Good Samaritan (847 hits)
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Submitted by miss_tila (View user info) at 2005-07-28 13:43:26 EDT
This is my first submission. I'm not the greatest writer and my spelling is horrible, so bare with me. It was a Sat night, about 2 am. I was going to walk to the all night conveinience store around the corner. I didn't think anyone else would be out, considering the time, so I stayed in my pajamas. I walk out of the front door of my building, a crappy building in the PJ's were there are always getto problems blowing up in the street. Baby mama's yelling obsenities, children playing in the street with no guidance or shoes, and stereos with the bass turned all the way up. Oh yeh, real getto. Anyway, we walk out the front door and I hear a blood curdleing scream.... from a man. He's screaming "this man is dead, oh my god". At first glance, with this man in the middle of the street, I though it was a hit and run. I swear I don't remeber running over. I was barefoot didn't feel the pain of the gravel and rocks under my little feet as I made the 50 yard dash over to this guy. Instantly I realized that this man face was virtually caved in. He wasn't even trying to breath and if he was there was no way he could through all the blood. I look up to see if I can get some answers as to what had happened. There standing infront of me was a gang of angry, drunk, getto men. They had done this to him. His face half gone. I steadied his neck, so as not cause any further trauma, like snapping it. Realizing that he was exfixiating on his own blood, I tipped him on his side.I've never seen anything like it. There was so much blood and it gushed from his mouth. Suddenly he gives a great gasp and he's there with me. I coulnd't beleive it. Not thinking at all aboout the aids epidemic or anything else, I reached in his mouth and had to pull pieces of his jaw and his teeth out, so he didn't chocke again.
Meanwhile, the demons that did this to him started discussing finishing him off and how he had it coming. Now, i'm no saint, no of us are, but if you could see the way I do, this man face - terrified and barley concous. He could have been my brother, neighbor, or friend. Without thought I started screaming. Not a girl scream, an I will fucking kill you if you come one step closer to me or this man. I said " Fuck you..you did what you wanted to do, now go." they walked away uneffected by the scene. Suddenly there we are. Him, God and me. He had a thready heart beat and I told him he was doing great. I could feel I was losing him. He looked up at me with a desperate, I know I'm dying look on his face. I made sure to promise him that I was there looking out for him. It made him calm, But didn't help me much. I don't think I beleived myself. I havn't prayed since I was a young, neive girl. When something like this hapoens you wouldn't beleive how quickly you look to "God" even if you don't think he's there. When the ambulance came they comended me, not that I was paying attention. I was asking so many question. " Where are you taking him.. can you find his family. I found out later that he survived and the damage was as bad if not worse than it looked.To end this post, I just want to say, since I will never see him again.. that in those moments on that pavement, I made a life time cnnection with him through eyes alone and I will never forget him.
User Reviews
Submitted by The_Yellow_Dart (user info) at 2005-11-28 17:02:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Barnymeinhoff (user info) at 2005-09-16 16:18:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 for the act.
Submitted by Average_Dan (user info) at 2005-08-25 13:03:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Sorry MissTila,
-1 for first post mention,
-1 for quite possibly the worst spelling and gramatical errors I have ever seen,
but +1 for sharing the name of Tila Tequilla, whom I would love to make her my baby mamma.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2005-08-10 09:55:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
It was satire you dumbass, satire! Do you understand? Satire!
Read it again dammit.
Submitted by bush_for_god (user info) at 2005-08-01 01:45:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
You could at least run it through Word.
Submitted by Xcuses (user info) at 2005-07-28 15:52:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Your write DC, she made a phew mastakes
Submitted by DCWoody (user info) at 2005-07-28 15:51:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
What about your instead of you're?
Submitted by Xcuses (user info) at 2005-07-28 15:29:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 15:00:08 (#)
Ranking: 0
Xcuses fuck off. Your funny. Fuck off just the same.
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I said I liked your story. I made fun of your spelling. If that's the worse thing I do, you should be happy. Munkey gave you some good advice. People were civil to you in this post and no need to get all huffy. Just some light fun
and look, no mistakes in spelling when you told me to fuck off
Submitted by nrduncan (user info) at 2005-07-28 15:19:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
It would have been a +2, but you really need to learn how to use paragraphs.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-07-28 15:10:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
don't get so defensive. people were giving you constructive criticism.
or just making smart ass comments. you need to get thicker skin, girl!
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 15:05:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
So this will be the first and last. No big deal. I don't like assholes. I shouldn't call them on by posting. Just keep in mind that if it were you maybe someone would have kept walking. Screw.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-07-28 15:04:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 15:00:08 (#)
Ranking: 0
Xcuses fuck off. Your funny. Fuck off just the same.
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I'm sorry D but...
HAHAHAHAHAHA
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 15:00:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Xcuses fuck off. Your funny. Fuck off just the same.
Submitted by Xcuses (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:55:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:08:49 (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks Tim. I didn't have the spell check. Would you beleive that I won 3 spelling bees as a child.
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really? and the competition were immigrants who just jumped off the boat
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:52:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
This could have been okay if you had written it in some kind of word program and edited it. The spelling was pretty bad, and you really needed to proff read it better. Not bad, really...
Submitted by PokeyPecker (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:50:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is only a +1 story but I can't rate it that because it sure as hell didn't make me smile. So +2 for you.
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:48:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I will do this thing you ask of me Monkey.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:44:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Miss Tila, now you must camwhore so you can be beebed. it is a rite of passage
for posters. it is necessary.
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:37:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
OK, I get it about the spelling. Like I said, I didn't proof and my typing isn't the best. It all just spilt out of me very fast. This wasn't the easiest thing to write about and I've never posted before. My stomach is still turning and my hands are shaking just thinking about it. Again, I wantde to get it off my chest. Now I have. Thanks.
Submitted by TheSpook (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:34:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Well, it's not in Spanish.
Submitted by BuckeyesTHEGAME (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:26:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:08:49 (#)
Ranking: 0
Would you beleive that I won 3 spelling bees as a child.
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Did you get them from the same guy who sold Jack his magic beans?
Submitted by DCWoody (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:12:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Only if they were very small spelling bees
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Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:05:05 (#)
Ranking: 0
I'm at work writing this post, not easy to do. There was alot running through my head as I typed it out. It's not as though I didn't think to myself " they are going to eat me alive." Wich by the way I usually like. No, I just wanted to get this off my chest. By the way, I'm not a schoolgirl, nor a christian.
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+1 for this
the story is quite good but paragraphs would have made a huge difference.
Submitted by potatomanjack (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:11:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
As you said, bad format, but if this is true, then a huge +2
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:09:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Yes monk, but thats at home for you! now shushhhh
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:08:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks Tim. I didn't have the spell check. Would you beleive that I won 3 spelling bees as a child.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:08:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Come on Tila, you know you like to wear the knee socks and skirt with your hair in pigtails...
Submitted by MyNameIsTim (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:06:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
hey stranger.
spell check? smaller paragraphs?
do that and you got yourself a post.
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:05:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I'm at work writing this post, not easy to do. There was alot running through my head as I typed it out. It's not as though I didn't think to myself " they are going to eat me alive." Wich by the way I usually like. No, I just wanted to get this off my chest. By the way, I'm not a schoolgirl, nor a christian.
Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:02:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You gave me the chills.
Work on your spelling and grammar...this story should have received better ratings.
Submitted by TheSunGod (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:00:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
worth reading, not bad for a first post.
what i find helps though is to type first in word or a processor program, then copy and paste to submit it. helps cut down on typos, etc.
welcome! now whatever you do, don't read my last post. it sucked. seriously. now that i've said this you may want to read it out of morbid curiosity, but i guarantee disappointment. if you do read it, use it as an example of what is too crappy to post.
and now i'm rambling.
Submitted by Xcuses (user info) at 2005-07-28 14:00:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
This was a good story and if true, bravo
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:57:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Interesting story, although hard to read through the mistakes.
Submitted by d_prime (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:57:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Listen to totally. There's some good advice there. I warn you not to let any thing said on this site influence the rest of your life in any way. Once somebody did that. They're dead now.
Submitted by Totally_useless (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:55:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Now, Tiger................
If this is one of your homies, why wouldn't you prepare her for the onslaught of negativity she's about to receive? By the first line alone, I can see that it will be brutal. From the abbreviation of 'Saturday', it will be even moreso.
I will give you a +1 for effort and my sincere condolences.
Welcome to Ubersite. Now DUCK!
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:54:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
actually guys this is a true story...
Submitted by RaineLark (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:54:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Submitted by BuckeyesTHEGAME (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:52:59 (#)
Ranking: -1
This is worse than the idea I had for a Jump to Conclusions mat.
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Brilliant!
Submitted by d_prime (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:53:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Above-average first try. A little too Christian/After-school special for me.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:53:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Minus the spelling and grammer errors it was a great story.
Submitted by BuckeyesTHEGAME (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:52:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
This is worse than the idea I had for a Jump to Conclusions mat.
-1 for saying first post, in accordance with the Uber Laws.
Submitted by wookie (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:52:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:51:28 (#)
Ranking: 2
Hi you!
Good post.
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Yeah, if by "good" you mean "almost unreadable."
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-07-28 13:51:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hi you!
Good post.