The Wrong Choice. (1293 hits)
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Submitted by Soley (View user info) at 2005-06-27 07:38:31 EDT
The silence becomes a low gargling sound. I'd laugh if I could. It wouldn't be a laugh though, probably more of a snort. The mild breeze that's blowing has dried out my mouth and nostrils. I'm gagging on the foul taste drying in my mouth.
Pure white. The sky is cloudless this morning. Everything is still, even my stare. For a second it was as if time had stopped. I really wish it had. I should be numb but I'm not. For the moment, my existence is excruciating. Life and all it means to me is not worth a shit. Pure wastage
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My mind diverts back to the gossips at work yesterday. The multiple conversations being held were all about one of my colleagues, Maxine.
Maxine took the afternoon off work to visit the abortion clinic. She terminated the13 week pregnancy that neither her Spanish lover nor her Caucasian husband knew anything of. The gossips; they revel in picking at other people. Anything to distract their closed minds from the ugly foulness they harvest. What pathetic existences they suffer. I know for certain they'll fabricate stories about me when I don't show for our 8 o'clock start today. Force of habit. I'd love to see their jowls drop from shock when they're informed why I'm not there. Fake tears always follow. Again, force of habit.
I'm trying to think of the distinctive smell that's hitting the back of my throat right now...it' pollution... that's it. It's an acquired taste.
A woman's scream resounds in my ears and It doesn't hurt my head. Now I'm numb, and my mind continues to wander. I turn my head slightly and I can see big boxes next to sheets of a reflective material, they're stacked up quite high. I can't remember the name for this thing. I feel confused. As I'm watching the reflection of birds flying, my mind once again diverts back and forth about the name of this thing that my stare is fixed on... where I work, what I work as, who I am.
Hurried footsteps come closer and surround me. I hear a crowd of strange voices. Someone holds my hand. I hear someone shout at someone else "Don't touch his brain!". The muffled cries get fainter and fainter. Realisation hit's me hard and regret anchors deep in my gut.
Minutes ago I was stood on the balcony contemplating what would happen after I'd jumped.
Drifting in and out of consciousness I'm almost at my planned destination...
Nowhere.
User Reviews
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2005-07-19 14:57:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I spank to Soley.
Submitted by mrwolf (user info) at 2005-07-12 09:38:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2005-06-30 06:35:37 (#)
Ranking: 2
Poor old pock.
He gets the odd sympathy shag then they never want to talk to him again, pity I hear he has got a 'great personality'.
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Great personality!!!! Rubbish it's my mammoth tits they're after!
Wicked post soley.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2005-06-30 06:35:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Poor old pock.
He gets the odd sympathy shag then they never want to talk to him again, pity I hear he has got a 'great personality'.
Submitted by Soley_Trinity (user info) at 2005-06-30 06:17:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Act-u-ally, he wanted to ask for advice about how best to finish with Pock. Y'see, Spam continues to run around his mind - which results in wood.
My advice: Menage et trois. Everybody's happy!
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2005-06-30 06:00:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Dervel (user info) at 2005-06-27 09:40:41 (#)
Ranking: 2
Dee, you on email?
Can I ask something? Need advice. """
Uh oh.
Looks like ol' pointy head has got his wing-wang stuck in the combine harvester again.
Submitted by Soley_Trinity (user info) at 2005-06-30 05:07:48 EDT (#)
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Submitted by prettygirl (user info) at 2005-06-30 04:52:15 (#)
Ranking: 1
Pretty good though a little disjointed.
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It was meant to be.
Submitted by prettygirl (user info) at 2005-06-30 04:52:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Pretty good though a little disjointed.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-06-27 22:42:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by DaBaddestHic (user info) at 2005-06-27 15:45:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Very nice, didn't expect the ending.
Submitted by LiquidPaper (user info) at 2005-06-27 15:32:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Worth the read.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-06-27 15:31:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Minutes ago I was stood on the balcony contemplating what would happen after I'd jumped.
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you would land in the balcony on the floor below.
oh. You mean the other way.
...
Submitted by jumpinjellyfish (user info) at 2005-06-27 15:25:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Very well written.
Submitted by Davros (user info) at 2005-06-27 15:13:41 EDT (#)
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Yes Comment.
-Dave
Submitted by UberWeiss (user info) at 2005-06-27 12:41:57 EDT (#)
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UW
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2005-06-27 12:11:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I believe the term is dayum...
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-06-27 12:04:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I love your writing.
Submitted by Deidra (user info) at 2005-06-27 11:58:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Beautifully depressing.
Submitted by d_prime (user info) at 2005-06-27 11:51:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+1 for what I would've given it.
+1 for giving Schlony a blow job for a +2, considering your dedication in the interest of getting good ratings.
Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2005-06-27 11:39:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
cool
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2005-06-27 10:50:24 EDT (#)
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This could be construed as "insensitive", but what I'm feeling right now is "boinnnnnnggggggg".
Submitted by c1ndy (user info) at 2005-06-27 10:04:59 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2005-06-27 10:03:50 EDT (#)
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You made me see this.
That's a good thing.
Nice job.
Submitted by Dervel (user info) at 2005-06-27 09:51:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Sent. Thanks!
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-06-27 09:45:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked it.
Submitted by Soley_Trinity (user info) at 2005-06-27 09:41:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Mail me!
Submitted by Dervel (user info) at 2005-06-27 09:40:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Dee, you on email?
Can I ask something? Need advice.
Submitted by Spam (user info) at 2005-06-27 09:38:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Get off the floor and stop being a pussy.
Submitted by Stin (user info) at 2005-06-27 09:37:48 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Nefarious (user info) at 2005-06-27 09:27:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Well constructed, but what I found particularly interesting was the ending. Nowhere as a planned destination, nowhere as a metaphor for death. It's dark, but then life isn't all sugar plums and gumdrops. Just this afternoon I was walking across a bridge, and wondered what I would feel if my body
was shifted 5 metres to the right, 100 metres in the air. How it would feel to be suspended in the air for one fleeting second, instantly transforming from a man with an uncertain future to a man in an unnatural situation, with a future lifespan measured in seconds. With time being a relative concepts, for some observers, 5 seconds could last longer than 80 years.
Submitted by FilthyAssistant (user info) at 2005-06-27 08:47:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Heh, same title as my first ever uber post. We should have a mini ubermadness! Loser gets a round in. http://www.ubersite.com/m/32932
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2005-06-27 08:42:37 EDT (#)
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I wouldn't have been able to write this without using the word splat.
Submitted by thorpe (user info) at 2005-06-27 08:24:59 EDT (#)
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I didn't read this, but I dig that balcony arrangement.
Submitted by missflibble (user info) at 2005-06-27 08:17:02 EDT (#)
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erm....
u ok?
Submitted by Soley_Trinity (user info) at 2005-06-27 08:15:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Derkel, merlina, I'm tip-top thanks.
Shlongy, I'd eat you for breakfast.
Apollo, that worked out well for you.
no, really, I'm a practising cannibal.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2005-06-27 08:08:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is pretty depressing but since I want to bend you over, +2.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2005-06-27 08:06:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Well written.
you okay there Soley, yeah?
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2005-06-27 07:55:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I killed myself once.
It didn't half sting.
Submitted by Dervel (user info) at 2005-06-27 07:47:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Blink. Blink.
Ummmm.
You okay chum?