A Story (493 hits)
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Submitted by MyIdiom (View user info) at 2005-05-15 15:49:37 EDT
Waiting alone in her car, she fiddles with the radio dial searching for something to calm her thoughts. All the songs seem so rough and hard. Frustrated, she turns it off.
Glancing into the rearview mirror she notices something through the foggy window. Headlights are slowly drawing near... the sound of splashing puddles reverberate in the humid, night air as tires move along the road.
A quick flash of excitement fills her chest and a childish nervousness overcomes her. She tries to study the approaching vehicle without making any sudden, obvious movements.
It's him.
She lowers her passenger side window as the approaching car slows to a stop. Waiting for what seems an eternity, his tinted window begins a labored descent.
"Hey gorgeous", he says.
She blushes, as she's never quite gotten used to his flattery while sober. "Hey Carmine, how've you been"
"I've been missin' you, El. Follow me, it's just a few miles away"
Carmine had a way of looking into El that fascinated her. His deep brown eyes seemed to touch her somehow, somewhere inside. She was incredibly attracted to his strong, solid physique, which made her feel very feminine when she was with him.
El had a girlish crush on Carmine from the moment she first saw him and he's always suspected it. He has never taken advantage of her though, the way he often did with other women. He's only known one good, pure person in his life, and she was it. He respected her for that, and as much as he wanted her, he knew he'd taint her.
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El follows Carmine through the winding streets of Huntel, her hometown. She runs her fingers through her long dirty blonde hair and as she begins to daydream about the night ahead of her.
As they make their way into the affluent part of a neighboring town, El looks around at the stunning houses that line the well-paved suburban streets. Exquisite chandeliers glitter through enormous windows and elaborate landscapes give the homes an immaculate sense of superiority.
Carmine turns onto Clearview Street and El follows him into a spacious driveway.
El adjusts her shirt, which is showing a bit too much skin for her liking, and regrets having worn it. Stepping out of her car, she sees Carmine walking toward her.
"Very nice" she remarks about his new house, trying not to look too impressed.
"Thanks baby" he says as he leans down and kisses her on the forehead.
They begin to walk together toward the door and El grabs a hold of his arm. She loves the feeling of his powerful biceps and pulls her body close to his. Feeling a bit embarrassed, El releases her hold as soon as they enter the house.
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To be continued, maybe.
User Reviews
Submitted by Jungle_Jimanee (user info) at 2005-05-25 06:03:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Sounds like fun.
Submitted by baking_Lady (user info) at 2005-05-25 05:40:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Do not continue.
Submitted by metricgiraffe (user info) at 2005-05-15 21:52:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
It sounds like the beginning of a Harlequin Romance novel. But godamnit if I don't want more!
Submitted by ICO (user info) at 2005-05-15 19:25:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
This isn't so much of a story as it is the beginning of one. Either way, don't wait for our approval; plonk it out.
Submitted by oddzandendz (user info) at 2005-05-15 18:04:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
What the hell kind of name is El? or is it EI?
This story sucks because it's written the same way all wanna be but sucky authors write stories....
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2005-05-15 16:15:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
what kind of story?
...a cinderella story
...a neverending story
...a story of us
...a toy story
...a west side story
...a christmas story
...a dodgeball: true underdog story
...an L.A. story
...a dragon: the bruce lee story.
what?