Carter the Bad Ass, Part 1 -- Money, Guns and Sex (820 hits)
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Submitted by Wardy (View user info) at 2005-05-20 05:49:36 EDT
The sound of the bullet clicking into the clip resonated throughout the empty room. A single light hanging from a rusted metal wire dangled from the ceiling, swaying in a non-existent breeze. The man's chubby fingers, clammy with sweat, fumbled the small bullets as he pressed one after another into the 9 mm Berretta.
A rusted pipe in the corner of the room had been dripping a liquid for hours now. The methodical, almost rhythmic drops of fluid hit the floor with a tiny kerplunk! And then it was silence. Except for the clicking of the bullets. When he had finished with the last bullet, he pulled himself to his feet and walked over to the small puddle in the corner.
He could barely see himself in the reflection of the murky fluid, if it was water, the musty floor and the dark conditions didn't give him much of a mirror. He let out a deep sigh, allowing his gut to hang out. He wasn't a fat man, no. But he wasn't the same man he'd been twenty years ago either. He slid the gun in the back of his pants between his belt and his pants, and made his way towards the door. They'd be expecting him. He had to hurry.
The doors swung open, and at first no one even noticed him. The people behind the counter continued working. Others patiently waited in line. The guard was asleep in the chair. Carter quickly pulled the gun from the guard's holster and pulled his own from behind his back.
"Carter! What're you doing—" the teller cried out. The shock wave of the first few bullets shook the building. Mary had never heard a gun before, and immediately her ears rang in excruciating pain as she dropped to the ground, covering her head.
Carter hopped up onto the counter, pointing the guns around the room. "Everyone shut the fuck up!" the room quickly fell silent under his command, and he put one of the guns back behind his back again. He smoothed his dark brown hair with his free hand and smiled. "Now listen up, if we all fucking cooperate, everyone makes it out of here alive."
Mary could hear the familiar voice above her, his heavy boots thundering the counter just inches from her head. "Now where is my favorite teller?"
The young woman clenched her eyes shut, hoping. Wishing. "Mary? Oh Mary had a little lamb—" The voice trailed smoothly throughout the bank as the boots began to dance lightly on the counter. Mary pulled her suit coat down as she stood up.
"I'm right here Carter. What—" She started, but found a rather large lump form in her voice when he turned and pointed the gun in her face.
"Empty the cash drawers. But not the one with the alarm. You and I both know which one it is." Carter smiled, his small white teeth shining between his thin lips. Cocking his head sideways, he jumped down off the counter next to the woman.
"Why are you doing this? I thought we - " Mary pulled the bills quickly from the drawers and set them in the bag next to her.
"Oh honey, you're not mad are you? I'll be sure to call" Carter smiled again and nodded to the crowd.
"You're a real prick you know that?"
"Oh baby, I'm sorry. But you... wait... you weren't actually thinking we had..." Carter paused, biting his lip. "I thought you knew it was a fling. You know, informational sort of thing. I needed you, you needed to fill your gulley hole."
Mary stopped.
"I'm sorry, that was vulgar, wasn't it." Carter coughed a small laugh and then looked at his watch. "But honey, I don't mean to rush you - uh... could you move it along, I know we're expecting company soon." Carter looked out the window across the bank and saw the squad car squeal to a stop just outside.
"You won't get out of here."
Carter pulled the bag over his shoulder and pulled the other gun out from behind his back. "Watch me." He smiled and kissed the woman on the cheek. He hopped up onto the counter in a single leap and turned to the crowd. "Fucking hell, one of you fuckers must've somehow tripped the damn alarm." Carter threw his arms in the air, two bullets exploding from the barrels of the guns. "Well fucking shit, looks like we've got a game now!"
He hopped from the ledge and took one look back at Mary, and blew the blonde haired woman a kiss.
Then, turning back to the entrance, he kicked the swinging doors open and stepped into the bright sunlight.
"Fuck!....."
User Reviews
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2006-06-20 13:14:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
douche bag.
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2006-04-20 02:02:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by doctorj24 (user info) at 2005-06-30 17:23:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'll help ya out
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2005-06-01 23:51:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
you ruined a perfect rating for that? way to go captain dipshit
Submitted by awj002 (user info) at 2005-06-01 20:41:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
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Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-05-25 04:20:55 (#)
Ranking: 2
I am having a hard time visualizing a dude clicking bullets directly into a semi-automatic pistol.
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Yup... last i checked, a 9mm beretta is NOT: a revolver, a shotgun, or a bolt-action rifle. also some oddly/poorly-written lines, such as the one where he slides the gun into the back of his pants. but i'll continue reading
Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2005-06-01 16:27:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by jack11058 (user info) at 2005-05-26 13:15:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
good enough to kill some slow time at work with.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-05-25 04:20:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I am having a hard time visualizing a dude clicking bullets directly into a semi-automatic pistol.
Submitted by toucan_sam (user info) at 2005-05-20 20:12:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
carter rules.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2005-05-20 15:28:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
GET CARTER
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2005-05-20 15:27:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2005-05-20 10:55:47 (#)
Ranking: 2
This is wonderful...I wonder why no one's reading it though?
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yeah, not a lot of people read and rate my stuff... i have a few people that do consistently, and i'm happy with that...
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2005-05-20 13:41:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
me lieky, more please?
Submitted by southernmiss (user info) at 2005-05-20 11:02:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good for me!
Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2005-05-20 10:55:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is wonderful...I wonder why no one's reading it though?
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-05-20 09:51:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
So far so good.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2005-05-20 06:43:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
he sounds cool as hell..