"You were all I could see." (987 hits)
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Submitted by Bigmike (View user info) at 2005-02-28 00:27:29 EST
She was wondering how exactly it got to this point. He was the perfect man and an outstanding husband. He always had respect for her and never seemed to get too angry even when she made big mistakes. How could she not know? How could she be so blind?
"How did I love you?
there was no measuring
far above this dirty world
far above everything
in your tower over it
you were clean"
He was so masculine and caring. Everything about him was her idea of a perfect man. He had a rugged handsome look to him and a smile that shook her to her knees whenever she saw it. He would cock his head a little and that smile would creep over his face, starting at the middle of his mouth and flowering out. He would have a mischevious glint in his eyes that always told her that she was his; would be his forever. She felt safe in his arms like nothing bad in the world could come close to her. He was her armor, her shelter, her safety net. She would greet him at the door when he arrived home from work and he would be genuinely glad that she was there. That smile would begin and he would sweep her off of her feet to a wild night of passion and intimacy.
"so warm and insightful
were you in my eyes
I was sure the rightful
guardian of my life
damn you betrayer
how you lied"
She had no idea until he went on vacation. She had absolutely no idea what was going on. Her world had been right and solid. Her life had been built on granite, forged in steel. She had mindlessly followed and adored, loved and received love, sacrificed for the man she would die for. When she went to the mailbox that day, she was planning a big surprise for his welcome home. She had the menu set in her head and she had ordered his favorite cake. It was going to be a huge surprise for him.
"but for seven years
you were loved
I laid golden orchid crowns
around your feet
for seven years
I bowed down
to touch the ground
so wholly your devotee
you were
all I could see"
She gingerly opened the mailbox and took out a rather thick stack of envelopes. As she was flipping through them on the way back to the house, she happened upon a blue envelope with a little cellophane window. The writing in the window looked rather like the writing you would find on a payroll check. She was curious about that letter because, in seven years of going to the mailbox and pulling mail out of it, she had never seen an envelope quite like this one. In seven years of getting mail out of that particular mailbox she had never been surprised. It was always bills, or a letter from her mother, or a letter from his father, or junk, junk, junk. In seven years of marriage she always knew what was coming in the mail for either of them.
This one was different.
"I've got my sight now
I see everything you hid
so don't you try to right now
all the wrong you did
I might forget you
but never forgive"
She set the envelope down an the kitchen table and crossed to the stove. The teakettle was whisting and she picked it up off the stove and started to pour the steaming hot water into her teacup. As she picked the teabag up and began to drop it gently into the steaming hot water, she glanced back at the table to the envelope.
"I wonder what that letter is all about?" she thought to herself. She finished pouring the water and placed the kettle back on the stove. She was still moving the teabag up and down into the cup as she crossed over to the kitchen table and sat directly in front of the blue envelope. It looked important to her like a large check of some kind, but she couldn't remember him saying anything to her about any money coming in the mail. Sh stared at the letter as she blew the steam off of the top of her tea and then carefully took a sip.
"but for seven years
you were loved
I laid golden orchid crowns
around your feet
for seven years
I bowed down
to touch the ground
so wholly your devotee"
She wouldn't usually think to open his mail, as a matter of fact he was insistent that she not open his mail. He told her that he enjoyed receiving and opening mail. He told her that it felt good to him, like he had finally become a grown up. She submitted to his wishes in this regard and never, ever opened a piece of his mail for the entire time that they had been married.
She had to open this one though. Her curiosity was getting the better of her. She wondered if it were a secret inheritance or maybe a big bonus from his job. She wondered if it were a large lump sum payment from a magazine for one of his freelance articles.
She took another sip of her tea and picked the envelope up. She ran her fingernail under the fold and slowly tore a straight line across the top of the envelope. She took the papers out and unfolded them. A check for the amount of fifteen thousand dollars fell out and landed face up on the kitchen table.
"for seven years
you were so revered
I made offerings of
anything and everything I had"
For three days she stewed about the contents of that letter. For three days she used the proceeds from that fifteen thousand dollar check to set up a new life for herself. Now she was sitting in her husbands favorite leather armchair, loaded shotgun sitting crosswise on her lap. He would be home any minute and she didn't want him to miss any of it. She had set up a table right next to the door and on it she put the letter, a photocopy of the check she had cashed, and a videotape cassette that she had rented. The title of the videotape cassette was "Horny Housewife 6". The first paragraphs of the letter that was in the envelope read,
"We hope it is not an inconvenience for us to send this letter to your home address. It had originally gone to your PO Box and been returned to us."
"Thank you for producing and directing Horny Housewife 6. We appreciate the candid aspect of your series, especially the realism of the actors. Your female lead is becoming quite popular with our customers. We will continue to distribute this series as long as you produce it. The first five videos in this series are the best selling videos from our distribution. Keep up the good work and you will certainly be seeing bigger and better checks from us in the future."
Of course she had gone and rented the video, she couldn't help it. She had to know what her husband was involved in. It seems she was involved as well, she just didn't know it until she watched herself in the video.
"you were
all I could see."
Now his car was pulling up in the driveway. She pumped the action on the shotgun to life and pointed the muzzle of the gun to the door. Then she casually reached over and hit record on the videotape recorder that was set up on a tripod next to her chair.
"Maybe I'll torture him first," was all she thought, an audible chuckle escaping her lips.
User Reviews
Submitted by Tiltedhalo (user info) at 2005-03-04 09:25:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You had me with this one. Great song... great truth. Too bad most of the time it runs the path you write. There are a few more Merchant songs that you would validate well! Good luck!
Submitted by WhoLetYouIn (user info) at 2005-03-02 13:43:17 EST (#)
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Submitted by espo (user info) at 2005-03-02 13:12:49 EST (#)
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awesome, as usual. keep em coming.
Submitted by myredmirage95 (user info) at 2005-03-02 01:50:08 EST (#)
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I never saw that coming. You're a great writer.
Submitted by Wombat_Warfare (user info) at 2005-03-01 13:54:32 EST (#)
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I think I've seen that video...
Maybe not, but you still kick ass all the same
Submitted by Dannie (user info) at 2005-02-28 15:01:22 EST (#)
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This is excellent.
I didn't think it was at all predictable.
Some folks are just psychic I suppose.
Submitted by Alfa_Veloce (user info) at 2005-02-28 10:47:52 EST (#)
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I agree with the other guy...you are a sick fuck. But that was awesome writing. Tre cool.
Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2005-02-28 09:57:53 EST (#)
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Submitted by lojope (user info) at 2005-02-28 09:53:57 EST (#)
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You are a sick fuck.
And I love it.
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-02-28 09:41:15 EST (#)
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HOLY SHIT!
This was great!!
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2005-02-28 05:03:29 EST (#)
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I was scanning it to see how long it was, right, and saw "to her knees" and "mouth" real close together in the second paragraph.
And got overexcited.
:(
Submitted by Quasiplasmohedron (user info) at 2005-02-28 03:56:59 EST (#)
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Submitted by sparkle_pink (user info) at 2005-02-28 03:33:49 EST (#)
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Heeheehee! I didn't think this was obvious at all.
I actually thought this was funny. Sorry if drama and angst was what you were going for.
I'm surprised she didn't try holding the letter up to a light first, to try and read it without opening it.
Submitted by toucan_sam (user info) at 2005-02-28 03:05:37 EST (#)
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Submitted by Viciousriffs (user info) at 2005-02-28 02:46:30 (#)
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Yes. There is a name for people who find out they have been videotaped and then kill someone. That name is FUCKING PSYCHOTIC. Feel free to send anyone you deem necessary to my office on Tuesday. Therapy will be handed out like Tootsie Rolls.
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?fuck the what
Submitted by Viciousriffs (user info) at 2005-02-28 02:46:30 EST (#)
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Yes. There is a name for people who find out they have been videotaped and then kill someone. That name is FUCKING PSYCHOTIC. Feel free to send anyone you deem necessary to my office on Tuesday. Therapy will be handed out like Tootsie Rolls.
Submitted by Rawrg (user info) at 2005-02-28 02:30:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Otters (user info) at 2005-02-28 01:51:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Sweek.
Submitted by Ivy (user info) at 2005-02-28 01:47:09 EST (#)
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Nice, kept me guessing what she would find. Good first post for me to read today.
Submitted by Siren (user info) at 2005-02-28 01:38:18 EST (#)
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Oh, Mikey... here's another +2 for your collection.
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2005-02-28 01:05:29 EST (#)
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Submitted by tlozoot (user info) at 2005-02-28 00:53:07 (#)
Ranking: 2
Have you heard about the serial killer they just found in Kansas? He was nicknamed BTK or something like that. Creepy stuff, reminded me of your writing.
Yes, I heard about that today. He was a reverend or something wasn't he? He was like the person least likely to do it.
Submitted by tlozoot (user info) at 2005-02-28 00:53:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Have you heard about the serial killer they just found in Kansas? He was nicknamed BTK or something like that. Creepy stuff, reminded me of your writing.
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2005-02-28 00:40:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
cool. i reckon there's a decent amount of readers that would enjoy his return.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-02-28 00:39:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
A bit predictable, but very good nonetheless. I'd review more, but I'm going to sleep, so I'll do it tomorrow. Why am I telling you this?
I DON'T FUCKING KNOW
wheeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2005-02-28 00:36:19 EST (#)
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Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2005-02-28 00:30:35 (#)
Ranking: 2
good stuff, as usual... when's carlo coming back?
Not sure. I needed a break from him, but it's getting to be about time for me to get back there.
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2005-02-28 00:30:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
good stuff, as usual... when's carlo coming back?