Land of the Heartless, Final Part (527 hits)
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Submitted by spedmonkey <spedmonkey.at.gmail.com> (View user info) at 2005-04-10 22:50:26 EDT
Part 1: http://www.ubersite.com/m/54418
Part 2: http://www.ubersite.com/m/55728
Part 3: http://www.ubersite.com/m/59598
Part 4: http://www.ubersite.com/m/63678
Part 5: http://www.ubersite.com/m/63764
David crept back to the apartment as the sun rose over the horizon. He searched the lot outside and saw no strange cars. He should probably tell Telonya to let him go alone, he thought. She might get hurt otherwise.
He sighed, shook his head, and walked into the building, stopping in front of the number four slot. He inserted the key, and the door melted away. He walked inside, and immediately doubled over and vomited.
Telonya was lying on the floor in the middle of the room, except that she only vaguely resembled the Telonya he had met yesterday. She had been brutally beaten; her eyeballs gouged out and staring up from the floor, her clothes torn, face smashed in, and, judging by the blood and other fluids staining her pants and the rug around her lower body, been raped for good measure. There was no sign of Glynn and the other two assailants.
David vomited again. He stood up, took a deep, shuddering breath, and looked around the apartment, searching for strength. He noticed something lying on the ground and picked it up. It was something written in a dark brownish-red ink. David's nausea welled up again as he realized it was Telonya's blood.
He forced down the heaving convulsions and began to read.
WE KNOW WHERE YOU ARE JEW.
WHAT WE DID TO THIS KIKE LOVER
WILL BE A MERCY COMPARED TO
WHAT WE DO TO YOU.
Telonya's sightless eyes stared up at him as David crumpled the paper and threw it to the ground. He looked around the room, searching for something, anything, to give him strength. As he glanced back over at her, he paused, and the tears sprang, unbidden, to his eyes, and the sobs choked his throat anew. As his sight blurred, he took one, two steps back, away from this final horror, and then began running.
He ran for what seemed like an eternity, sobbing the whole way. People yelled at him, but he didn't hear. Finally, he collapsed, gasping for air.
David lay facedown in the middle of New York as his lungs began to work again. Summoning his strength, he lifted his head and glanced around faintly. He paused, as he noticed a familiar structure in the distance. He sighed, then, grimacing weakly, David propped himself up on his elbows and began half-crawling, half-dragging himself toward it. Pedestrians stared, but he took no notice. Panting with exertion, he finally made it to his target: the clinic where he had been reconstituted. With his last bit of energy, he pulled himself into the spotless waiting room, glanced up at the staring receptionist, smiled, and passed out.
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David stood naked in the vaporization chamber again. The cold stung his skin, but he hardly noticed it. "Lasers ready?" asked a tech.
"Check," answered another across the room.
The mask stood before him again. "Are you sure you want to go through with this again?" it asked.
David nodded, and stared at his feet. "Remember how you said that some things haven't changed at all? Well, the only things still the same are the ones that take away from the world, not add to it.
"Then fire on my mark."
Scarcely noticing the activity around him, David smiled sadly. I hope things are better next century, he thought, as the lasers seared his skin, sending him into another endless black dream.
User Reviews
Submitted by minimumdino (user info) at 2006-01-11 13:57:55 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
man what a waste of keyboard wear and tear... typing this shit
Submitted by minimumdino (user info) at 2006-01-10 18:40:20 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
i hope you dont have children so your DNA can be put to rest
Submitted by Eternal_Dragon (user info) at 2005-07-27 00:53:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
poop
Submitted by spedmonkey (user info) at 2005-04-12 19:18:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Heh. Heh. I just realized, this is my 69th post. Heh. 69. Heheheheh.
Submitted by tlozoot (user info) at 2005-04-11 20:57:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Woot, awful short though.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-04-11 01:01:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Sad. The violence of her death seemed incongruent with the way she was presenting society in earlier installments. It felt like you were just going for shock value there.
Still, I liked the message and I liked the writing. Surprised it ended so quick...
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-04-10 23:48:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
yesh
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-04-10 23:44:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The ending seemed slightly rushed, but then again, I probably just want the story to continue. Great writing, either way.