Blakdar the Sequel (313 hits)
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Submitted by The Foodman (View user info) at 2005-03-17 10:22:24 EST
This is a continuation of a character here: http://www.ubersite.com/m/47946 ....The writing style in this one is completely different from the original, but I was just in a different mood.
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Blakdar stood near a corner bakery about 100 feet away watching Lisa. He first saw her a few weeks ago while on one of his daily walks downtown. The lust for killing again had recently come surging back. Surveilling Lisa for this long had been a good idea. By now, he had her patterns down. The time had finally come to make good on his plans. Tonight would be Blakdar's date with Lisa, and Lisa's date with oblivion.
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It was about 9pm, and Lisa opened the door to her tiny apartment and stepped in. Her answering machine blinked in a steady pattern. No messages. She never had any messages. Her parents were dead, she had no real friends, and hadn't been seeing anyone for quite some time. Exhausted from the day's work, Lisa collapsed onto her couch and passed into a dreamless sleep. She was awoken some time later by a frantic pounding on the door. Thinking it was some sort of emergency, she unlocked the door and flung it open before checking to see who it was.
Blakdar burst in and gave her two swift punches to the face. With a loud crack, the second blow broke her nose. Lisa fell to the ground and lay silent. She was still conscious but was in too much shock to speak or move. The pain was blinding. Warm blood trickled from her nostrils and pooled beside her head on the floor. Blakdar moved to stand over her. "Good evening, Lisa. I've been watching you for a while. I'm here to kill you." Thinking those words to be concise enough (as they did clearly state what he planned to do), he grabbed Lisa's arms and dragged her out into the hallway.
With a check of his watch, Blakdar smiled. It was 2am. No one would be up to see any of this. Lisa moaned as she was dragged, thumping down two flights of stairs and out into the night. A pair of strong arms lifted her up and placed into the trunk of a car. Darkness came with a slam, and a few moments later, the car was in motion. Blakdar drove for several minutes out of town to an old house he often drove by. It was abondoned and would make a great spot to fuck someone up. Blakdar pulled around back and opened the trunk. Lisa still lay there, dazed and confused. He dragged her out and she sat on all fours in the dirt.
She was unstable and repeatedly wiped her eyes. Blood had run into them during the car ride, and her attempts to clear them had only resulted in mixing in dirt. The sky was clear and the moon was bright. Squinting, Lisa could make out the silhouette of the man who had beaten and abducted her. He moved closer to her and kicked her in the ribs several times. She fell to her stomach and he continued his onslaught. One foot made solid contact with the side of her face. "Mmmph!" was all she could say. She spit out some bloody teeth and sobbed. Blakdar grabbed her hair and lifted her head from behind. He pulled a small knife across her throat in one fluid motion.
Lisa began gagging and writhing on the ground. She held one hand with crooked, broken fingers over the wound. It was no use. She was dying. Lisa's movements became slower. She was on her back now, gazing up into the air. her face was unrecognizable. Blakdar plunged his knife into the center of her chest to finish the job. Lisa was dead: killed by a complete stranger for no apparent reason.
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Two weeks later, a badly decomposed body, wrapped in plastic, was found in a nearby ditch. Lisa had been used, discarded like a piece of garbage, and left to rot.
Unwanted.
Unloved.
Gone forever.
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Submitted by Sassmasterr (user info) at 2005-03-17 10:29:18 EST (#)
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