I had to see her die because hearing wasn't enough (851 hits)
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Submitted by PWNstar (View user info) at 2005-03-27 06:12:46 EST
I loved her too much.
By the time she had called me for the last time, we hadn't seen eachother for almost a year. Never in a relationship, we just loved eachother as two people should. She would end up telling about her unsupporting family and her emotionally abusive father and I would end up comforting her as she cried over the phone.
It wasn't always this way though. There was a time when those things weren't the issues that mattered. It was a time when we each had plans, everything was going fine, and her conversations made me smile for a week.
By our last conversation, her voice was making me depressed.
You see, a lot changes when a girl gets pregnant. Friendships change. Emotions change. Needs change.
I was the first person she told. I had to hear her say "I'm so scared" and it haunts me to this day. On one side I had my beliefs that one's situation was the result of their own doing. But I also loved her. All I could tell her was that she had to deal with it and that I loved her still. Essentially, useless advice.
By Christmas break I was at my wits end. I went against everyone's else judgement and drove up to Chicago around the same time as the snow storm. We stayed in a motel together...no, nothing like that, and during our time together I saw a haunting image.
Next time you see someone die on the inside, look into their eyes. Where you once saw a fire, you'll see tears. And if you aren't shaken by it, you're more of a man than me.
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Submitted by Yams (user info) at 2005-07-17 23:46:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Shoulda +2'ed this earlier. Sorry Mike.
Submitted by snarf (user info) at 2005-03-30 05:51:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
powerful
Submitted by pantsarestupid (user info) at 2005-03-28 11:21:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Thanks.
Submitted by Josephine (user info) at 2005-03-28 11:04:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Deathwatchz (user info) at 2005-03-28 02:26:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
what happens when you see someone die on the inside, look into their eyes, and realize its a mirror?
Submitted by Joemama (user info) at 2005-03-27 15:54:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
-1 for reminding me what empathy meant.
Sorry.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-03-27 15:54:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
It's the hollowness that gets me, the lack of soul where there used to be one. I have seen people become dead inside after too many drinks or because of some type of emotional trauma.
Whatever the case, it's haunting.
Submitted by Sphagnum (user info) at 2005-03-27 13:20:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Davros (user info) at 2005-03-27 13:00:34 EST (#)
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Submitted by Faithless_Whisper (user info) at 2005-03-27 12:51:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This was written with a meloncholy, drenching magic. It was lovely.
Submitted by Bizantine (user info) at 2005-03-27 12:42:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Jebus, reading this i kept thinking of a girl i know...
well written
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-03-27 12:31:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I have no words.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-03-27 09:53:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2005-03-27 09:39:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by foodman (user info) at 2005-03-27 08:22:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I was a little drunk when I wrote that review...Really, though, I liked the piece. Especially:
"Next time you see someone die on the inside, look into their eyes. Where you once saw a fire, you'll see tears. And if you aren't shaken by it, you're more of a man than me."
..Fucking beautiful.
Submitted by foodman (user info) at 2005-03-27 06:53:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Haha..Her life was so bad that something in her died, and she was an emotional wreck! Classic!
Oh, wait..Wasn't supposed to be funny...