The Manson Effect (1434 hits)
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Submitted by Snark << snarkk.at.gmail.com (View user info) at 2005-04-20 16:26:03 EDT
THE MANSON EFFECT.
I remember the day everyone started killing each other.
It started at 10:14 A.M. Pacific Standard Time on April 22, 2005 and I don't think it has stopped since.
I remember I was crossing the street when it happened, just another suit on the march. I was late for work and doing my best to hustle through the throng of business people and vagrants that make up the late morning city pedestrian crowd.
I remember it had rained for 3 days prior but that morning it was sunny. I remember the smell of moisture being baked off of concrete. The smell of the city...
I was doing my best to push my way through the crowd, when suddenly a tall man with short black hair and a three thousand dollar suit, pushed past me and jammed the sharp end of an expensive looking ball point pen into the back of the head of the lady in front of me.
He hit her dead center in the soft spot where the neck meets the skull and pushed it in deep, then grabbed her by the top of her immaculately sculpted blond hair and proceeded to jam it in and out again.
She never made a sound beyond that of a strange gurgle / cough and then she was down and leaking the last of herself onto the steaming road.
He killed her and then looked at me with the strangest expression of pride and wonderment, then held out one sticky red hand as if to say "Hey! Look what I just learned!" and then my briefcase connected with his forehead and he went down beside her.
I turned to find a cop but found only shocked faces instead. I reached into my jacket for my phone and a white hot pain exploded in my guts. I looked down to find a little girl, about 6 years old, jamming something up and under my suit jacked and through my shirt. She wore a red Dora the Explorer jacket, white jeans pants, a butter fly bow in her hair, and the same maniacal grin as the murderer at my feet.
I grabbed her arm as a matter of reflex and then pried the bloody plastic fork from her hand and pushed her hard onto the asphalt. I glanced around quickly for her mother but the sound of a racing engine drew my attention up the street to the Taxi hurtling at us.
I dived towards the sidewalk in dreadfully slow motion as the cab plowed through the 7 or 8 people who had been too stunned to move, sending them flying, and bouncing over the bodies of the girl, the dead woman and the murderer.
I stood up and looked at the carnage around me, my mind reeling from the shock and utter absurdity of it all, and then all hell broke loose.
More screams joined those of the twisted victims of the cab and all at once it was as if I had stepped into a full on no-holds-barred city wide Cage Match.
Everywhere I turned there was someone being attacked.
To my right, a woman in a tight fitting blue tracksuit was smiling and doing her best to jam her MP3 player down the throat of an old street bum.
To my left, a kid with spiked green hair and a Rancid T-Shirt sat astride an incredibly obese twitching woman and smashed his skateboard into her skull.
I glanced behind me to see a man in the butcher shop standing behind the counter and hitting something over and over again with the largest meat cleaver I have ever seen.
I turned back to the street as my gorge began to rise, in time to see the cab make a second pass over its previous victims.
I stood there in shock as my mind drank it all in, and then a trickle of something wet sliding down my belly reminded me I was hurt and I turned and ran.
I ran in a state of total panic. I had no idea where I was going to go or what I was going to do when I got there. I just picked a direction and suddenly my legs were propelling me down the sidewalk of their own accord. I hurdled bodies and shoved men, women and children onto the street as I blindly ran from point A to wherever.
I didn't bother trying to be a hero. Something in the back of my head told me that I should be a survivor first. Somewhere in my mind a voice was screaming "GAS! It's some kind of Terrorist gas attack! RUN RUN RUN!"
That was two days ago and I haven't stopped running.
Since then, the smell of the city has become somewhat more putrid than usual. The warm weather has stayed and the bodies littering the streets have begun to bloat. I'm holed up in the basement of a coffee shop, surrounded by boxes and cobwebs. I can't remember how I got here exactly... I just know I have to leave soon.
Whatever the girl had on her fork has caused the wound on my stomach to become infected.
Outside the murder continues. It's not nearly as widespread as it was at the beginning, but I can still hear the occasional scream or gunshot.
I ventured upstairs a couple of days ago to grab some bottles of water and a small TV was on above the cash register. A haggard anchorman was reporting on the world wide slaughter and then he blinked, smiled, and jumped over the desk at someone beyond camera range.
Yesterday I went out to the street. There was a cop standing on the corner adjacent to me. He kept turning in circles as if looking for something and then he let out a strange mewling whine, put his pistol to his head, and pulled the trigger.
God I'm so tired. If my belly wasn't on fire I'd probably be passed out by now.
I need a shower and a beer and a fucking wake up call because this can't be happening.
I think I recognize the street I'm on. If memory serves, there is a drug store a block down. I am going to try and get to it then find some kind of antibiotic. After that I'm going to try and make it to my apartment. I'm guessing it's a good 5 hour journey by foot. That's a lot of ground to cover in a city full of homicidal maniacs but I have to try.
Trina and the baby might be there waiting for me.
She's always wanted to move out of the city.
I'm thinking it's high time we did.
User Reviews
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2008-01-14 12:46:28 EST (#)
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Has anybody read CELL by Stephen King?
Good Book.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-06-23 12:13:35 EDT (#)
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Damage Control
Submitted by ProgramGeek (user info) at 2005-06-22 17:35:42 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by SkyLaR (user info) at 2005-06-15 10:24:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by BobLobla (user info) at 2005-05-06 16:56:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You are a very gifted writer, I have read this like 6 times. You have an uncanny ability to turn your words into amazing visuals.
LOVE IT
Submitted by Revolutionman (user info) at 2005-05-04 00:33:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
ownt
Submitted by QueenAshlee (user info) at 2005-05-03 22:51:33 EDT (#)
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I'm afraid of you.
Submitted by Benny (user info) at 2005-05-03 22:27:12 EDT (#)
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This reminds me of playing Grand Theft Auto and putting in the cheat codes to make everybody crazy. I tell you surviving when everyone is nuts would be no easy thing.
Submitted by MrWillard (user info) at 2005-04-23 18:59:10 EDT (#)
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Reminds me of a Tom Clancy book I read.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-04-23 18:12:02 EDT (#)
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Dude, this was friggin' great. Really chilling and gripping. However, I think this line does not belong:
"More screams joined those of the twisted victims of the cab and all at once it was as if I had stepped into a full on no-holds-barred city wide Cage Match."
That line is kind of funny, and sounds like you're trying to be funny -- it's totally contrary to the mood of the piece. That is all.
Thank Munkeypants for me reading this. She's been surreptitiously pimping you out.
Submitted by mo (user info) at 2005-04-23 15:03:24 EDT (#)
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It's me again, you rock buddy as usaul. It does kind of remind me of "In The Mouth of Madness", in that the homicidal maniac syndrome was similar. I like that you can think like that. I have day dreams sometimes about stuff like that, you just right it down, I wish I could do that. I haven't written for so long. I really need to get back into it. Well anyways good job, hey call me sometime.
Mo
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2005-04-21 17:12:18 EDT (#)
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Submitted by WhatTheHell (user info) at 2005-04-21 14:09:43 (#)
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Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2005-04-21 14:08:15 (#)
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You've made them sick of Shlongy.
Hell, I'M sick of Shlongy.
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Ahhh... then the master plan is FINALLY working??
HAHAHAHAHHAHAHH!!.... EXCELLENT.
I mean, really ?
Submitted by Jungle_Jimanee (user info) at 2005-04-21 09:13:07 EDT (#)
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Submitted by CanucksFan (user info) at 2005-04-21 00:59:45 (#)
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I'll only give you this +2 if it actually happens..but I'll give it ahead of time just incase it does.
Ha Ha
Submitted by Awko (user info) at 2005-04-21 08:50:12 EDT (#)
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This rocked
Submitted by gtz (user info) at 2005-04-21 08:47:22 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-04-21 08:26:39 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2005-04-21 08:20:30 EDT (#)
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Huh, I was expecting a post about Marilyn Manson.
Submitted by PrescriptionX (user info) at 2005-04-21 01:12:21 EDT (#)
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Sweet, now make a movie
Submitted by CanucksFan (user info) at 2005-04-21 00:59:45 EDT (#)
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I'll only give you this +2 if it actually happens..but I'll give it ahead of time just incase it does.
Submitted by Shizae (user info) at 2005-04-21 00:32:34 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by supadupapupa (user info) at 2005-04-21 00:07:58 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-04-20 23:46:46 EDT (#)
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Ladyplural of all people.
You gotta at least give me a reason.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-04-20 23:11:00 EDT (#)
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Nerg.
Submitted by Banga3386 (user info) at 2005-04-20 18:04:52 EDT (#)
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I'm stunned, this is absolutely fantastic. You are brilliant. Please write more of this story and don't make us wait the better part of a year like that bastard Sideburns and his "Late Night Delivery" series. Still waiting for more of that one Burnsey!
Banga
Submitted by algermetiphist (user info) at 2005-04-20 18:04:25 EDT (#)
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That was unexpected, and I loved it.
Submitted by BobLobla (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:47:34 EDT (#)
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I just read this again and it is still awesome
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:37:26 EDT (#)
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Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:32:42 (#)
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huh, and here I thought it was my tits and the sexy sexy way I cook breakfast in my stained and torn housecoat with my hair in knots and morning breath that could melt the chrome off the toaster, screaming obcenities at the pets and children.
ah well.
my overdeveloped sense of evil will have to do.
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AHAHAHAHA!
Submitted by jumpinjellyfish (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:35:28 EDT (#)
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WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
Really good stuff!
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:32:42 EDT (#)
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huh, and here I thought it was my tits and the sexy sexy way I cook breakfast in my stained and torn housecoat with my hair in knots and morning breath that could melt the chrome off the toaster, screaming obcenities at the pets and children.
ah well.
my overdeveloped sense of evil will have to do.
Submitted by MrRottenTreats (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:28:21 EDT (#)
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Best post in a long time, by anyone.
PLEASE continue this.
Otherwise I'll start randomly killing people too
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:28:08 EDT (#)
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AshK,
The thing I love about you is your great sense of evil.
Submitted by nrduncan (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:24:49 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:15:29 EDT (#)
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Three cheers for spontaneous death and distruction!
Hip Hip Hoooooooooooray!
Hip Hip Hoooooooooooooooooooray!
Hip Hip...hhhheeeyyyy, where'd everybody go?
Submitted by BobLobla (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:14:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You are a gifted writer
Submitted by dodahdave (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:06:30 EDT (#)
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Holy Fucking Shit, this is good!
I love how everything just went to hell with no warning. Fuck exposition, let's get to some BLOOD!
Submitted by littledan (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:02:59 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-04-20 17:01:47 EDT (#)
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GLALL,
Bro. If I live anywhere near you, I'd give you have my paycheque so you could buy more drugs to write the stuff you write.
Submitted by Xena (user info) at 2005-04-20 16:58:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This turned out pretty damn good, but...
I think I liked my pirates with their fire-engine-pirate-ship idea better though, oh well, there's no accounting for good taste.
Submitted by Josephine (user info) at 2005-04-20 16:57:07 EDT (#)
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Your writing is so good it make me want to marry you, and that is a rare thing indeed.
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2005-04-20 16:53:35 EDT (#)
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Jesus, people should start giving you money to write. Not me of course, I mean, I fucking work my ass off to make enough for my drugs and I try to contribute to the site. Maybe we could make Habeeb give you a check every month or some canned goods. You deserve it.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-04-20 16:48:16 EDT (#)
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Kre8ix,
Go for it bro.
Make like this is a Pandemic thing and add to it. I have no problems with you taking this over or adding to it.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-04-20 16:47:20 EDT (#)
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oh my!!
i bet that would make life a little more interesting, eh?
Submitted by wookie (user info) at 2005-04-20 16:38:30 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Kre8rix (user info) at 2005-04-20 16:36:03 EDT (#)
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Damn dude,
I've been brainstorming an apocolyptic/random carnage story for a couple days now and look what you do.
Fuck
Now I have to come up with some other form of carnage.
oh yeah...well done.
Submitted by canadia (user info) at 2005-04-20 16:33:34 EDT (#)
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Are you trying to tell us something? Did you have a vision?
Fuck this, I'm staying home on Friday....
Submitted by c1ndy (user info) at 2005-04-20 16:31:54 EDT (#)
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cool
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-04-20 16:26:52 EDT (#)
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I might continue this after Necro is done.