Reminiscence (1383 hits)
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Submitted by Snark << snarkk.at.gmail.com (View user info) at 2005-03-19 04:03:28 EST
REMINISCENCE
Maybe it's the wine.
Maybe it's the warm glow in my belly and my head that makes me think of her. She had the same effect on me after all.
One night.
One fucking night and I don't think I'll ever escape it.
She asked me what I was thinking about and I lied.
I lied and she laughed and it was just perfect. As perfect as the rain on our faces and the way the street lights glowed off of the black glass asphalt beneath us.
The warmest rain I've ever felt. The warmest smile I've ever kissed.
We talked - oh God did we ever talk. We spent hours talking about nothing, and everything that leads up to it.
Small shit. Inane shit. Nothing worth remembering but that's the point I guess. It wasn't the content. That place and time wasn't about substance. We were just content to be, and hear, and absorb the vibration of our voices on each others skin.
It was like coming home. It was like the glow of a wood fire on a winter's night. It was like the softness of your mother's voice during a howling wind.
She had this crease on her chin. It was the perfect flaw for her face and the perfect opening for me to poke enough fun to push my way into her heart a little. She countered with telling me I'm freakishly tall. That's nothing I haven't been told before but I've never had anyone say it like her. I've never had anyone say it with that glint - that shine.
In the end we both acknowledged our separate yet mutual fuckuppery, then took it out, screaming and stomping, on every puddle that got in our way.
The rain cleaned us a little I think, her touch cleansed me.
We kissed slow.
It's strange. I don't remember kissing her, I just remember how strange it felt to not be kissing her. I don't remember the feel of her lips but I remember, with crystal clarity, them parting.
We strolled, and chased each other, and made enough noise to wake the dead. We told each other things that you never tell someone that you just met, and then forgot our secrets almost as fast.
We made love with everything but our bodies and when the sun came up we were spent.
Spent but not ready.
We sat by the river on a cold wet bench reserved for the elderly and watched the muddy water float past, watched it carry stick, and log, and the fading ripple of the night before.
I don't know when I fell asleep or how. I don't know what time it was or if I ever told her my name.
I remember her head on my shoulder and the soft rythmic sigh of her dream breath in my ear, and then I remember waking up.
Alone.
I woke up knowing that she hates the way people walk past each other with a frown and a sideways glance. I woke up knowing that she loves lilacs and hates roses. I woke up with an ache in my ribs as if one was missing.
I never saw her again.
I just have that night.
I like to think that she sometimes sits on a bench and remembers, that she watches life walk by and knows that I'm out there somewhere and smiles and maybe even hugs herself.
Who knows. I don't. At least I don't know for sure.
No, I can't tell for sure, but I can imagine. I can see her in my minds eye, sitting by a different river and lost in reminiscence and re-living the night she was so alive that she couldn't stand it.
It's what gets me by.
User Reviews
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2008-09-15 14:58:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
The tears will be coming.
Submitted by Mike-Mc (user info) at 2007-11-07 08:14:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Excellent
Submitted by Walker (user info) at 2005-12-18 22:24:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Beautiful! Reminded me a bit of Richard Linklater's "Before Sunrise" with J. Delpy and E. Hawke
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-10-19 03:47:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
There are a solid four pages of +2 streaks with 30 or more reviews. That is stupid. I am weeding it all out by giving every one of them a +1; that way posts that have 1.99 with 200+ reviews gets best ever.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-06-23 12:24:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Damage Control
Submitted by ProgramGeek (user info) at 2005-06-22 17:38:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-03-22 21:29:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Ahahaha
Some coward used his alt to knock me off of the best ever page.
I love it.
Submitted by ruthless (user info) at 2005-03-22 17:04:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Simply beautiful.
I particularly loved this line: I woke up with an ache in my ribs as if one was missing.
Submitted by Supercords (user info) at 2005-03-22 16:13:06 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Xena (user info) at 2005-03-21 14:15:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This was a nice post honey...I wanted to write something witty and maybe even a bit mean...but you made me feel all sappy now I can't be mean. fucker!
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-03-21 14:05:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Nothing short of perfection.
Submitted by mo (user info) at 2005-03-21 14:04:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Hi Snark, very good , I really enjoyed this one, of course being the big sap that I am. I'm sure you already know that. Anyways I like those ones more than all the horror, don't get me wrong I still like that Stephen King, or better yet Clive Barker shit. Your Faithful rater Mo.
Submitted by Dannie (user info) at 2005-03-21 13:31:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This was....mmm....nice.
Submitted by HZRD (user info) at 2005-03-21 11:55:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by jumpinjellyfish (user info) at 2005-03-21 11:47:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn...that was well written.
Submitted by Val (user info) at 2005-03-20 14:27:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I didn't realize until the end that I'd been holding my breath the whole time.
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2005-03-20 14:20:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I think personal "best evers" begin at 30 reviews. let's put this on the list.
Submitted by absolutes (user info) at 2005-03-20 10:10:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow. Loved it.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-03-19 20:01:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by DanielH (user info) at 2005-03-19 19:27:55 (#)
Ranking: 2
Reminiscence.
Nothing worth remembering but that's the point I guess.
- - -
The irony in the above is perfect and extraordinary. One of the most beautiful posts I've read on this site.
+++++
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I was hoping someone would pick up on that!
Thank you DanielH
Submitted by DanielH (user info) at 2005-03-19 19:27:55 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Reminiscence.
Nothing worth remembering but that's the point I guess.
- - -
The irony in the above is perfect and extraordinary. One of the most beautiful posts I've read on this site.
+++++
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-03-19 16:47:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2005-03-19 09:12:46 (#)
Ranking: 2
Oh snark love, I am very drunk and shall write you an email to tell thee how very much I love thee and how i wish i was that girl on the river and that it was me you chased puddles with and oh god this was good
I somehow think that's the way she reacts to really good sex as well.
Which should tell you something about how utterly quality this post was.
Submitted by Jo_of_the_golden_P (user info) at 2005-03-19 15:37:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Love it like rainy mondays.
<3
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2005-03-19 15:12:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This is nice.
Submitted by wookie (user info) at 2005-03-19 14:27:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
bueno
Submitted by shitfuck (user info) at 2005-03-19 13:13:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
My head is a bong.
Submitted by algermetiphist (user info) at 2005-03-19 12:58:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No comment.
Submitted by kai070169 (user info) at 2005-03-19 11:12:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Snarkalicious.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-03-19 09:36:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This is the definition of perfection.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2005-03-19 09:12:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Oh snark love, I am very drunk and shall write you an email to tell thee how very much I love thee and how i wish i was that girl on the river and that it was me you chased puddles with and oh god this was good
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2005-03-19 08:36:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by ArnieGeddon (user info) at 2005-03-19 06:50:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
My goodness, you are wanting to be their I'm totally sure. Good work to you, she will be thinking of that time in the night upon her head, many times and nights I'm sure. This is beautiful writing. I remember my Clotilde, I have to go my friend Earnst has arrived.
Submitted by MrWillard (user info) at 2005-03-19 06:00:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I remember a couple of experiences similar to this. Its amazing...and makes you think.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-03-19 05:47:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:52:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I am well versed in that phrase... a little too versed perhaps.
Submitted by Wazza (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:51:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
"In vino veritas." that is latin for in wine there is truth.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:47:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Hahahah,
Foodman,
Read my other stuff:
http://www.ubersite.com/m/43650
Submitted by foodman (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:45:55 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
My style would have been to write all that sappy shit, then end it with some comment about stalking or murder.
Shank that bitch!
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:39:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
fuck....
errrr no qualms....
(bottles almost done)
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:35:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Woohoo!
I have now qualms whatsoever with living vicariously through others.
Submitted by stevie_says (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:34:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Wazza and I just got back from getting drunk on his yacht. You should see that thing. Fuckin' beauty.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:27:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Wazza my friend,
Are you as drunk as I am?
Submitted by Wazza (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:25:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Good story but dreams have to end.
Get another and do it agen!
And agen , and agen...........
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:23:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i had an ex like that. Though, it was easier to part with her, because she was a bitch.
Submitted by stevie_says (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:16:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I've had nights like that. They eventually feel like dreams. It's so hard to differentiate reality from fantasy sometimes.
Glad this was posted on a weekend. It will stick around the front page for longer than usual.
Submitted by mrwolf (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:09:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This stuck a nice fat lump in my throat ass hole.
Submitted by stevie_says (user info) at 2005-03-19 04:04:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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