{Maybe NSFW text} Finish Him! (2832 hits)
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Submitted by <brdn_nkd.at.yahoo.com> (View user info) at 2005-08-02 12:04:53 EDT
"Hey! Yeah, you. Come here gorgeous. Come on; shake your tail over here. You want to be in movies? I have just the part, who knows it may lead to more, you could be a star."
Why am I doing this? This is stupid, I should go home. My parents would kill me if they knew what I was about to do. God, why am I doing this? Alright, alright, I know I need the money but do I need it this bad? I guess I do.
Three weeks ago I was approached by a sleazy looking guy who asked if I wanted to be in movies. I don't even know why I talked to him, I usually just ignore those guys, but for some reason I took his card when he offered it to me. By the time I got home I realized how foolish of me it was to talk to him and even consider following up on his offer. It was obvious from the card what kind of movies he made and although I'd like to be an actress I do not care to be a porn star. I thought I'd thrown his card away, in fact I'm sure I did, but somehow it turned up yesterday and I'm in a lot of trouble and need the money.
I knocked on the old wooden door. The door was opened by a short, balding man wearing a poorly tailored suit. I looked around the large foyer and was surprised by the level of decadence I saw before me. From the outside the house looked like a ruin, ready to fall down. Inside there was certainly a level of grubbiness but the furniture, the floors, the art, the décor in general was top notch stuff. The doorman, or whatever the hell he was, took my arm and led me up the stairs, a long curving stairway with a mahogany banister, to the second floor which was even more richly decorated than the floor below. He gently guided me to the last bedroom and lightly knocked on the door.
Oh my god, oh my god..... I don't want to do this.... What am I doing? I shouldn't be here..... Get a grip girl and remember you're doing this for Charlie. To save Charlie.
The door was pulled open by Ron looking sleazy as ever as he flashed his nasty, toothy grin at me. Looking over his shoulder I saw two women making out, under what seemed to be three suns worth of light, writhing and moaning they kissed passionately stroking each others hair. I watched, fascinated, as the blonde moved a hand over the redhead's creamy white breast then slowly down her toned belly until her hand rested on the tuft of fiery red hair above her vagina. Her hand lingered there for a moment, one finger curling the fine curly hairs and then she slid it down further and began rhythmically stroking her partner. The red head arched her back thrusting her hips toward the camera revealing all that her partners hand did. Her moaning increased in volume and intensity until she was screaming. And then, "CUT, what are you doing? People don't want to listen to baboon screams! You've got the right feeling but tone down the screeching babe."
Ron sniggered in my ear, "come on sweets, time to get dressed", I turned and saw my wardrobe hanging in the closet, a tiny little nurse's uniform.
What am I doing? I can't believe the whole nurse bit is still going. God those women were hot. I have to admit they were making me hot. No turning back now. Do it for Charlie
I donned the nurse uniform and had to stifle a laugh when I discovered that there were two holes cut out of the breasts, displaying my nipples as some sort of strange accessory. As I finished dressing the two women finished their scene by going down on each other. The director called cut after the women seemed to reach the most amazing orgasms together only to collapse into each others arms. "Good job ladies, Ron will pay you on your way out and I'll let you know if you can be of service again."
Well, this is it I guess.
The director calls me over and as I walk toward him the door opens and a giant of a man walks in. "Hey Steve! Come meet your co-star for today, this is Angela. Angela, this is Steve, also known as "The Great Anaconda"." I extend my hand to one of the most physically beautiful men I've seen in a long time. He bypasses my hand and instead moves in and hugs me. "Nice to meet you Angela, I think we'll have a good time today. Hey Ron, nice work man, she's a hottie!"
The director steers me away from Steve and begins giving me instructions. I try to listen but over the directors shoulder I see Steve changing and almost choke on my tongue when I see the size of his dick. I'd thought I'd been with big men before but it was readily apparent why they called him "The Great Anaconda". I started getting really nervous then and the director finally noticed I wasn't paying attention and followed my gaze. "Ha ha, first time you've seen him? It's pretty fucking amazing isn't it? You know, he had to insure his cock against damages because it's literally worth millions right now. Enjoy."
It went by quickly; we filmed all the story scenes first running through them quickly, before moving on to the scenes we were really being paid for. The first sex scene began with me removing a tattered old bathrobe from Steve's toned body exposing him fully to the camera. The director was very specific about what he wanted from me and I did my best to follow his instructions. I moaned softly as I took his cock in my hand and began stroking up and down it's length, increasing the volume of my moan as I slowly took the head of his dick into my mouth, and continuing with soft grunts of pleasure as I took as much of him into my mouth as I could. I gagged. He was too deep and I gagged. The director immediately called cut and berated me for being so stupid. I kept my mouth closed and focused on regaining my composure. The director asked me to pick up where I left off and so I did, I put as much of that cock as I could into my mouth holding back only enough to ensure I didn't gag again.
"Ok, doll, finish him. And make sure to do it like I told you, we gotta see some run down your chin and all that, got it?" So I finished it. I grabbed his balls in one hand and squeezed, I stroked with the other hand, and sucked with my mouth until a torrent of warm fluid began filling my mouth. I made sure that the director got his dribble and then as soon as he yelled cut I ran and spit into the wastebasket. "Ha ha, what's the matter sweetheart? Don't you know that stuff's good for you?"
I kept quiet, repeating my mantra, "for Charlie, for Charlie". I wiped my face off and went to rinse out my mouth and then the director was yelling for me again.
More instructions, moan, scream, stay out of the way of the camera so we can see everything, and make it count. First I bent over a table; I could feel the warmth of the lights shining on me and swear I could feel the camera zoom in on my vagina. Then Steve was easing himself into me, just the head the first few times and then thrusting forward as much as he could. The director was pissed when I cried out in pain but I couldn't help it, it was just too deep. "Take it or we can get someone else and you won't get paid. Make sure I believe you like it too you stupid cunt." So we started over and I held it in when the pain came again. I let him go as deep as he wanted using the pain to focus on my reason for being here, after all I really didn't come here looking for a good lay, I was here for Charlie. This time the director yelled at Steve, "alright pull out and shoot on her ass." And there it was again, more of Steve's cum now hitting my ass.
One last scene to make my payday, one last scene for Charlie. I got on top of Steve facing the camera. I leaned back making sure not to block the view as his dick slid into my vagina. I moaned, I groaned, and I screamed. I bounced up down feeling my tits bounce in rhythm to our fucking, and then, "Finish him! Take it out and stroke it and finish him! This is the money shot people! Finish Him!" So I did, I did it for Charlie, my little boy.
User Reviews
Submitted by leilani (user info) at 2005-09-15 16:00:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
awesome.
Submitted by Confuzitron (user info) at 2005-08-13 15:56:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Aw, here I was thinking this was gonna be a Mortal Kombat post.
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-08-05 13:49:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hey man, you said my post was good but gave me a '0'
I'm like .07 behind so all points count.
Submitted by Deidra (user info) at 2005-08-02 19:12:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked it.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2005-08-02 17:00:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good as always
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2005-08-02 13:34:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
thanks all. The drive by raters suck everywhere. I don't mind a negative rating if it's warranted or at least supported but that's just bullshit. thanks for reading.
Submitted by d_prime (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:42:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Yeah, especially seeing as ETS and Rad and others will be in the next one. I predict about 30 in DPM2.
However, if enough participants support the decision, the rating can be disregarded for the contesnt. If that -2 causes the loss, I'm going to motion for that.
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:39:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is good and I am impressed.
Maybe by the 3rd or 4th DPRIME-MADNESS we could have enough clought to have reviews such as gabrielPM's removed.
Submitted by d_prime (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:30:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/cgi-bin/message_get.cgi?message=112299869310892016#1497162 <- I'm really pissed off about this.
Submitted by d_prime (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:30:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Haha, I think that any one afraid of NSFW *text* wouldn't dare to go on Ubersite there in the first place. But hey, better safe than sorry.
Good story.
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:28:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
*squick*
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What?
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Submitted by Davros (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:27:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I liked the writing, it conveyed all the intended emotions. But something about is felt wrong.
Also it felt kind of disturbing, which I hope was your intention.
Just my opinion.
-Dave
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:19:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Mike00295 (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:17:19 (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice work.
I am having troubles coming up with anything for this god damn title. Odds are in your favor. Well done
thanks but I'm not so sure. Kind of off to a rough start. I had lots of ideas, all of them far outside of the first thing that comes to mind when I hear this title but I didn't know how to execute them. s'all good I spose.
Submitted by Mike00295 (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:17:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice work.
I am having troubles coming up with anything for this god damn title. Odds are in your favor. Well done.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:16:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Teephphah (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:14:04 (#)
Ranking: 2
You'll probably get slammed for the "external" subject matter, but it was still a pretty good story in spite of all that.
it's probably true. Just wanted to try doing something different. ah well. fuck em.
Submitted by Xcuses (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:15:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I enjoyed this porno...err, story
Submitted by Teephphah (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:14:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You'll probably get slammed for the "external" subject matter, but it was still a pretty good story in spite of all that.
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The schools now, it's all about self-esteem in the schools.
Build the kids' self-esteem, make them feel good about themselves.
If everybody grows up with high self esteem, who's gonna dance in our strip clubs?
What's gonna happen to our porno industry?
These women don't just grow on trees, it takes lots of drunk daddies missing a lot of dance recitals before you decide to blow a goat on the internet for fifty
bucks.
And if that disappears, where does that leave me on a Friday with my new high speed connection?
Submitted by indoninja (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:13:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Text is NSFW when it is this bad.
You are getting a neg one because I think you tried to warn us how bad this was going to be.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:12:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Everything you ever wanted to know about gabrielpm
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Fucking drive by raters. better safe than sorry fucknut, read the shit then rate it.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:11:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Is this true?
Where can I meet ya, honey?
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:10:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by gabrielpm (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:08:52 (#)
Ranking: -2
TEXT IS NEVER "NSFW"!!!
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Homer: Hey, Burns! Eat my shorts!
Burns: Who the Sam Hill was that?
One Fish, Two Fish, Blowfish, Blue Fish
whatever deuschbag.
Submitted by gabrielpm (user info) at 2005-08-02 12:08:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
TEXT IS NEVER "NSFW"!!!