In The Mist We Wait (1093 hits)
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Submitted by Manicmother (View user info) at 2005-02-11 10:51:33 EST
I do not write posts normally. Most of you really wouldn't give a damn about anything I have to say. I write this now beacuse it's been on my mind and seems a perfect entry to Teephphah's contest.
http/www.ubersite.com/m/59263
We stand here in the mists of time, waiting. We wait for our end, the resolution of our short lives. There are so many of us now, small, frightened, and alone excepting the others. Some of us are tiny, just barely having been born before the mist took them. Others, like me, were just starting to find out about the world before it crushed us. It is sad, I am sad, but I can go Home today.
My name is Stefanie. I have been here in the mist since Sept. 28, 2004. That is the date that I died by my father's hand. I have watched the anguish of my mother from afar. I've seen her damning herself for my death, she should have been there, should have been with me, protecting me. But momma you were. You left me somewhere where you thought I'd be safe. You took care of me alone while daddy had other babies he didn't want. Don't cry momma, today I get to go Home.
My daddy didn't want me. He pushed momma to have an abortion when I was concieved. He had too many children he was paying for already. Mamma didn't, she felt me move and knew that even without daddy I was Love and to be loved. Momma cared for me as best she could. She tried very hard to do it alone. But the ends just didn't meet and she had to ask Daddy for help. This is why she cries at night now, alone our empty home. She thinks that if she haden't pushed Daddy I could still be with her now. Don't cry momma, today I get to go home.
Momma dropped me off like she always did to go to work. I liked it there. Ms. Rice always took care of me and kissed my boo-boos when mommy wasn't there. She gave me juice and played games and I always felt safe with her. Mommy wasn't going to work that day though, she was going to court to get daddy to help take care of me. Ms. Rice took me in and I got to see her niece's baby. He was tiny but cute. I am glad he's not with me now. It's quiet here and he was so full of life. I went in back to watch TV. I loved watching TV I learned so much from Sesame Street, my ABC's and how to count. I am sad that I can't learn anymore, that I will miss out on so much of the world. But I will not cry beacuse today I get to go Home.
This is when my daddy came. He came to the door of MS. Rice. He pretended he was looking for a daycare center for another baby. She let him in and my world ended. Daddy shot her as she led him through the house, he shot her niece too. Poor baby hit his head when his mother dropped him. He almost ended up here with me. I am glad he isn't, he still has a chance. As Ms. Rice lay in a pool of blood I tried to hide. The noise scared me. I was afraid and no one was left to help me. And as daddy beat the back of my head with his gun, my momma waited in court for him. I don't remember my death. I saw him comming, I felt the pain of the first blow and I woke up here in the mist. Some of the older kids told me what happened. They watch, you know. They watch and wait for when they get to go Home, but they see the death of us all. Some have left the mist since then, far too many have joined us as well. We wait in the shadows for our resolution, some of us won't be leaving at all.
But today I get to go Home.
My daddy was sentanced by a court yesterday. He will spend the rest of his life in jail because of me. I will spend the rest of Time with the cosmos because of him. I'm not angry, you can't be angry here because we no longer exist that way. But we can be sad. There are so many of us, the toddler scalded by her jealous stepmom, the baby who took just one breath before his mom ended his life, we comfort them when they come. We tell them not to be afraid in the mist. They are safe here because no one can hurt us anymore. We just wait and watch, and with heavy hearts welcome more into the grey world we exist in. I hope before I go I can say good bye to mommy. She is so sad and alone now. I wish I could go to her and tell her not to worry about me. I am safe now. Today I get to go HOME.
User Reviews
Submitted by hot_pocket (user info) at 2007-01-02 21:55:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
every one of mothers posts is on the front page right now
a general plus one here because most of them were ok but im only rating once
Submitted by Unabonger (user info) at 2007-01-02 21:49:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Manicmother has a new fan.
Submitted by phauna (user info) at 2007-01-02 21:02:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 baby killing. Way to Freud out on us all.
Submitted by Phate (user info) at 2005-11-20 04:00:15 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Obscured_by_Clouds (user info) at 2005-08-25 23:00:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Twenty of the suckiest minutes of my life.
-- Homer Simpson
Burns, Baby Burns
Submitted by Affinity (user info) at 2005-04-19 19:17:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 to piss off EscapeArtist
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2005-04-19 18:08:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
THis is good you should write and post more.
Submitted by podium (user info) at 2005-03-22 18:56:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by MANICMOTHER (user info) at 2005-02-13 11:31:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I wish this was creative. Stefanie Belue is dead beacuse her father "couldn't afford another deduction from his paycheck". Jasmine Phillips is dead because her psudo-stepmom wsa resentful of having to take care of her and dumped the 22 month old in a bath of screaming hot water. The baby was found, born healthy but dead several hours after he was born stuffed under a cabinet in his mother's home. There has been a rash of child killings here in Detroit like nothing I've ever seen.
I wish to god I had just made this up.
Submitted by TheJedi (user info) at 2005-02-13 11:01:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Very Dark... very creative....
Submitted by Fleury75 (user info) at 2005-02-13 10:47:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
very nice little diddy. reminded me of 'the lovely bones' but well written nonetheless!
Submitted by Jay_Bassman (user info) at 2005-02-13 10:43:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This was awesome. I wish I could actually write like that.
Submitted by Vomit (user info) at 2005-02-13 10:23:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This is REALLY good. Keep writing.
Submitted by mrwolf (user info) at 2005-02-12 11:39:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow... I've seen you rate my stuff before, but never seen anything by you. This was good.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2005-02-12 11:11:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I cried. I actually cried, and damn, if you knew me, you'd know I don't cry. So sad, and happy, and strong, and... damn, woman. Well done.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2005-02-11 17:05:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
freeky!
Submitted by jumpinjellyfish (user info) at 2005-02-11 15:45:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
WOW...spooky
Submitted by Holz (user info) at 2005-02-11 15:35:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by kai070169 (user info) at 2005-02-11 14:25:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You now have my permission to post on Uber. Try & use pictures, I like that too.
Submitted by ALTUS (user info) at 2005-02-11 14:08:32 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
lame! bitch http://www.ubersite.com/m/59239#1136944
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2005-02-11 13:56:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
A little other the top, too emotionally charged for me. Over all, good writing structure, though. I'll =1 it for the effort. You have to be careful how you handle subjects like this, or they get get too "Lifetime Original."
Submitted by Teephphah (user info) at 2005-02-11 12:45:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Holy shit. This gave me chills. For real. I still have them.
Of course, that could be the meth, too.
Seriously good stuff. No tears, but I do have a lump in the pit of my stomach. EXCELLENT JOB!
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-02-11 12:16:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Yes. You need to post more.
This was wonderful.
Submitted by Stin (user info) at 2005-02-11 11:43:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2005-02-11 11:40:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by WhatTheHell (user info) at 2005-02-11 11:33:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
It's official.....
YOU DO NOT SUCK!!
Now go read my reply to you in my HATE POST, post.
Or I shall shat on you.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-02-11 11:27:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Indeed. There is no sucking here. Really nice post!
Submitted by algermetiphist (user info) at 2005-02-11 11:08:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I have to agree. This is good.
Submitted by WhatTheHell (user info) at 2005-02-11 10:59:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow... good shit, you SHOULD write more posts... you don't suck!