100 Word Story (504 hits)
Category: Quotes & StoriesRating: 1.3 on 12 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by disAbled (View user info) at 2005-07-29 13:29:34 EDT
The challenge was to write a story in 100 words. This is what I came up with
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"It's not," she murmered, smoke curling over her tongue and through her puckered lips - now wafting to her nostrils for a last kiss before dissolution - "so much quitting...as forsaking a dangerous love. Desire fades, but the taste lingers on your tongue forever."
My eyes, now clouded and reddened by her heady muzzling, stutter eye to eye and find the right phrase woven tightly in the corridors of imitation wood table-top.
"Yes...but the cigarette, at least, is extinguished when you crush it and leave it."
Her laugh forms a broken ring as she pushes back her chair.
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Submitted by PoTtY (user info) at 2005-07-29 18:26:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Harder than it looks...
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2005-07-29 17:28:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Not bad, not bad at all. There were some word choices that I wouldn't have gone with, but it worked out for you.
PS - Razor is a god...
Submitted by ih8u2man (user info) at 2005-07-29 15:42:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
and i fucked up the spelling on desperately
because i'm already smashed. thankyou.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-07-29 15:41:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by ih8u2man (user info) at 2005-07-29 15:41:24 EDT (#)
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Five footsteps closer and the door would be close enough. Faintly, he could see the handle within his reach. As he lifted his arm from his side he suddenly fell to the ground. A bright flash and a wave of warmth came over his face. "I can't see." He thought. "I was so close". The street light illuminated the rain giving life and shimmer to each drop. Deperately rolling over onto his stomach he saw the blood. He placed his hand in a cool puddle that jumped and played in the night. "I'm dying...tonight is the night i die."
that's a 100 words too.
Submitted by Sassmasterr (user info) at 2005-07-29 15:14:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
good story. for some reason, i really like that picture.
Submitted by TheSpook (user info) at 2005-07-29 14:08:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Say what now?
Submitted by Razor (user info) at 2005-07-29 14:07:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
100 words exactly:
With a flourish, Abe whisked the tablecloth away.
A single glass was spinning. Abe held his breath. The glass performed an elegant pirouette around the table before colliding with one of its peers and shattering spectacularly.
Abe's shoulders slumped. His instructor, renowned magician Jean-Pierre Mourelle, frowned.
"Zees ees pathetique!" Mourelle shouted. "You are a 'orrible magician. You cannot master zees simple trick! Your card tricks don't work! Earlier, you failed to make zee rabbit disappear! I wonder if you could make anything disappear!"
As Mourelle stormed off, Abe muttered under his breath "I made your daughter's virginity disappear last night..."
Submitted by disAbled (user info) at 2005-07-29 13:54:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Damn...just noticed I left a word out (makes it only 99 words).
There should be a finally here:
"stutter eye to eye and *finally* find the right phrase"
Submitted by kadunkadunk (user info) at 2005-07-29 13:45:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by w_t_a_y_s_t_r_m (user info) at 2005-07-29 13:44:27 EDT (#)
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I'm assuming the women was naked, otherwise this would be a -1
Submitted by RaineLark (user info) at 2005-07-29 13:41:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Super