 10:22:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by ak_whitebread (user info) at 2005-02-06 07:02:45 (#)
Ranking: -2
This is written like a 5th grader. what in the fuck is this shit?? You should write childrens books. It's no wonder you said I should fuck sheep after what I wrote... with your intelligence. Get some new material... practice writing perhaps... or just don't submit at all
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This was damn good, but this review REEKS of "Hey! You -2'd my post! But my Mommy says I'm special!!1one!!".
I'm going to print this up and read it to my children at night just before I turn off their little Winnie The Pooh nightlight.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2005-02-06 07:17:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by ak_whitebread (user info) at 2005-02-06 07:02:45 (#)
Ranking: -2
This is written like a 5th grader. what in the fuck is this shit?? You should write childrens books. It's no wonder you said I should fuck sheep after what I wrote... with your intelligence. Get some new material... practice writing perhaps... or just don't submit at all
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This is.... the.... textbook definition.... of a.... moron................... look, dots.......... am i a writer yet?.......
This rocked, Corey. It made me cold.
Submitted by ak_whitebread (user info) at 2005-02-06 07:02:45 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
This is written like a 5th grader. what in the fuck is this shit?? You should write childrens books. It's no wonder you said I should fuck sheep after what I wrote... with your intelligence. Get some new material... practice writing perhaps... or just don't submit at all
Submitted by girlintheworld (user info) at 2005-02-06 06:20:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This made me all... scaredededed.
What?
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-02-06 06:03:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
AHAHAHA!
I just checked your user info.
First time I've ever got a retaliatory +1.
A new Uber milestone has been reached.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-02-06 06:00:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Bah.
This isn't poetry.
Submitted by retrograde (user info) at 2005-02-06 05:59:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
poetry is pants