How about you run along now, Freak (1708 hits)
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Submitted by Saxon (View user info) at 2005-08-11 23:18:52 EDT
Priscilla sat and watched the ripples on the surface of the water in the lake, She loved sitting here quietly taking in the view with the wind blowing through her hair. She liked to look at the clouds and imagine what animal it resembled. Other times she would sit on the end of the pier and dangle her feet in the water. This was her favourite place in the world.
Her family moved out here not long after she was born. When her condition was diagnosed, her parents thought it best they raise her in a small town where she wouldn't be taunted as much. She knew she was different; she had been called everything from a retard to special. These things didn't bother her too much, she didn't need the company of others, she had her imagination and her family.
The sun was setting quickly now and the light of day was disappearing fast, she didn't like to worry her mother so she jumped to her feet and headed toward the house. Entering the kitchen she found her grandfather sitting at the table reading the newspaper, she bent as she passed and kissed his forehead. Lately when she kissed her grandfather she felt something ugly in his head. She didn't know what it was but she was sure it was some kind of sickness. What Priscilla was sensing was the fact her grandfather had a cancerous tumour in his brain and unbeknown to the family it was growing fast.
"Wash up for dinner princess" her grandfather, said smiling at his granddaughter before folding his paper to put it away. He loved his granddaughter and even though she had downs syndrome he always felt she was a very special girl. After dinner and her bath Priscilla's mother helped her get into her pyjamas. "I think grand pop is sick" She said as her mother did the buttons up on her top. "Why would you say that?" Her mother said buttoning the last hole. "He has a ugly thing in his head" Priscilla said slipping under the bed covers.
Her mother kissed her cheek and standing upright beside her bed she said, "I think grand pop is fine you go to sleep now". Entering the kitchen she told her father in law what Priscilla had said, to which he replied with a giggle in his voice "She has a wonderful imagination that girl". Beverly Tander had reason to be concerned as her daughter had predicted, "well not so much predicted" she thought to herself "had said things now and then that where tied to something that happened in the past".
Like the time Priscilla told her the neighbours dog had a angry heart, less then a week later it had savaged a little boy as he rode past on a bicycle. Another time Priscilla told her that the man at the store had a dark secret; he was arrested not long after that on rape charges. She decided to tell her husband later and maybe get him to talk his father into seeing a doctor.
The next morning Beverly sent her daughter to the store to get some milk, Priscilla liked this chore as she felt she was doing something important for the family and she walked along singing the jingle to a television advertisement that she liked. "Out of my way retard" an angry female voice exclaimed just as Priscilla was about to enter the door to the store.
Looking up as she halted her step she found Annie Morgan in the doorway with a bag of goods. "Are you deaf as well as stupid," Annie said pushing her way out of the door. Priscilla stepped back to let the rude girl pass as anger flashed through her mind. Annie Morgan made an Ugh sound and dropped the bag she held as her hands went to her head. A sharp pain ran through Annie's head and she thought she was about to faint. The pain passed as quickly as it came so she angrily bent to retrieve her bag and quickly walked away.
Tom Gaskill worked the store with his father on Saturday mornings and he smiled at Priscilla as she walked through the door. "Hi Priscilla" he said in greeting. "Hello Tom" she returned his greeting nervously. Priscilla always felt silly around Tom, sometimes her body tingled and she could never look him in the eye. She knew Tom was very handsome but she couldn't understand why he made her feel the way she did.
"See you on the lake later if your there" Tom called after Priscilla as she left the store with the milk her mother wanted. The idea of seeing Tom later that day appealed to her greatly and she smiled to herself as she hurried home. Later that day she told her mother she was going to take a walk down to the lake and she headed out the door with a spring in her step.
Tom Gaskil had a small sailboat that he used on the lake and Priscilla knew exactly where he put in because she had sat and watched him many times. She loved sitting, watching the boats on the lake on warm days and watching Tom was a bonus. As she made it too the docks she saw Tom tying a rigging, readying his boat for the lake. She walked along the sand not too close to where Tom was, but she hoped close enough for Tom to notice her.
"Hi Priscilla" She heard his voice say, her heart beat faster and she tried not to smile too broadly as she turned and waved at him. "I've got a new sail," he said gesturing for her to join him. Trying to contain her excitement she walked down to where he was, admiring his new sail. "Its very pretty Tom" she said "Dad bought it for me for the work I have been doing at the store" he said beaming.
"If I didn't know any better id say the retard wants to suck Tom's cock" came a voice very close behind Priscilla. Another girl's laughter followed it and Priscilla turned to see Annie Morgan and Sandy Mears walking toward her and Tom. "Annie" Tom protested "Leave her alone she is just looking at my new sail".
Both Annie and Sandy wore short light skirts with bikinis underneath and carried towels. "Well I don't like retards making eyes at my boyfriend" she said to Tom and then turning to face Priscilla she added "Not that I should be worried as no boyfriend of mine would want to fuck a Mongoloid freak".
Priscilla felt her blood start to boil as goose bumps prickled her skin. She tried to remain calm and control what she called her mind fingers but she felt them enter Annie's head. A vision of Annie naked with Tom laying on top of her entered Priscilla's sub conscious and she could feel something moving in and out of Annie's vagina. She realised it was attached to Toms groin.
Not understanding the vision completely Priscilla realised that Annie's focus was having this thing Tom had, inside her vagina.
"So run along freak" Annie went on with putting her hands on her hips.
Priscilla's rage lashed at Annie through her genitals. Annie felt a strong force hit her directly between her legs as Priscilla imagined shoving her fist into Annie's vagina. Annie screamed as she felt something thrust past her cervix to burst her uterus as it moved up through her stomach, through her bowels into her chest cavity.
Priscilla imagined closing her hand around Annie's heart and immediately Annie felt the pressure of something close around that organ.
Tom Gaskil and Sandy Mears looked on with puzzled looks on their faces as Annie stood, her body stiff with her legs parted slightly as she screamed manically. Annie felt impaled by something that entered her body through her vagina that was now passed through her body and gripped her heart.
Annie's screams bought people running from everywhere and Tom and Sandy now stood either side of the screaming girl holding an arm each, trying to calm her down. Priscilla let her mind fingers slip from Annie's head and immediately the suggestion of impalement left Annie's mind letting her body go limp.
A small crowd had assembled around the now incoherent sobbing girl who's body shook and trembled violently. Thin lines of blood ran down the insides of both Annie's thighs as Priscilla turned and walked away from the little gathering and let her mind fingers touch Annie once more and said.
"How about you run along now, Freak"
User Reviews
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-10-19 03:49:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
There are a solid four pages of +2 streaks with 30 or more reviews. That is stupid. I am weeding it all out by giving every one of them a +1; that way posts that have 1.99 with 200+ reviews gets best ever.
Submitted by AllyJeans (user info) at 2005-08-31 21:17:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Great stuff.
Submitted by MANICMOTHER (user info) at 2005-08-31 19:05:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
How the hell did I miss this gem?
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2005-08-25 12:20:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
My god, you rule...
Submitted by c1ndy (user info) at 2005-08-25 04:27:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by knucklesnelson (user info) at 2005-08-24 22:24:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Sweet!
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2005-08-23 21:44:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
wow
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2005-08-16 20:35:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This was good... more adventures of Pricilla, please!
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2005-08-12 15:45:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
yionks!
Submitted by jack11058 (user info) at 2005-08-12 14:40:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
mongoloids...
Submitted by Phinch (user info) at 2005-08-12 14:19:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Yes (user info) at 2005-08-12 13:55:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
wow.
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-08-12 12:54:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Not much on uber caught my attention today. This is great though. Is there going to be a second installment?
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2005-08-12 10:54:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Ok, was she supposed to be Duddits, Jonnie Smith, or Carrie.
haha, i loved it. just follow what caes said about the punctuation and you could publish this.
Submitted by DeathJester (user info) at 2005-08-12 09:27:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Chroniclysm (user info) at 2005-08-12 01:05:41 (#)
Ranking: 2
I do hope to see more tales from the life of Priscilla.
Submitted by Spice (user info) at 2005-08-12 09:25:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Now this is the Saxon I know ... very well done
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2005-08-12 09:10:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Professional_Peon (user info) at 2005-08-12 08:41:27 (#)
Ranking: 2
I hate it when my mindfingers go poking around inside of other girls cha-cha's.
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It's probably a good thing most men don't have mind fingers. I know I'd have a hard time keeping mine to myself.
Submitted by Professional_Peon (user info) at 2005-08-12 08:41:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I hate it when my mindfingers go poking around inside of other girls cha-cha's.
Submitted by Fleadh (user info) at 2005-08-12 07:27:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
SUPERTARD de-de-deeeeennnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
This week supertard scores saxon a +2
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2005-08-12 06:17:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
My heart is actually racing. That was way cool.
I fuckin' love this world with such splendid people in it.
Submitted by Fabit (user info) at 2005-08-12 04:19:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Brilliant, i'm glad your doing some more serious pieces. The talent is obviously there but i think people get bogged down right silly/comical/"i got drunk and.." posts.
Well done for breaking out of that dude,.
Full of aceness.
Submitted by MrCoffee (user info) at 2005-08-12 02:29:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
genius
Submitted by ajanssen (user info) at 2005-08-12 02:09:31 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Hirgon (user info) at 2005-08-12 01:50:19 EDT (#)
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Thats one super girl.
Submitted by williamson (user info) at 2005-08-12 01:26:43 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Chroniclysm (user info) at 2005-08-12 01:05:41 (#)
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I do hope to see more tales from the life of Priscilla.
Submitted by Chroniclysm (user info) at 2005-08-12 01:05:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I do hope to see more tales from the life of Priscilla.
Submitted by williamson (user info) at 2005-08-12 00:53:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You've done it again Saxon.
Submitted by joedaddy (user info) at 2005-08-12 00:35:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
quite a few quarterbacks here
but no linemen
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2005-08-12 00:08:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks thecaes your right man i got a habbit of trailing through dialogue.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-08-12 00:02:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
What's this? It looks like a Saxon post...yet somehow it doesn't involve him pooping, farting, peeing, or arranging garden gnomes into sexually explicit positions in front of his neighbor's lawn.
Nice work dude. Good story -- if I can offer some criticism:
Your punctuation needs work. If you don't put the punctuations marks in the right places during quoted dialogue, it looks and reads very weird and totally messes with the flow. Most people 'hear' the dialogue in their head, and if the punctuation is off, the dialogue 'sounds' strange. For example:
"Its very pretty Tom" she said "Dad bought it for me for the work I have been doing at the store" he said beaming.
SHOULD read: "It's very pretty Tom," she said. "Dad bought it for me for the work I have been doing at the store." He said, beaming.
And:
"Annie" Tom protested "Leave her alone she is just looking at my new sail".
SHOULD read: "Annie!" Tom protested. "Leave her alone, she's just looking at my new sail."
I hope that doesn't make me sound like an arrogant jerkass. I'm just trying to be helpful.
Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2005-08-12 00:00:36 EDT (#)
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I'll pop in when I get home. It was just really crazy yesterday.
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2005-08-11 23:51:30 EDT (#)
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Why thank you my dear, now why isnt your fine butt on yahoo huh huh.
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-08-11 23:50:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Funny the things that jump at me when I am proofing something, if I ignore them they usually haunt me.
Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2005-08-11 23:49:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow Sweetie. This is even more scary than your ghost story. Plus this was really well written.
You have definitely proven that humor isn't your only forte!
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2005-08-11 23:37:13 EDT (#)
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I hear ya Badass, Funny you say that i did ponder that for a bit but was at a loss what to use.
Thanks for the feedback man.
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-08-11 23:26:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Great stuff man, as usual.
I wanted more here though 'Annie felt the pressure of something close around that organ.'
More than 'that organ'
But I loved the rest.
Submitted by PokeyPecker (user info) at 2005-08-11 23:24:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by joedaddy (user info) at 2005-08-11 23:24:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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