Purely Business (Part 4) (740 hits)
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Submitted by spedmonkey <spedmonkey.at.gmail.com> (View user info) at 2005-06-22 15:08:13 EDT
Part 1: http://www.ubersite.com/m/68467
Part 2: http://www.ubersite.com/m/68945
Part 3: http://www.ubersite.com/m/69010
Life as a lieutenant was pretty damn good, thought George Frankell as he surveyed his office from his plush new leather chair. He had his own squad now, his own jurisdiction, and a hell of a good life. He smiled again, then looked down at his desk. Shit. Paperwork, and mountains of it. The downside to life as a lieutenant. Shaking his head, he grabbed a pen and the first sheet and got to work.
About a fifth of the way through the stack, a young officer knocked on the open door. "Yeah?" asked Frankell without looking up.
"Sir, you have a call."
Frankell leaned back in his chair. "Well? Who is it?"
"He didn't say, sir."
"OK, I'll take it, I guess."
The officer nodded. As he left the room, Frankell punched the button for the correct line and picked up the phone. "Lieutenant George Frankell," he said.
"Mr. Frankell," said the caller. "I think I got something you might be interested in."
"What? Who is this?"
"Is that really important?"
Frankell stood, walked to the door, and closed it. "OK, you said you had something for me. What?"
"Only some info."
"What do you want for it?"
"It's free. This time, at least. Bring your squad to warehouse 63 at the lake docks in thirty minutes. There'll be something there you might find interesting."
"What?" asked Frankell. But the caller hung up, and Frankell slammed the phone down in frustration. Then he sat back and thought for a bit.
"Shit," he said out loud. He slumped in his chair and rubber his temples. "Fuck it. Let's do it."
He got up and opened the door. "Sergeant, round up the squad," he said. "We're going to go check something out."
Two police vans pulled up to warehouse 63, and Frankell's squad jumped out and fanned across the area. Frankell came out last. Like his troopers, he was in full protective regalia. He watched as troopers swarmed to the two entrances, then stormed into the building.
After several minutes, his sergeant came out. "The building is clear, sir," he said. "It's completely empty."
"Toss everything in the building. There's got to be something in there."
"Yes sir."
Frankell sighed and pulled out a cigarette as the sergeant went back to the building. He lit it and took a deep puff. Exhaling, he turned and walked out onto the dock into the lake. He flicked the cigarette into the water and turned to walk back to the vans.
Then something caught his eye and he stopped. "What the hell?" he asked out loud. He moved to the edge of the dock and leaned over to look. His eyes went wide. Floating in the water under the dock were three bodies, all dressed in what used to be expensive suits. One was floating face-up, and on his face was an expression of extreme discomfort. Frankell couldn't really blame him. He straightened up and walked back to the warehouse.
"Sergeant? Call the men back to vans. And call the homicide division, too."
Valinas sat in his living room across from Mephisto and Alvarez. "So those bodies got dumped, right?"
"Yeah," said Alvarez. "That part of the plan ain't fun."
"It's necessary, though," said Mephisto. "Now that we've dealt with those three, we can get on with everything else." He turned to Alvarez. "Tony, you're gonna call Frankell back tomorrow to arrange a meeting."
"Won't he recognize my voice?"
"Yeah," said Valinas. "He's supposed to."
Mephisto nodded. "He's gotta know that we're serious here. He knows we dropped the bodies there to get his attention. I know how he deals, remember? He's not going to waste his time with little groups."
He rose from the chair and started pacing in front of Valinas' coffee table. "Yeah, I think three bodies should do the trick as an attention-grabber."
Alvarez raised an eyebrow. "You say so, 'mano," he said dubiously.
"Listen to the man," Valinas cut in sharply.
"OK, OK. Jesus."
"Can we rehearse what you're going to say tomorrow on the phone?" asked Mephisto.
"Guess we should, huh."
"Right," said Mephisto, rubbing his hands together. "Then let's get started."
User Reviews
Submitted by minimumdino (user info) at 2006-01-11 14:01:44 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
i like to take my business in the woods
Submitted by minimumdino (user info) at 2006-01-10 18:42:38 EST (#)
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Submitted by stevie_says (user info) at 2005-07-27 01:06:48 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Eternal_Dragon (user info) at 2005-07-27 00:47:35 EDT (#)
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Submitted by DaBaddestHic (user info) at 2005-06-23 08:51:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You've got a good series going here. A bit more dialogue than I'm used to reading (lots of Stephen King), but that's often good for Ubersite. Looking foward to seeing what happens next.
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2005-06-22 17:58:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
you got moxie, kid.
Submitted by sg11588 (user info) at 2005-06-22 17:41:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
liek omg wow i cna't wait til the next installment like wow omg i can't evne believe wut just hapened like they were in the water but tehn dey were dead and I wasl ike OMG WOW i can't believe that just happened like omg.
Submitted by DonkeyOnTheEdge (user info) at 2005-06-22 17:21:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by ProgramGeek (user info) at 2005-06-22 16:57:59 (#)
Ranking: 2
Keep your writing shorter.
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This was mostly dialogue. What was long about it?
Submitted by ProgramGeek (user info) at 2005-06-22 16:57:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Keep your writing shorter.
http://www.ubersite.com/m/69084
Submitted by doctorj24 (user info) at 2005-06-22 16:34:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good as always.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-06-22 16:10:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Bart: Wow, Dad, you took a baptismal for me. How do you feel?
Homer: Oh, Bartholomew, I feel like St. Augustine of Hippo after his
conversion by Ambrose of Milan.
-- Homer Simpson
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Submitted by mybrainisawaffle (user info) at 2005-06-22 16:08:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
A plus, keep it up.