Curling Wisps of Starlit Smoke (676 hits)
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Submitted by prophet (View user info) at 2005-06-01 01:30:19 EDT
This little slice of my enigmatic mind goes hand in hand with the post inspired by last night's midnight stroll (found at http://www.ubersite.com/m/67401).
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The midnight streets are mine alone traversed on soft soled shoe,
To step on gritty pavement and breathe in sweet life anew.
As chipper cries of crickets and the rare-heard song of bird
Caress one's observations of the many souls unstirred,
This occurance of reflection is a moment oft embraced
So in the mind's soliloquy just order is replaced.
Perhaps a thought of torment has deprived one of his peace;
From equanimous complacence one's quintessence is released.
Yet apart from rhyme or reason, the experience is certain
The encumbrance of humanity oft weighs upon a person.
Though to fathom it is nature and through nature it is fathomed
Every man's repressed solicitude just serves to forge his chasm.
It is innate independence which all creatures now adopt
For in trusting other creatures, one entreats the other's lot.
But to think that comprehension of enlightenment is found
Through deprivation of affection is a principle unsound!
Still, reliance on the foreign and all precepts learned apart
From man's own monologue familiar can be vexing to impart.
So forever on traverse I through each lonely midnight street
In hopes that on a blesséd day a kindred soul I meet.
I consider it not folly that perhaps amongst the years
I should think and smoke while walking and find she who soothes my fears.
This I ask you, sweet Athena, who would muse a song in me
Simply look for burning ember in the night: it burns with me.
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Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2005-06-22 18:24:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
counter deuce against ProgramGeek
Submitted by ProgramGeek (user info) at 2005-06-22 14:16:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Your fucking terrible. Let me help you lower your score down.
Submitted by Alter (user info) at 2005-06-18 18:09:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2005-06-02 08:50:03 EDT (#)
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Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-06-02 01:50:13 (#)
Ranking: 2
I wonder why Adam is making such a big deal of it. Is spirituality such a bad thing in this society that we must stamp it out?
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Since the dawn of time, man has feared and reproached that which he does not understand.
It is but human nature.
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Submitted by Deidra (user info) at 2005-06-01 13:36:42 (#)
Ranking: -1
I dunno why.. but it seems like you tried a bit too hard and lost all meaning.
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Duly noted. I will be certain to put in less effort next time, so that my writing can gain deeper meaning.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-06-02 01:50:13 EDT (#)
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I wonder why Adam is making such a big deal of it. Is spirituality such a bad thing in this society that we must stamp it out?
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2005-06-02 01:24:34 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2005-06-01 15:51:34 (#)
Ranking: 0
Being intelligent and enlightened is different from twisting the words of others to validate your superiority complex.
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That coming from someone who has a computer modeled avatar of themselves is pretty ironic.
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Explain to me how placing my picture underneath my posts, both of which represent an artistic ability I choose to share with others, is ironic. Honestly, I would love to see a rationalization for your blatantly offensive comments.
Keeping in mind that irony is by definition the use of words expressing something other than their literal intention.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-06-02 00:38:05 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2005-06-01 15:51:34 EDT (#)
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Being intelligent and enlightened is different from twisting the words of others to validate your superiority complex.
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That coming from someone who has a computer modeled avatar of themselves is pretty ironic.
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2005-06-01 15:07:34 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2005-06-01 13:43:32 (#)
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So you say you're a reincarnation of a close follower of the one and only Jesus, because you can feel it and someone who claims to have psychic powers confirmed it, and you compare that to scientifically verifiable situations?
I'll have you know that I'm the reincarnation of the original Adam, and my co-worker confirmed it. He's got his psychic powers degree too! Bow down to me, I'm the cause of all your suffering.
Being intelligent and enlightened is different from pretending.
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Strange, I don't recall claiming that I am of the belief to have indeed followed Jesus in his time... rather, I seem to remember stating that it was the statement of another, and that it required a suspension of my disbelief.
Being intelligent and enlightened is different from twisting the words of others to validate your superiority complex.
Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2005-06-01 13:43:32 EDT (#)
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Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2005-06-01 13:18:52 (#)
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Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2005-06-01 09:49:14 (#)
Ranking: -2
The poem was meh, but well written. This -2 is because of your reply below. Get help, you're delusional.
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Yes, I'm sure you're right. Beliefs that step outside of the mundane and require an open mind are certainly delusional.
Just as when one hundred years ago, time was inflexible... before Albert Einstein demonstrated that principle's fallibility.
There was a time when the premise of a radio would be considered delusional.
A time when the world was thought to be flat.
A time when the sun was pulled across the sky by a chariot.
But surely you're right, set in your own arrogant presumption that you understand all there is to understand in the world.
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So you say you're a reincarnation of a close follower of the one and only Jesus, because you can feel it and someone who claims to have psychic powers confirmed it, and you compare that to scientifically verifiable situations?
I'll have you know that I'm the reincarnation of the original Adam, and my co-worker confirmed it. He's got his psychic powers degree too! Bow down to me, I'm the cause of all your suffering.
Being intelligent and enlightened is different from pretending.
Submitted by Deidra (user info) at 2005-06-01 13:36:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
I dunno why.. but it seems like you tried a bit too hard and lost all meaning.
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2005-06-01 13:18:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
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Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2005-06-01 09:49:14 (#)
Ranking: -2
The poem was meh, but well written. This -2 is because of your reply below. Get help, you're delusional.
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Yes, I'm sure you're right. Beliefs that step outside of the mundane and require an open mind are certainly delusional.
Just as when one hundred years ago, time was inflexible... before Albert Einstein demonstrated that principle's fallibility.
There was a time when the premise of a radio would be considered delusional.
A time when the world was thought to be flat.
A time when the sun was pulled across the sky by a chariot.
But surely you're right, set in your own arrogant presumption that you understand all there is to understand in the world.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2005-06-01 11:05:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I enjoy this poetic style. I call it "carried away by your own vocabulary." What the fuck was this: "So forever on traverse I through each lonely midnight street"?
Same meter: "So forever onward, travelling each lonely midnight street" "So forever on I travel through each lonely midnight street" "And forever, and forever, through each lonely midnight street" "And the streets go forever and that's where they take my feet" and so on.
Complex is not always good; sometimes it's just very irritating. And somebody with a vocabulary like yours should concentrate on the artistry of words, on what can be done with them. I'd like to see you play around with cadence and repetition.
Submitted by Adamdidit2u (user info) at 2005-06-01 09:49:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
The poem was meh, but well written. This -2 is because of your reply below. Get help, you're delusional.
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2005-06-01 08:20:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Oh, FOR FUCK'S SAKE!
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2005-06-01 04:38:39 EDT (#)
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Submitted by tinactin (user info) at 2005-06-01 03:50:08 (#)
Ranking: 2
A good poem, nearly obstructed by the incredibly gay symbol at the end. Seriously, that thing is painful to look at.
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It's my FACE. I use it to kiss WOMEN.
Seriously, ask TigerLilly after we make out this weekend.
*crosses fingers*
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Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2005-06-01 03:44:00 (#)
Ranking: 2
Not meaning to get personal but are you 'of the craft?'
Or perhaps an old soul?
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Rarely do I hear it spoken of as such.
Though I've not recounted the tale to more than a few of my closest and most trusted brothers (some in flesh, others in spirit), perhaps I will come to tell my friends here of my encounters with the prophet Sue.
A simple woman in simple garb, with simple beliefs and no desire to exploit what can only be explained as a phenomena not explained by any conventional science, Sue has the gift of second sight. She can look into your past, your future or even your mind.
Of course, she's not infallible... yet the things she has spoken of in our short time together have both shocked and amazed me, as well as all others I know of that have been "read" by her.
Though I do not expect others to make the same leap of faith that I do after witnessing her miraculous display of ability, she spoke to me things that even now require suspension of my disbelief. Note that her ability is no parlour trick- I've seen that douche Jon Edwards perform live, and what he does is an act and a farce. Her nature, methodology and results are something altogether different.
For what it is worth, she believes that I once studied under Jesu ben Pantera in the flesh, millenia ago. As a Buddhist and student of world religion, I am willing to... consider such a thing possible, if not embrace it wholeheartedly. She spoke of a close kinship with the Roman messiah. Though she did not proclaim me one of the "twelve apostles" (nor would I easily accept such an unlikely claim), she does believe that I was one of his many thousand disciples during his lifetime.
Pretty heavy, I know. To answer your question, as a Buddhist I do indeed believe I possess a reincarnated soul. I also believe that the privilege of retaining the majority of one's essence upon departing the flesh is largely dependant upon the devotion and study of the person in life. Those who lead lives without taking the time for meditation, mental discipline and a connection with divinity will ultimately dissipate into the grass, the beasts, the fish and trees- and even into the very earth and waters themselves.
Submitted by tinactin (user info) at 2005-06-01 03:50:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
A good poem, nearly obstructed by the incredibly gay symbol at the end. Seriously, that thing is painful to look at.
Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2005-06-01 03:44:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Not meaning to get personal but are you 'of the craft?'
Or perhaps an old soul?
Submitted by SilvrWolf (user info) at 2005-06-01 03:29:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This seemed to flow very naturally as I read it. I liked it.
I already knew about the Colin thing, but your offer of reparations for the Phone Booth debacle is both honorable and fair. I hear that's the only movie they let the prisoners at Guantanamo Bay watch. Those poor, poor, guilty-terrorist-bastards' souls.
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2005-06-01 03:09:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
On a side note, Keifer Sutherland also offers his condolences.
Mail all requests for rebate to:
Phone Booth Reparations Fund
C/O The Red Cross
17 Schwarzenegger Blvd, Suite C
Beverly Hills, CA 90210
Submitted by NetProphet (user info) at 2005-06-01 03:05:43 EDT (#)
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I always knew one day some jerk would reveal my terrible secret to the world...
I just hoped, somehow, that it wouldn't be so soon.
Exhibit A: http://uberprophet.info/pics/colin.jpg
Well, now that it's out there- I sincerely apologize to every person reading this for the movie "Phone Booth", and agree to repay anyone for the full price of theater admission in their area upon receiving written request.
Seriously, I'm so very sorry.
Submitted by stevie_says (user info) at 2005-06-01 02:29:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
That guy looks like Colin Farrell. Everytime I see that picture, I think about Colin Farrell...
I liked this. Reminded me of...stuff and junk...and Colin Farrell.